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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hi all

I've written this first OS, don't know if it's good or not, but thought to give it a try, do feel free to share your views

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Posted: 9 years ago
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It was one fine day. Akash's house is shown. Akash was excited and happy and he keeps checking his looks in the mirror and says "It's been 1 month since I took leave from Inde Air. Today I'll surprise her with something special." After checking his looks for the final time he leaves his house.

As Akash drives his car, he notices that the city looks different and says (wonderly) "Everything looks so different, looks like many things has been changed in one month" and then he continues thinking about his surprise plan

He reaches the airport as he walks towards the pilot's room; he notices that the airport too looks different. He changes his mind and goes to the pilot's room. On reaching the room. He finds a group of new pilot's with Karan in the room. The pilot's talk with Karan and addresses him as Captain Karan Mehra. Karan sees Akash and says "Yo Avinash, you already back. How was your trip?" Akash says "Avinash". Karan says "Avinash you look weird, where is your glasses". Akash says "Glasses?" Karan notices it in his pocket and says "Look it's in your pocket, just put it on, you look odd without it". Akash blankly nodes his head. Then a lady enters the pilot's room. Karan gets happy on seeing her while Akash looks shocked. Karan says "Welcome my would be Mrs Karan Mehra." The lady gets embarrassed. Then Karan introduces the lady to the First Officers as Mrs Mansi Karan Mehra. Akash looks at all this shocked. He then goes and holds Mansi's hand and takes her out of the pilot's room. As Akash and Mansi are walking, Mansi says "What are you doing Avinash, leave my hand, you're hurting me". Akash takes her to a corner and pins her there and says "Tell me what's going on here". She says "What do you mean". Akash gets angry and says "Don't act dumb Mahima, what's going on here. Why are our names changed to Avinash and Mansi, what happened here and what happened to our mission". Mahima says "I don't know what's wrong with you Akash, but anyway I'll tell you. It's been 5 years since that mission. We've made a huge mistake and Inde Air had to pay for it.

A huge accident has happened in the Inde Air office building which was done by the terrorist group and the Office was burned, and each and every detail of Inde Air became a part of the flame. And the DIB took the advantage and made us new documents and we again joined Inde Air as new members. And about the terrorist, not all of the members were caught. Then Akash says "But how, did they not doubt us". Mahima says "Since our look was changed no one doubted us". Akash looks shocked. Mahima says "What Akash you look shocked, did you lose your memory or something in your trip". Mahima says "Sorry Captain Avinash, but I have a flight to catch, so please excuse me" and she leaves.

Akash in state of shock walks on the road like an un-existed person. He says "What's going on. How did 4 years pass by? Did something happen to me? Did I lose my memory that I don't remember a thing?" Just then he passes by an electronic shop. There is a news flash in the television there. The news says "Natasha Gupta, the owner of Gupta Empire has won the award of the best entrepreneur of the year". And the reporter is shown having an interview with her. Akash who was already in a state of shock gets more confused seeing this news.

Then he suddenly thinks of Ananya and goes to her house. Shefali opens the door and says "Hi Captain Avinash". Akash says "Hi". Shefali welcomes him in. Ananya's family treats him well and Akash feels awkward. Akash says "Where's Ananya, I wanted to talk with her". Shefali says "Di is not at home." Akash says "Where can I find her?" Shefali says "Don't know". Madhu says "I'm happy that Ananya has finally decided on her marriage". Akash says "Marriage". Madhu says "Why, Ananya did not inform you that Rohit Mafatlal has proposed her a year ago". Shefali says "Yeah, she has always waiting for Akash, who never came back". Akash looks surprised. Shefali says "So in order to resolve her feelings once and for all, she said that she will go to a special place of her and Akash's memories". Akash says "Memories" and asks her "Where is that place?" Shefali says "I don't know". Then Akash leaves from there.

Akash thinks of Shefali's words and thinks of the special place and he goes to a lot of place but he can't find her he gets sad.

Then as he walks down the road he sees a house and remembers something and enters it. He finds a ladies shoes at the doorstep and gets happy and goes in and looks around and then he finally finds her in one of the rooms filled with both Ananya and Akash's photos. He says "Ananya"and goes to turn on the lights and as he goes to turn on the lights. Ananya says "Don't turn on the lights". Akash looks confused and Ananya says "After all I don't want Avinash to see me crying here". Akash looks sad. Then she turns and says "This place is filled with memories between me and Akash". Akash sees her and gets mesmerized by her beauty. Then Akash says "The marriage, will you, with Rohit Mafatlal". Then he goes near her and says "Don't do it. Don't get married". Ananya in-turn says "Why not?"Akash says "Because I I would feel bad". Then he takes his glasses off and says "Because I'm Akash Saluja, so please, don't get married". Ananya looks shocked. Akash says "I don't know what happened but I'm Akash". Just then Ananya cuts him off and says "Ever since I saw you I too thought that you were Akash, as you look just like him". Akash says "I'm not like him, I'm him". Ananya says "Thank you for saying all that and trying to make me feel better". Then she takes his glasses from his hand and says "But..." and continues "I've already made my decision" and makes him wear it and says "I've already waited 4 years... So another 4 will be just fine". Akash looks blankly surprised and she continues "I'll be turning down Rohit sir's proposal tomorrow". Akash gets happy and relieved at this and gives a smile. While Ananya too smiles in reply. Then Akash says "Ananya, I'm really Aka..." Just then he falls on the ground and he calls Ananya's name in pain. Ananya too shouts calling him as Avinash and says "Avinash. Avinash are you alright, can you hear me. Avinash. Akash shouts Ananya's name and wakes up. Akash then says "What a nightmare!" Then his phone rings. He sees the caller and answers it. Ananya says "Where are you Akash, I'm waiting for you, when are you coming". Akash says "I'll be there soon". Then after the call he says "Thank God that it's just a dream". Then he gets ready and leaves.

Edited by saito - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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What the hell was that๐Ÿ˜ฒ๐Ÿ˜ฒ

Baapre

I mean all this was a dream,it was just I was carried away by the update and I recieved just a shock as if I really fall off the bed๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†

It was just more than wonderful and I really loved this story.๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘

By the way has the story ended or there is a next part to it?๐Ÿ˜ณ
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Posted: 9 years ago
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:/ ALL WAS A DREAMMM? :o oho kiya khatarnaak story likhi hain yaar!
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Omggg!!!!!literally i was like what is going on!!!!!!!awesomeโ˜บ๏ธ
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Thank God !!! it was just a dream! dara diya tum ne to. but loved it.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Oh God!! What was that??!!! I was way much shocked!! It was totally a puzzle for me!!! Mujhe chakkar aa raha tha ke kya ho raha hai!!!

Thank God It was only a dream!! Shocking update.. Aise shocks maat diya karo yaar mujhe heart attack aa jayega!!!!! ๐Ÿ˜ฒ๐Ÿ˜†
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Sapne hamesha ajeeb hote hay.Isiliye yeh SAPNE hote hay.i loved this os.๐Ÿ˜ŠPlease write more story like it.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Ohh!! It was a dream...
Very nice OS!!!!!
Is the story ended or there is a next part???
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Paulomi-

What the hell was that๐Ÿ˜ฒ๐Ÿ˜ฒ


Baapre

I mean all this was a dream,it was just I was carried away by the update and I recieved just a shock as if I really fall off the bed๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†

It was just more than wonderful and I really loved this story.๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘

By the way has the story ended or there is a next part to it?๐Ÿ˜ณ



Thnx for the compliment
And this is the end of the story
there might be next part but not confirmed
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