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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hi guys. I'm new to this forum and have been a silent reader for a while. I started watching Airlines and I really liked the idea. So i started writing a short story on it. This is my first attempt at writing a story, so please forgive me if I make any mistakes. I'm posting the first part of it. Please tell me if I should continue or not. All comments and reviews welcome. Thanks!

Chapter 1/Prologue

30st October- 2014

He smashed open the door and held his gun up. But what he saw was far more devastating than even a dozen people, ready to fight him. That type of situation he could handle. But what he saw was something that shattered him from the inside.

"Ananya" he gasped.

She was in a dire state and strapped to a chair with her hands tied by her side. He face was covered in bruises; she had a black eye, a burst lip and he could faintly see scars on her arms and face, something he didn't even want to contemplate at the moment. He realised that her head was drooping and she still hadn't noticed him. He ran to her side, putting away his gun, and started untying the ropes. "Ananya. " He shook her while fiddling with the ropes. "Ananya. Wake up. Please wake up damn it." She wasn't responding and he figured out that she was most probably unconscious. He finished untying the ropes and was about to pick her up, when he heard her whimper.

"Go back. You don't understand, it's a trap. They want you. They will kill you." She was barely audible, but he still heard all her words.

"Shhh. Don't worry. I'm here and nothing will happen to you or me."

"No. leave...immediately...they are here." she whispered.

And then the gunshot filled the room.


Index

Chapter 1/Prologue: Above

Chapter 2: Page 3

Chapter 3: Page 3

Chapter 4: Page 4

Chapter 5: Page 4

Chapter 6: Page 5

Chapter 7: Page 6

Chapter 8: Page 7

Chapter 9: Page 9

Chapter 10: Page 11

Chapter 11: Page 13

Chapter 12: Page 15

Chapter 13: Page 17

Chapter 14: Page 19

Chapter 15: Page 21

Chapter 16: Page 22

Chapter 17: Page 24

Chapter 18: Page 26

Chapter 19: Page 28

Chapter 20: Page 30

Chapter 21: Page 31

Chapter 22: Page 33

Chapter 23: Page 35

Chapter 24: Page 36

Chapter 25: Page 38

Chapter 26: Page 39

Chapter 27: Page 41

Chapter 28: Page 42

Chapter 29: Page 44

Chapter 30/Epilogue: Page 46

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Welcome Nicky,this was very nice..short and well not sweet but adventurous.,just what I like...please continue 👏😊 would love to read more,these OSs are the only things that help us to wait for a week.Thank you for penning it down.., PM me if possible please..
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: KHUSHI-99

Welcome Nicky,this was very nice..short and well not sweet but adventurous.,just what I like...please continue 👏😊 would love to read more,these OSs are the only things that help us to wait for a week.Thank you for penning it down..,


Thank you so much for your kind comment. I was really nervous about posting this but after reading your comment, I feel more confident! Thanks once again.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: Nicky98


Thank you so much for your kind comment. I was really nervous about posting this but after reading your comment, I feel more confident! Thanks once again.

I understand dear,I was damn scared too..while posting my first OS on AkYa..U r most welcome..PM me if possible..
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Posted: 10 years ago
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welcome to the forum dear. .do continue. . nice start. . 😊
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First of all welcome to d forum dear! I have also just stepped into this forum! But i am already enjoying! Trust me u'll have a great time here!😊
And about ur SS, I think its gonna be thrilling 😛 Good start ⭐️ Plz continue...👍🏼
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Ah! It is very intriguing. Glad to see many writers giving a shot on AkYa, having a show only once a week kind of makes us too desperate for more but yeah it was short yet straight to the point. If possible, please make it longer. PM me if possible. Please do continue :)
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Wow yaar, really nice but it was shorter than expected lol... Dil manage more :p
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hi. Thanks all for you amazing comments. I am extremely happy that people liked my work! About the story I'm working on a second part which will be posted on Monday.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Lovely
Missed last week episode
But make it longer
Would be more interesting to read
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