Originally posted by: Khushi_Dillse
Wow... What a awesome update...
I'm too excited about next chapter...
Originally posted by: Dreamful
Thank you for the interesting start 😊 It reminded me of Baahubali a bit 😊
Originally posted by: ErisedWitch45
Great start.
I find it difficult to show action through writing and you have done that so seamlessly. I could picture each line in my head. The 'mountain throwing an arrow of icy wind' etc was beautiful. You could sense the female's (DS, I am assuming) strength of character here, without having to explain it.Waiting to read more. :)
Originally posted by: ErisedWitch45
Absolutely loved it! The way you described the action scenes - I could picture it in my head. Also your description of Mother Earth and her creation who later on started waging wars to promote their superiority was well done.
I love your writing. It's not a drag, everything is clear and to the point yet you retain the beauty. I like the part how you have humanised Indra Dev and Mahishi Devi. With the passage of time, people (of each clan) immortalised them as Gods but they were mere humans - extraordinary but human. It reminds of an Indian author - Amish and his Shiva Trilogy books.were ready to behead each other's head in searching for PEACEThis line was so good. It shows the contradiction - killing to find peace.Looking forward to the next chapter.
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