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Posted: 5 years ago
#31

Originally posted by: Rph09

At first I thought maine padhne mein galti kar di sameer ki jagah rohan ka nam padh liya 🀣 I'm very curious what will happen next!! Continue dear it's very interesting concept.


Hehe nahi nahi bilkul sahi pada hai Sameer nahi Rohan hai Naina ka deewanaπŸ˜† ,let's see Sameer ka kya hogaπŸ˜‰ .. Will update soon.. Thank you for liking πŸ˜ƒ
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Posted: 5 years ago
#32

Originally posted by: lakku19

Wow.. very interesting and different theme.

Looking forward for this .

Thank you πŸ˜› .. I'll update soon
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Posted: 5 years ago
#33
Will you update today ? πŸ˜ƒ Waiting
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Posted: 5 years ago
#34

Originally posted by: Samaina_1990

My goodness! Ekdum dhartiphaad!

Aur yeh FF chahiye mujhe! πŸ‘β­οΈ
Isse badhiya concept forum ke ache ache writers ko bhi na aaya hoga keh rahi hun main! Kya gazab twist hai- Naina aur Rohan ka affair (maine note kiya tune Rakesh ko pehle ki tapka diya...no regrets here...πŸ˜†)
Aur Taiji as usual...zehereeli mahila! Huh! Naam na lun uska!
Vaise to ek time pe mujhe Sameer aur Naina ka naam kisi aur se sapne mein bhi judta dekh bahot taqleef hoti thi (ab ka scene to tujhe pata hi hai! πŸ˜†)
So Sameer ko Sunaina ne dhokha diya- na jaane kyun meri aankhon ke saamne Jab We Met ka Aditya Kashyap aa gaya aur main is bevde Sameer pe bhi lattu ho gayi...aur kya shayari hai waah! Main soch rahi thi tune khud likhi hai kya...but then I saw the note that it was from google! πŸ˜ƒ
Aur Naina aur Rohan romance karte bhi sweet lag rahe the...Rohan flirty ho raha tha aur Naina bhi khushi se pagal!
Ab mera vella dimag bahot kuch sochne laga hai- Sameer shaadi me gaya nahi...kahin baraat mein kuch hone to nahi wala! As much as I want Sameer with Naina, I can't imagine to see anything happening to Rohan here. πŸ˜”
Sameer ko Naina pasand nahi...aa jayegi beta...shuru mein hamesha aisa hi hota hai!
Kudos to you for introducing such a novel concept! Ek stroke mein sabko cleanbowl kar diya!
Love this story! And kamse kam 100 parts chahiye mujhe!!

Do update soon yaar!
Love
Sur


Sur thank you ekdum dhartiphaad comment k liye πŸ˜ƒ haan maine Rakesh ko tapka diya, us barking dog k dialogues likhne ka mood nhi tha so raasta saaf krdiya maine peaceful story ka πŸ˜† ... And u Sameer Naina pr tere mere vichar kitne milte h u already know that πŸ˜‰

And on demand Isko SS bna diya h Maine πŸ˜† .. I hope tujhko aage k parts bhi ache lage ... Stay tuned and keep motivating me like always πŸ˜ƒ
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Posted: 5 years ago
#35

Originally posted by: TereLiyeMINU

Will you update today ? πŸ˜ƒ Waiting

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Plz update soon...πŸ˜ƒ
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Off course πŸ˜† ... Updating darling .. I know I m late but u know na how busy I m πŸ˜† soo delay hogya . . Maaf karo insaaf karoπŸ˜†
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Posted: 5 years ago
#36
No maafi until you update... Please update it soon ..Though I know you are busy but try soon 😳
My internet sucks πŸ₯± I want to read it before it again goes to its Sasuraal

So yeah greedily waiting to ravish the update πŸ˜ƒ
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Posted: 5 years ago
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Hello everyone I am back with another part . Thank you for liking the concept ,hope u like this part as well. Keep showering your love and motivation
Part 2


"Papa aap kidhar ho main kabse aapka wait kar rahi hu, dekho agar aap nahi aaye toh main khana nahi khaungi " squealed the little girl on phone. "Bachhe papa ne apko kaha tha na voh is weekend aapse milne nahi aasakte hai, is weekend mujhko bahut important kaam hai " said Rohan trying to calm down the little girl who was not in a mood to relent ." Papa please, dekho agar aap nahi aaye toh main khana nahi khaungi aur dawai bhi nahi lungi, agar aap ziddhi ho toh main bhi hu " said Ahana hastily and put down the receiver annoyingly. In an attempt to convince the little girl he dialled the number again and this time a lady in late twenties picked up the phone " Shefali tumse ek bachi nahi sambhalti ,bola tha na maine is weekend nahi aapaunga shadi hai meri tum ache se janti ho, sambhal nahi sakti tum aur bachi ne na khana khaya hai na dawai aakhir dhyan kaha hai tumhara " spoke Rohan in an irritated tone. " Rohan ji maine Ahana ko bahut samjhaya par voh samjhne ko raazi nahi hai aur dawai nahi lene ki wajah se uska fever bhi badh gya hai,zyada baat bhi nahi kar rahi ," said Shefali in a huff .Creased lines of worry etched on his forehead on hearing Ahana's condition," baat krwao zara usey dobara" said Rohan.
Shefali caressed the little girl's hair who was lying down on the bed sulking by the fact that her father won't be coming to meet her for the routinely weekend visit this week too. She had been eagerly waiting to see him from past 2 weeks, wanted to show him the trophy she got for standing third in painting competition held in the nearby church ,but her father was too busy in his personal commitments that he couldn't meet her from past two Saturdays ,the weekly ritual she would eagerly wait for. "Ahana , beta papa se baat karo, aise naraaz nahi hote, unhone aapko promise kiya tha na isbaar jab voh aayenge aapke liye surprise hoga." said Shefali trying to pacify the little girl . "Nahi mujhe unse baat nahi karni, voh jhoote hai," sighed Ahana heavily.
Seeing Ahana's reluctance she gave in "Rohan ji 4 saal ki bachi hai, pura hafta hogya bimar rehte hue chidchada rhi h ,aapko aadhe ghnte k liye hi sahi par aana chahiye tha, khana and dawai na lene se aur tbiyat kharab hogyi hai bechari ki ," .Rohan lost his calm on hearing her words " tum wahan kisliye ho sirf 2-3 hafto ki baat thi ,samjhaya tha na maine tumko aur tumse dhyan nahi rakha gya, bimar kardiya bachi ko."
"Dekhiye Rohanji mujhpr gussa nikalne se kuch hoga nhi, bachi paida kardene se baap ki zimmedari khatm nahi hoti, ek toh pehle se hi bachi ko ghar se dur rakha hai, ab apni shadi hai toh usko hafte mein ek baar jo milne aate hai voh bhi nahi aaye toh yaad toh karegi na ladki, maine toh pehle se bola tha 4 saal ki hogyi hai ab school mein admission krwa dijiye mn lagega toh aapko zyada miss nahi karegi,par aapko toh meri baat galat lgti hai, kab tak usko is chaar deewari mein band rakhenge. " Pang of guilt hit him hard,
he realised how he was ignoring his fatherly duties and got drowned in his own happiness without even realizing how badly his daughter needs him. "Tum bachhi ka khayal rakho aur khana khilane ka try karo usko," saying so he disconnected the call.
Vishaka who was listening to all the conversation gave a questioning look to Rohan to which he lowered his eyes and tried not to meet his mom's gaze "Beta aaj k din nahi hum pehle hi itne late hogye hai wahan Naina aur pura Aggarwal khandaan tera wait kar raha hoga, baarat zyada late hui toh log sawaal karenge." Rohan tend to ignore her words "Sun raha hai na tu kya bol rahi hu main " asked Vishaka . "Maa aap bhi jaanti hai mera jawab, mujhe jana hoga, aap log nikalyi main pauch jaunga time se" said Rohan firmly. "Nikalyi matlab aaj teri shadi hai tere dost ki nahi ki tu late aaye aur kaam chal jayega, baarat tere bina kaise jayegi" questioned Vishaka in an angry tone. Rohan was not in a mood to relent he stepped closer and held her gently by her shoulders and kissed her forehead lightly " Maa aap meri zimmedari janti hai, main selfish nahi hoskta, meri beti bimar hai jana hoga, main Naina ko jaanta hu voh samjhegi mujhe, shadi important hai, voh cancel nahi hogi, baraat k liye aap sambhal loge mujhe pta hai ." Vishaka though was pissed off with his attitude before she could say anything Rohan bid him goodbye and promised to reach the venue possibly on time. Vishaka stood numb not knowing how to face Somani and other members but eventually after lot of hustle bustle and arguments everyone left for the wedding venue in different cars.
45minutes later Sameer walked down the stairs and found the hallway empty and calm. All the guests had left for the wedding venue but he was greeted by Ramdhari "Bhaiya aap uth gye, aapke liye kuch khane ko laau kyunki baaki sab toh ab kal subah hi aayenge nayi bhabhi ko leke"said Ramdhari excitedly "O nayi bhabhi k chamche, nayi bhabhi jab aayegi tb aayegi tab tak apne purane bhaiya k liye ek cup coffee le aa, dekh raha hu jbse hum is ghar mein aaye hai tune mera khayal rakhna hi chod diya hai," said Sameer dejectedly.
On listening to Sameer's allegations Ramdhari immediately became defensive "Aisa kahe keh rahe ho bhaiya, humare liye toh aap sabse pehle hai, nanaji nahi rahe par aapka khayal rakhna humari zimmedari hai aur uske bich nayi bhabhi toh kya koi nahi ayega ." On hearing him Sameer smiled and playfully hit his forehead "Is ghar mein sabko aansu bahane ki aadat h,abhi maa aur ab tu, jaa coffee le aa," commanded Sameer. Ramdhari smiled and was about to leave when Sameer asked him "Acha sun barat nikli par band baje ki awaaz nahi aayi, Rohan zyada dukhi tha kya ." Ramdhari knew about the bond Sameer and Rohan shared "Bhaiya sach bole toh chote bhaiya dukhi toh they par band baaja isliye nahi hua kyunki memsaab ne bola chote bhaiya ko koi bhut zaruri kaam aagya tha toh voh sidhe wahi pauchenge." crinkles of confusion surfaced on his forehead and eyes furrowed in suscipion, he further enquired "Acha aur teri nayi bhabhi unke swagaat ka kya, tu karega intezaam ." ... "Nahi bhaiya memsaab raat ko aayengi na voh thodi phere dekhengi, baaki thoda bhut humko bta gyi hai kya krke rakhna hai " answered Ramdhari. "Acha thik hai, ek kaam krna tu band wale ko bula lena, mere bhai ka swagat main bhi karunga maa k sath , shadi par nahi gya, pta hai mujhe naraaz hoga " said Sameer. "Ji bhaiya jaise aap kahe aur kuch chahiye ho toh bta dena main coffee leke aata hu" saying so Ramdhari left for the kitchen to prepare his coffee.
Sameer was still not very much convinced with the idea of Rohan leaving without baraat, he was so excited for his wedding then how come on the D day he had to run for an emergency and suddenly he realised something " Yeh ladka nahi sudhar sakta shadi k din bhi isko wahan jana tha , pta nahi yeh sab karke aakhir kya saabit krna chahta hai, yeh pakka wahi gya hoga usey milne, ab Naina ka nahi socha intezaar kar rahi hogi, saare lectures mere liye hi hote hai... Huhhh " he thought to himself.
Meanwhile Ramdhari came back with the coffee and offered it to Sameer . He took a sip and gave Ramdhari an irritated glance " Tujhe thik se coffee bnani nahi aati, bas badi badi baatein krwalo, kya bol raha tha zimmedari n all, kitni kadwi hai coffee," Ramdhari looked puzzled a minute earliar he was in a good mood and now suddenly he was back to being moody and rude, Ramdhari himself had added 2 spoons sugar how can that be bitter definately something else was wrong and he was venting out his frustration by blaming the coffee.
Seeing Ramdhari lost in his own thoughts Sameer felt more annoyed "Kya soch raha hai, apni kisi zimmedari ka ehsaas hai tujhe, nahi na, kuch seekh apne chote bhaiya se." Ramdhari couldn't understand now how coffee and zimmidari were related to each other. Observing his confusion Sameer further added "aisa kya dekh raha h mujhe sahi toh keh raha hu, aaj bdi bdi zimmedariyan uthakr ghum raha h, bete hone ki zimmedari, bhai hone ki zimmedari, business man hone ki zimmedari aur baap hone ki zimmedari... Huhhh... Pta nhi kb mere chote bhai se mera baap bn gya ...pta hi na chala... Aur main... Aakhir kon hu sirf ek haara hua aadmi... Na koi na jeene ka maksad na koi khawish bas dusro k ehsaano par jee raha hu ." Before Ramdhari could understand anything the telephone ring went up in shrills to which Sameer reacted annoyingly "Ab mujhe kya dekh raha h ja utha phone ."
On the other hand Naina stood by the window staring at the silver moon which shone intimidatingly on the land beneath it . There was a strange calmness around. The tiny stars twirled and danced along the sky in different patterns. Though she could see the moon shining but still the eerie darkness around her was unsettling. She was waiting for his man all dressed up in her bright red wedding lengha. It was already 9.30 and there was no sign of him , she trusted him even more than she trusted herself, she knew he will definitely come as Rohan never broke his promise but her insecurities and taijis cussing words began clouding her mind, what if Rohan doesn't end up here as he suddenly realised that she was a cursed child but the next moment she reassured herself no this can't happen as Rohan's love was above all these superstitions and he had already informed her that he might get late.
Naina's trance broke when Preeti along with Swati entered the room and sounded little worried "behen jijaji ab tak nhi aaye, ektoh pehle hi bina barat k unke ghrwale aagye aur bole voh aate hi honge pr unka koi aata pta hi nhi, upar se taiji ka zeher toh khatm nahi hota mauka milgya unko toh aur bhi "
"Kya pta jijaji ne socha ab bhi time hai bhaag lo isey pehle Naina masterni bnkar zindagi bhar unki class leti rahe "added Swati in teasing tone. Seeing no change in Naina's expressions Swati held her hands and tried to cheer her up "Chinta mat kar aate honge shayad traffic mein fasey ho, shadi hai teri smile kar."
Naina turned towards the window looked up towards the shining moon and sighed heavily "hn voh zaroor aayenge."









It was the second part.. . Let me know your views through likes and comments .
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Posted: 5 years ago
#38

Originally posted by: TereLiyeMINU

No maafi until you update... Please update it soon ..Though I know you are busy but try soon 😳

My internet sucks πŸ₯± I want to read it before it again goes to its Sasuraal

So yeah greedily waiting to ravish the update πŸ˜ƒ

Updated πŸ˜ƒ now u can read πŸ˜† take your time
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Posted: 5 years ago
#39
Really loved Sameer here
His stance is fixed and he seems to be frustrated.
Let's see what will happen next
Looking forward to read more
Edited by suhaaana - 5 years ago
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Posted: 5 years ago
#40
Hi Meena πŸ€—
Thank you for updating it amidst your demanding work schedules.I can empathize how difficult it is to manage and type the update.A big thank you for that.
Coming to the update-
Reading this wonderful update I remember those beautiful quotes, and I would surely quote one here..which pretty sums up the update -
"Life is Unpredictable.Don't ever get too comfortable.Always be ready for a change".Truly this SS has captured the flavour of this quote so immaculately.The mind boggling twists and turns you have inserted;my dear! I want to read the whole story right now.You are truly checking my patience. But I shall wait to savour it not as fast food but as that finger licking and lip smacking Dum Biryani...😳

The starting word of 'Papa' ...So many feels..I will not ponder on 'yeh kiska bacha hai' theories..Again I will wait.I can smell that you have something very very interesting under your sleeves to surprise us and throw us into some good shock.What's a story without a good plot and much better plot twist..And Meena! I tell you someone might get deluded by your title.Jeevansathi will always imply Romance and much more romance only..But you have such a fine intricately woven story with you..I am so glad you decided to pen this down.You have a fine flair for writing in you.Keep writing and getting better πŸ‘πŸΌ

I think I wavered away a bit..Coming back to the update-
Shefali taking care of cutie Aahana was a sure surprise element.Her dynamics with Rohan gave several vibes..I can't put my finger what's the history actually.Keeping everything aside my heart really went away to the poor baby..She is ill.Every child would want her /his parents.That adorable munchkin has won a prize too..Meena! Can you make me a character in your story so that I can give her a hug..You made me cry.Why do parents bring child into this big bad world only to leave them to fend for themselves,begging for love and presence.😭 Though it was so emotional this was my favourite part.

How beautifully showed the symbolism of Moon and the surrounding clouds..That scene was so unnerving.I literally shivered with that fraught silence of dark night.And the nasty wait for long..Topping it all Rohan's decision ,so immediate and untimely..Sameer's anger was justified but then his anger on Rohan's visits is another mystery.The reason has to be rock solid.
And a big thank you to you again for giving such a screen space to Ramdhari.That character was not explored much in show.But I am liking how you are showing Sameer and his bond..He doesn't feel like just a servant but an intimate friend of Sameer..Just a fine characterization.Kudos to you πŸ‘

There is so much to say but for now I would conclude.I tell you this is a magic storytelling and hence I request to update it quick.
Thanks for the PM and keep coming with your bestest of ideas.
With love-
Minu

Edited by TereLiyeMINU - 5 years ago
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