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Posted: 19 years ago

Originally posted by: jnawaz

heena my love...just read update...woudl post long commene but have to get back to studyig...have finals tomorrow...ill try and post a longer comment later...great update...loved it...as usual...oh and pls pm me too...thanks...
JAZ



Hey Jaz..
1st of all GOOD LUCK!!!!!!!!!!!! i hope u pass!! finals.. man the scary ones!

its ok.. uve commented like this is fine.. 😳 it means a lot.. my update is here for ever.. ur finals is only one day..

thanks for likin the update!!

k ill PM u! 😳

Henna x
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Posted: 19 years ago
Sweetie when are you updating!!!!!!!!!

chick XXX
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Posted: 19 years ago

Originally posted by: Rani Rx


ohh man that was funny 😆 and good! 😊 cant wait to c what hapens nxt! plz cont soon! 😊



LOL aww thank u... glad u liked it!

ok i think i should start typin the update 😆 hehe..i hope to see ur comments afteri updated.. 😳

Henna x
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Posted: 19 years ago

Originally posted by: shaz81

Sweetie when are you updating!!!!!!!!!

chick XXX



woah! thats a shock to see u!!! 😆

im updain later tonite 😉😳 or in 13.00 hours! AKA 1 pm 😆

im goin shoe shoppin and smart clothes shopppin 😕 i got a job nah.. 😆 trust me smart clothes and shoes do not mix! i prefer hoodies, jeans and trainers! 😆 this is goin to shock everone in my family 😆

Henna x
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Posted: 19 years ago

Originally posted by: bugs_bunny

i love this bani who takes charge.. driving jai crazy.. hehehe i knw.. its really funny! 😆

and i have to say i LOVE the tony's name.. tarmeet... poor guy 😆🤣 😆 i laughed so much when i read it and bani insists on calling him by that... 😆 LMAO! im gonna reveal how his name had changed soon.. i hope u like it 😳

so.. where does bani go? maybe her mom is still alive but in a coma??
or she goes to visits kids at orphanges or something? 😕 i have no clue...
u're gonna tell us soon right..?? yeh soon.. actually sooner then u think 😉 good views tho... 👏

continue soon am plannin too 😉

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Posted: 19 years ago

Originally posted by: RaviMalhotra69

I finally managed to read all the updates at once today! 😃 Awww i wasnt goin to bug u about it.. i knw u have romance 😆 so sweet of u to read!

Well done Henna! You're writing style and story are both excellent! 👏 aww thanks.. my english teachers have beeen telling me i have awkward sentence structure, how i wish u were my teacher 😆

It's great the way you have put light hearted moments into the story to move it forward. Part 4 was brilliant! I loved the way Jai got whupped with a vase! 😆 Seriously, I actually laughed whilst I was reading that part! LMAO i luv that wrd wupped.. i use it in my lingo soo much! 😆 awww i hop u wernt in the library wen u read this! otherwise laughin at a screen is not considered healthy 😆

Also the way, Bani keeps appearing and Jai's reaction everytime is brilliant ("'Stay away from me! I swear!' jai started to go deeper and deeper into his bed" was funny 🤣 ) ! The often comical communication between the two of them is simply brilliant - I actually like it better than in KS!
LMAO! u gettin tired of suna suna then 😆 me too! i had to do somit to get rid of it..
LOL more scenes like them to cum.. 😉

Of course, I knew even before I read the updates that Tony aka Tarmeeeeeeeeeeeeet was going to end up being the next biggest thing since Hrithik Roshan! 😆 If Tony was reads this FF, he'll be very proud of you! LMAO! Hrithik roshan! 😆 😆😆 yeh man! tony rocks.. bechara im gonna make his life nicer then Ks one.. 😉 afterall his loyal fan is writin the FF 😆 i still dont knw the Realy Tony's name u knw 😆

Anyways, I hope you continue to make awesome updates like the ones that you've been making! Hopefully the KS writers will learn something about cool storylines from your FF! 😃 i hope they learn that tony is much better then a butlar!! 😆

Keep up the great work! 👍🏼

God bless.



Hey mango Bhaiya! [hope u dont mind-wiv ppl like chick about, its a must 😆]

thanks for the wrds of encouragement!! it means alot..
i hope to see comments from time to time.. its ok if u cant..

Henna x
PS Ranvir is defo in my FF 😉 minus Raashi of course 😆
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Posted: 19 years ago

Originally posted by: Ektas_Angel

LMAO that is the best fan fiction ever man i cannot belive i aint read it till now 😆 LMAO! im not sure about best.. but i think its ok timepass 😆


Firstly tonys got another indian name 🤣 only you could do that lol heck yeh! Tony ka loyal fan! i seriously hope that the Kreatives take my idea!! 😆 ill be famous for somit 😆

Then the language especially sahils is tooo good 😆 aww u noticed my hindi!!!! 😳 it takes me ages to write!!! 😆

The couples are soo cute 😳 😳 aww thanks.. Rano and sahil are a real life couple and Jai and Bani well.. just my imagination 😃

That vase inccident was funny then rano threatning the same to sahil 😆 LMAO! well the the real life couple had a tiff.. and she was like dont think im not capable of damage.. i was in stitches!! 😆

keep it up I DEMAND A UPDATE!! HAILA! dont worry nina! its cumin! 😆 no charu please! 😆

I need a break this made me sooo laugh🤣 LMAO! aww breathe hun! in out in out!

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Posted: 19 years ago

Originally posted by: Henna 786

Hey Hey to you too LMAO

Thank you all for your wonderful comments i love reading them.. i really appriciate it.. 😳 Mine the most nah 😉!!!

Seems like some have caught my prediction fever 😆 oh o! hehe.. LOL i would rather have Henna;s prediction fever then Ekta flu !!!😆

thank you all those who Pmed me.. it was very thoughtful of you guys.. 😳Bless so sweet

this part is a filler of things to cum i had to have it in there.. i knw its not great but bear wiv me 😆 Fishying for compliments I see LMAO!!!!

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Part 5

Day 2 in the hell house also knwn as Walia Mansion 🤣!!!!

'Tarmeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeet' Jai yelled coughing and laughing 🤣!!!

'Why are you calling Tony, im here nah' Bani walked into the room with the pooja thali in her hands..

'Wat are you doing here early.. wheres Tarmeet/Tony.. what ever he wants to be called' Bani starts waving the Thali in his face 'Kya kara hi ho?' coughing ' get it away from me!' 🤣!!!

'shh.. mausi neh kaha hai!' still waving it around..

'Slowly! God you can cause a fire! Hey hey hey! Stop.. don't come closer!'

Mausi was giggling like a school girl at the door..

'Mausi what is this..' hes like is she gonna hurt me again LOL

'Munna, don't worry shes just taking away any evil eye' More like giving him evil eye LMAO

'Are u sure?!' giving Bani the eye.. See what i mean 🤣!!!!

'ok stop arguing, munna what do you want for breakfast today?'

'ill have what I usually have..'

'that is..' Bani butted in.. putting the tray down and opening a file next to jai on the bed..

'Why should I tell you, tell Tony he'll prepare it'

'tum dono.. uff!' Mausi walked off.. not before peeping through the door one last time.. smiling she walked off.. Bless her match making is working i love it sweetie 😉!!!

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In the office it was like any other day, secretary taking calls, inbetween filing her nails and putting her feet on the desk. I hope your not like this at your new job LMAO 🤣!!!!!!!!!!

'Sahil?' Rano gingerly knocked on his cabin, it opened slightly, she could smell the CK fragrance, WHAT he weres my fav perfume i just bought some more last week DAMN i smell like that Sahil🤢!!!

'Rano?!' Sahil crept behind her holding a file above her head

'Don't scare me like that! You saw what happen to Jai sir, don't think im not capable of making you feel the same pain as him..' 🤣 or even more LMAO

Sahil chuckled at her comments and made her sit down in his chair, 'what made you come to my cabin today?'

'nothing, I just wanted to talk, I got bored sitting there by myself, watching the planes go by through the window, then watching Priya with her legs up like shes a model, how does she do it, I make my legs a little higher they start hurting, I think I should follow her diet' putting her pen to her mouth and watching Priya paint her nails carefully through the blinds.Rano he likes you not priya GET over it !!!!!!!!

'You and a diet! No need, ur perfect as you are, btw the only person I hope you are goin to impress is me remember.. no one else.. Trust me.. your 100 times better then Priya, anushka, laila, Gurdeep, Sunai…'

🤣 🤣 🤣 I knew it what a terrible flirt LMAO

'Wait your talk to all these women? I thought I was the only one' flirting slightly moving closer to his desk and re arranging a few items

'you are, trust me I don't even know anything about them… I only talk to you and you know it, the rest er don't see me the way you do.' Silence 'oh come on there has to be another reason why you are here… you and in my cabin for a chat please, not even im falling for this one.. come on soniye tell me' encouraging her to speak Bless he was all tongue tied then he changed the topic samrt move LOL

'ok, so your not as dumb as I thought then' she said smilingly,

'nope, whats the matter, why are you low for? You never called me on the intercom this morning either for your lovely breakfast that I make' laughing knowing very well she hates his hand made breakfast.. 'kya hua Rano, come on look at me, kya hua?' getting slightly worried..

'kuch nahin, I just miss Di, shes normally around the house and in office, but nowadays shes hardly at home, she hardly speaks on the phone, like we used to always chat in the night about our day, yesterday she just fell asleep, zonked out to the world,' Rano started playin with her top. 'I know Di has a life, but I haven't said a word to her in two days, Sahil two days!' AWWWWWWW thats how i feel if i dont get text from you i'm like weres sweetie gone😭!!!!!!!!

Sahil understood her predicament he wrapped his arms around her and let her silently cry 'Rano look don't worry, I know its hard, but come on if you start crying how will she feel when she knows?'OI besharam get your hands off Rano, oh he is only comforting her WELL thats okay then !!!!

'she'll love the attension' Rano smiled jokily

'that's better that seems like my Rano, look if you think your missing your Di, then come down to my house, actually..' getting up off the chair Rano needs to meet Masi to get approval LMAO🤣!!!!

'come on.. get up,' grabbing Rano by her arms

'Sahil! Watch it, wat are you doing'

'come on, don't worry you'll love me more then you already do for this.. come on' he held her by her waist and pushed her through the doors.. 'trust me..' he whispered TRUST i trust Tony more the i trust you !!!!!!

Pulling up at the mansion Rano was led towards the lounge, 'stay here ill be back, don't worry you'll be alright, by the way, what do u think of the house? Ok wait tell me when I get back, just wait here' Sahil skipped up the stairs and had disappeared in seconds.

Rano stood around looking at the paintings, she was jolted out her thoughts when she heard Bani screaming her name..

'RANO!!!!!!!!!'

'Di..' she screamed back equally excited..

'kya hua tumhe, Sahil said that you were feeling unwell, so he dropped you here,' checking her temperature with her hands, then putting her face against her cheek, clicking her tongue she said 'nah kuch nahi, ur temperature is fine, what happen? Did you eat from outside again, Rano I told you how many times, never eat from outside, you never know wat you might be eati..'

'Di im fine seriously, just… felt like seeing you that's all, I haven't spoken to you in ages that's why,'

'oh' slightly chocked 'you should have told me' getting a little tearyBless i wish i had sister now 😭!!!!!!!!!

Upstairs from the balcony Sahil gives a thumbs up to Rano and walks into his mamas room Ok this Sahil is mega cute !!!!!!!!

'Er Sahil, Rano ko kya hua? You rushed Bani off, we were in a meeting talking about the project your supposed to be handling'

'mamaji, kuch nahi, woh Rano was missing Bani so I thought id let them talk, today is the 1st time Rano came to me, I had to help her out, what sort of friend would I be if I didn't help her.' 😉Only friends HAHA!!!

'oh thank god you took the paagal away then.. phew.. she was beginning to annoy me.. she just chats and chats and chats.. she reminds me of Daadi wen she watches her dramas.. kitna bolti hai' 🤣 Jai called Bani PAAGAL soooo funny!!!!

'y do u keep on pestering her for, I think she's really nice, she took care of the whole office by herself and shes juggling ur life as shes ur PA, shes neglected her sister just for your health may I add!' sahil answered bk.. Yeah and lots more !!!!!!

'no its nothing like that I just find her funny to work with, shes carefree, she speaks her mind, I just like teasing her the way she does it to me..' Jai answered truthfully, sighing and......???????

'mamaji, can I ask you a question' Sahil spoke

Jai looked thoughtful 'haan go ahead.. ask away'

'What coloured water have you been giving your plant.. its gone Yellow!' Sahil asked laughing.. 🤣 🤣 🤣 🤣!!!!!!!!!!

Jai grabbed a pillow from behind and threw it at him, 'I thought u were going to ask me a serious question!' Sahil and serous no way !!!!!

'I don't want to get all senti now, come on, Bani and Rano are shedding tears, I don't want to show any tears that too in front of you, you'll never let me live it down EVER' He grabbed the pillow and threw it back not even tears of laughter !!!!

--- Several hours later ---

Rano, Sahil, Jai and Bani were in Jai's study discussing the work,

'Di, Jai sir can we have a break please im really tired,' leaning her head on Bani's shoulder

'Haan, rano you take Anu's room and lie down there for a bit if you like, then later on once everyone comes bk from the Mandir we will all go down and then ill get Tarmeeeeeeet to drop you off home' elongating Tony's new found name.. Poor Rano Jai making her work to hard and Jai dear stop teasing poor Tony he works hard for you !!!!!!!

'mamaji' picking up the files and tapping them on the table to make them straight 'did you find out how our loyal butler came from Tarmeet to Tony?'

Bani also helping getting the stray papers together 'Don't embarrass him, hes nice, bechara, I bet he hates me for bringing his name like that up.' 🤣 🤣 🤣 i would if my name was Tarmet!!!!!

'Bani don't u have to go now? I mean its coming up to 2.45 we went over slightly,' Oh dear whats this raaz please give me clue swetie its killing me LMAO!!!!!!!

Sahil waited for an answer from Bani, 'yeh don't worry I have it sorted… I don't need to go today im goin tomrw onwards again' ok this is evenmore puzzling !!!!!

'Where do you go at 2.30.. must be a special place or a special someone perhaps' Sahil questioned You go Sahil ask your soon to be mami were the heck she goes !!!!!!!

'someone' Bani answered 'don't worry ill tell you when the time is right' Yeah like in next upate ok !!!!!!!!!!😕

'But..' Sahil was stopped by jai as he held his arm, Sahil looked at jai and understood Yep she will tell you ALL when she is ready !!!!

Tell me wat you think.. I knw this is boring it's a filler for the next parts..

IF you want a PM indicatin i have updated then leave a message or PM me and ill tell you everytime i update 😉

Henna x

Well here is my big comment as promised and i dont need a PM a text will do LMAO 🤣!!!!!!!!!

Chick XXX

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Posted: 19 years ago

Originally posted by: Henna 786



woah! thats a shock to see u!!! 😆

im update later tonite 😉😳 or in 13.00 hours! AKA 1 pm 😆

im goin shoe shopping and smart clothes shopping 😕 i got a job nah.. 😆 trust me smart clothes and shoes do not mix! i prefer hoodies, jeans and trainers! 😆 this is going to shock everyone in my family 😆

Henna x

OH my god my sweetie a hoodie JAAN that's so not a good look and do you realise what i spent in my new job on clothes ZILCH i have to where uniform a horrible tee shirt and jumper YUCK 🤣 but hey at least unlike you i can save my money LMAO 🤣 🤣 🤣, then i can buy more stuff on week end LMAO 🤣!!!!!!!!

chick XXX

PS y so shocked you should know by now i like to bug you every Saturday about your update !!!!!!!!!!!

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Posted: 19 years ago

Originally posted by: shaz81

Well here is my big comment as promised and i dont need a PM a text will do LMAO 🤣!!!!!!!!!

Chick XXX


LMAO! text will be cumin ur way soon..
thanks for the loooong comment!! 😳

let me write up the next parts 😆

Henna x

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