Ariya FF:'Deception,Intrigue..'#3:New thread link:P 47 - Page 11

Originally posted by: devildiva21

hahaha bechari rii😆😉

Originally posted by: benaz

Hey! So I know I'm lagging behind on the comments part but I will soon defo get to them but meanwhile when I saw you had updated I just couldn't retain myself haha I have missed you and your work like seriously you won't believe.

Coming to chapter 7A it was totally mindblowingly too good. I liked how you started out with Arjun's various moments of not knowing how to react. But for me what was striking was the juxtaposition of his feelings- the feelings as you said of a man "in the throes of passion" and then how those feelings totally changed to somewhat being cold and detached. I simply loved how you did your phrasing :) And Riya's reaction to that was nicely described. It was as if I could literally imagine Riya doing that in the show haha and to top it all Arjun's smile at the end that was awesome I'm going to enjoy seeing Arjun in the predator role :D

On the other hand the trio's feelings were so rightly described. I liked how Shree admired Rathore's inner courage though he himself was in a turmoil inside. The way you ended this chapter with the writing in red kinda sets me on the edge.

As far as chapter 7B is concerned you simply know you're such a fantastic writer. I like how you balanced it out with having Riya's thought processing as well and how you pointed out that even she was a mere mortal subject to passion that too attracted to someone like Arjun. No chance of evading that!

I was thinking about Shree's slap to Riya. Was there any underlying message somewhere? I felt that because he was kinda the closest to Riya that he was permitted such an act since neither Chottu nor Rathore would ever raise their hand on her even though Chottu was close to Riya as well. The idea itself that he slapped her showed their close relationship. How Anita Shukla saved the moment was nice as if some comic relief. Awaiting the arrival of Arjun and his input should be fun. I would love to see him explode :P

I hope this somehow makes up for not commenting recently. Waiting for part C impatiently!

Originally posted by: AnjuRish

really worried abt arjuns reactions

really looking ahead to anita and comissonors story

Originally posted by: xaviara

Thank you for an amazing update, I really wanted to like both the updates but for some reason IF is not allowing me to like any posts :/

Loved Both the chapters immensely, and was marveling at the intensity of them ! God help Riya now, Arjun is definitely ready to kill her with his bare hands :P Shree slapping Riya was ceratinly a shock but I can understand his emotional outburst.

Originally posted by: Anushass

hmmm what to say dear... you write so well that i have no words to tel that... all the feelings n emotions are so well captured that we feel like seeing the characters while reading...
awww shree slapped riya... poor guy what else can he do... they all are very hurted by this... and moreover in confusion whether to be happy bcoz riya is alive or to bcome sad because she betrayed her... after all this dilemma finally their anger has won n now we have to see how will they react when the truth is revealed..

Originally posted by: Aabish_02

Amazing Awesome mindblowing and fantastic part
riya thoughts were amazing
I am eager to know about riya past
I hope arjun rathore shree and chottu forgive her
Chottu pov was awesome
OHHH MY GOD...Shree slaped riya
it was unexpected because he was very close friend of her but I can understand his emotions
he felt betryed and was very angry with riya.
their feelings and emotions were very well written and amazing
API YOU ARE A WONDERFUL WRITER
WHENEVER I READ THE UPDATE I M SHORT OF WORDS
Api plz update next part soon and thanks for the pm
take care😊

Originally posted by: madmadona

awesome update
aww poor riya
arjun is ready to kill her
shree is slapping her
all of them are fuming on her
& turning their face away
really feel bad for riya
eagerly waiting to know riya's past
& arjun's reaction
cont soon

Originally posted by: IshqDewaani

👏👏

No words! just huge round of applause!

update soon!

Originally posted by: Mishti_k5

1st of all congrats dr 4 nw thread

Thanx 4 pm me

It is fantastic ,fab,amazing ,jhikas update

Omg he slap her

She quit

Omg her Bose came

Plsss update soon

Sorry 4 chutko cmmnt become me 4m mobile

Originally posted by: jia03

Amazing update 😊

nice build up for the next part👏

waiting eagerly...

update soon

thanks for the pm😊