SwaRon FF : Kahi Ankahi [JDM S2] Chap 11 : 111 - 25/10/2013 [Updated] - Page 8

Wow Very nice update:-):-):-)
Loved it:-)

Hey Marium congratulations for the second edition of one of your most loved works "jab dil miley"...you are a magnificient writter and thats beyond any doubt... sorry i am super late in reading this one because already two chapters are posted here...but i have caught up with everything in one go...

Now coming to this edition and its prologue it sounds exiting to see what plot you have in mind and what is more interesting is charachterisation...its really very different yet so much captivating...everybody seems to have their unique role in taking the story forward... so great job there and ofcourse all the credits for that go to you for thinking this amazing plot and charecters...

First update as you said was evident to show bond between mr. dev and sharon and you showed it beautifully...and as from what i see it was important to establish the story from angle where you can justify sharon's pressence in their life...and now that you showed what importance sharon had in life of mr.dev it would be easy to understand future developments in story...first part had some real cute moments when sharon went in swayam's cabin and cleaned stuff...it was my favourite part of the whole update...truely got you wanted to convey through that update...

And then came part two where you showed how empty swayam felt without his dad...you beautifully showed how swayam's dad was most important person in swayam as well as sharon's life... the part that touched me most is where you showed how swayam had converted after he lost his dad...still that sharon's dream and why she was puzzled about is not clear to me but the story seems to have many secrets to revel when goes ahead...so hoping to see many twist to tails and two brave love stories here... amazingly crafted update which u put up in part 2...

on the whole superb work marium this story is really engaging and you deserve a hats off for thinking in such way...just go ahead and all the best for the story...i didnot find any problems with the legnth of story here...and both the updates in a way were important in order to understand the twist that will revel in future so very smartly set up a stange to show secrets one after other...

thank you for pm and all the best with your exams...god bless you and do your best in exam...do update as soon as you can...

pratik...

fabulous updates👏

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will read n comment on all the chapters

i noticed something...a character who shares my name...is it a coincidence???😲

Originally posted by: deep_Tanha

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will read n comment on all the chapters

i noticed something...a character who shares my name...is it a coincidence???😲

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Marium 🤗

I know tu bohot gussa hai ki i din't comment on the last chapter so am commenting now on chapter 2 aswell :)

Coming to chapter 2...fab tha but itna chotu kyun?? :/ Gosshh hate Swayam's mom...She is so selfish...uffoo n Poor Swayam his past is so dreadful...Awwiiiee I loved Deepika's character such a chweet baby she is...Loved hers and Sharon's bonding...their convo was choo choo adorable...luved it

But last part was confusing

"Di, where is jiju?" Deepy asked in her beautiful and innocent tone to Sharon. Simi stopped in her track listening to her question and turned back to look at Sharon.

"Swayam needed to go to see Rey bhaiyya so he will stay there for tonight."

Swayam and dat too jiju? argghhh did u have to end the chapter here...m confused now...ab toh u have to update soon you know, m hell confused.

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Coming to the promo...Awwiiiee i can actually imagine how sweet the chappy is going to be...waiting to read Swayam's and Deepy's convo under the table...awwiiee how adorable...both cutiepie's convo 😳

Awwiiiee A happy dining time between Sharon, Swayam and Deepy...perfect family i would say as update mein Deepy adressed him as jiju and Deepy considers Sharon like her mom... 😳

Ab toh tu naraz nahi reh sakti haan mujhse cuz meine dekho comment bhi karliya...ab toh baath manle jaldi se next chapter update karde...plesshhh 😳

Luv u ❤️ 🤗