Sanjana, just read this and yeah it's only a prologue and two chapters but...I LOVE THIS
i mean the way you write, the whole concept that you have shown so far is just WOW
now to actually comment on the FF 😉
Prologue
so you had me hooked just like that, then and there 😃
"Don't you think you've had enough of those for one day?"
The voice was enough to send goosebumps down the arms of any girl. Especially ones with broken hearts. Speaking of which, it seemed that her heart was not entirely broken. She swore she felt it leap a mile into the air at the husky voice of the man seated beside her. Keep calm Khushi. She told herself, gulping.
loved how you described what and how Khushi felt when she heard this certain husky voice 😉
He smiled accepting, reaching his own hand to meet with hers.His hands held a certain warmth. And Khushi swore that the moment she touched it, she felt a spark. "Ar... Karan. I'm Karan Rathod." He said. She grinned. "Well then, Mr. Karan Rathod, it was nice meeting you! I'll see you around!"
hehe his hand a special warmth well obviously 😊
so what's with the name change 😕
What she failed to notice, were the two pairs of eyes that trailed their way behind her, all the while...This was going to be fun... Thought their owners.
too right this is going to be fun and i can't wait
Chapter 1 - The Fast and the Furious
She looked accusingly upward into the sky. "Why, god, why?! Why would you want to torture an innocent little soul like me?"
As if in response to her agnoizing cries, another bolt of lightning shot out of the sky, making Khushi leap nearly a mile in the air. "Next time, give me a warning when you do that, wouldya?!" She yelled upward, holding her heart. Apparently God wasn't very happy with her at this particular moment though. Because at that instant, the rain started pouring down 2 times faster and 10 times harder.
i love your Khushi and how you portray her and this is total Khushi kismat 😆
"Oye!!!" She yelled, chest heaving. How many surprises was she going to receive in a day?! Dear lord. "Andhe ho kya? Dikhta nahi hai?! (Are you blind?! Can't you see?!) You almost ran me over dammit! What if I had gotten hurt?! I could sue you for this you know! Tum mere baap ko jaante nahi! (You don't know my father!)" She ran to the window, banging on it. "Open the window you stupid loser. Himmat hai tho khol, teri band bajati hoon! (Open up if you have the guts! I'll ruin you!)"
LMAO 🤣 loved her outburst
He smirked. "Oooh-kaayy... If you're done firing insults at me, wanna get in the car?" Khushi's heart was beating highly erratically. Not good. She made a mental note to inform him that if he kept up his smirks, a lot of people would be getting heart attacks. Very soon.
haha so true people stop breathing when he smirks
"You!" She said, pointing a finger. She frowned. "Tum phir aa gayye? (you're back?!) Now I'm CONVINCED you're following me!"
He rolled his eyes, placing his arm on the rolled down window. "Jaise ki mujhe aur koi kaam nahi hai (Like I don't have anything better to do!) I thought, considering the fact that your drenched and drunk, that you could use a little help. But if you don't want it, that's fine by me! See ya, Khushi!"
Saying so, he changed gears and rolled away.
Khushi's mouth was wide open. "Oye! Rukh! (Stop!) Main Kehti hoon, RUKH! (Stop I say!)" She screamed, waving her arm frantically in the air. He stopped. He reversed. He came back to stop right where he had been a moment ago. In front of Khushi. "Kaise aadmi ho?! (What kind of a guy are you?!) Ek akeli ladki ko beech sadak chod ke chale jaa rahe ho?! (You're leaving a girl alone on the street?!)"
Karan frowned. "What the -"
lmao she is convinced he is following her, he goes, she shouts, he's back... love it 😃
She nodded, haughtily. "It is. But I don't take favours from strangers. You don't have to help me with anything. I'll drive myself wherever I want to go and then you can have your precious car back. That way, no favours, and no thank yous necessary. Got it?! Now moo-oove!" She moaned, exhasperated.
kya logic hai, love this logic, only Khushi could say that
Bad feeling? That was an understatement. Five minutes of hard swerving and fast merging later, Karan was starting to feel downright sick. But it seemed that the roller coaster journey was having no impact on his partner, here. She was pumping her fists, screaming the entire time, as though this were some sort of hot wheels car chase.
Karan swallowed, forcing himself to hold back the vomit. "Er... you wanna... umm... slow down there...?"
Khushi merely laughed. "No ways! This is SO much fun."
She turned to face him. And seeing his depleated look, she added, "We're almost there anyways."
Her 'almost there' occurred a whole half an hour later. Karan had been holding on for dear life the entire time while Khushi continued to have the time of her life. When they stopped at last, Karan opened the car door for some air and fell out onto the sidewalk thanks to his diziness. Khushi laughed.
"Now admit it. That was FUN."
LMAO this is what Khushi thinnks is fun poor 'Karan'
Karan stood up, shakily. His eyes held the death glare. "That. Was. NOT. FUN." He said, through clenched teeth. "Do you even REALIZE that you could have KILLED us back there?!" He said, running to her side. "It was DARK, dammit. Only a few streetlights. No one would have even FOUND us!!! We'd have been DEAD! Dead, dammit, DEAD!"
now who does this sound like, the dammit and the glare 😉
Chapter 2 - Arnav Singh Raizada
Another clash of thunder. Khushi gasped, quickly covering her mouth to avoid screaming. Suddenly, the house went dark. All the lights went off. And it seemed that she was completely alone in this big...house. Khushi swallowed. "Hehe.." She chuckled, nervously. "Just like in the horror movies..."
she chuckled, she chuckled 😲 no sane person would chuckle, but then again it's Khushi
But then." She stated, adding dramatism to her voice. "I saw this guy. He was super hot yaar, Preeti, you should have seen him." Preeti winced. She felt happy that it was dark and Khushi hadn't noticed her reaction. It would raise a lot of unnecessary questions...
hmm kuch garabr hain, what ijj
Just as she was walking towards the kitchen, Khushi uttered the three words which made her freeze. "Arnav Singh Raizada."
Preeti's heart nearly froze in her chest. No. She thought. She can't know. Not yet. No.
"Who is he?" Asked Khushi. But getting no response, she probed her friend further. "Preeti, tujhe pata hai, iss ASR ke baare me? I've heard he's a big business tycoon or something. But I've never seen his face. Majraa kya hai?"
Preeti swallowed and turned to face her friend. Khushi was holding the flashlight in one hand and a newspaper in the other with his name on the front page. She breathed a sigh of relief.Khushi doesn't know anything. Good.
Khushi doesn't know what? and so no one knows what ASR looks like... interesting
"Dekho Karan, aka ASR, main kuch nahi jaanti...
i knew it, Karan is ASR
and now i cant for the future chapters of your outstanding FF 😃😃😃
Edited by kaur94 - 13 years ago
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