SwaRon SS-A New Lease Of Life -Discontinued-Pg 77 - Page 10

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Starting was good yar.but you made rey villian type yar.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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nyc update bt choti thi bot...pls nxt update shld be longer 😊😊😊😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
#93
nice concept and awesome update
plz pm me
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Posted: 13 years ago
#94
Beautiful work Neeti as always. Aw Rey is different in this story. Well eagerly waiting for the next update.
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Posted: 13 years ago
#95
Nice concept and title as well Neeti.
Coming to the update, loved the mum-daughter ka conversation, the way she shouted on her mum and then immediately hugged her and cried her heart out. We find our world in mum's embrace really. Quite touching!! Swayam's goofing up was also amusing. Now waiting for the art of living ka class where they both will meet each other😃
Update soon Neeti
Thanks for the PM
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Posted: 13 years ago
#96
I'm a bit late it seems! :P Sorry very very!!

Needless to say, i loved the first part! The bond you've shown between a mother and a daughter was very real. She's worried about her daughter, feels guilty for not having stood up earlier and yet, has this aura of comfort about her. As for Sharon, i hope she gets okay real soon!
And then our hero makes his entry by spilling coffee on himself! It clearly indicated he needs some order , or rather disorder to make his life well...a life.😆

Btw, nice work with the Ad writing Neetz!

As swayam said 'Art of living huh? Interesting-top notch!

Eagerly waiting to see this journey unfold! You've done a really good job at writing this one Neeti. Update real soon!!
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Posted: 13 years ago
#97
demand completed ab update kar samjha ..!!
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Hey guys ,I'm posting Chapter 2 now. I would like to thank all of you for liking and leaving your precious comments. It encourages me a lot.

Thank you again

Note : The Art of Living class in Worli is purely fictional.I am not aware if any such class exists in Worli(Mumbai).

I know I have used a lot of "sms" language in the update. Sorry for that, I'm kinda used to writing that way now.

And please forgive me if my Hindi is not up to the mark.Its not that good.

Chapter 2 :

"My parents think I should go for an Art of Living weekend workshop. What do you think? I've heard about the workshop and its got quite good reviews. U wanna come along " Sharon asked Preetma as she took her coffee from the counter.

"I've already tried it..Remember? Post the break up with Karan? "

"Oh was that an Art of Living workshop you had gone for? I thought it was just some yoga class!"

" Nope it was Art Of Living. And it really helped. I forgot all about him and my problems. Life's been much better since! I even got the promotion when I was doing the workshop!"

"So do you think I should give it a try?"

"I think you should Sharon. Art of Living is something you definitely need right now."
Sharon sipped her coffee and looked at Preetma. Preetma nodded her head gently. Sharon sighed.

"Great then, I'll give them a call ….Coz you say so." She finished the coffee and tossed it into the wastebasket. Perfect shot.

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" But the advertisement said the classes will be held in Bandra!" He half-shouted into the phone.

" Yes sir, but now they have been shifted to Worli. We are very sorry for the inconvenience."
Swayam tried to control his anger. He didn't know why he was so upset! This was such a trivial matter!

What he was really upset about was the mocking statement made by one of his competitors about how young men were "no completition" for him. He knew he had been referring to him , however indirect it may have been. But what did he care? He was doing as well as that man. He didn't need to be afraid of anyone!

"Yes, yes it's not a problem. The cheque will be delivered to your office soon. It will be in the name of Swayam Shekhwat ."

"Ok sir, thank you very much. We hope our workshop is beneficial to you. Thank you"

Swayam placed the phone down and got back to work. His phone beeped again.

"Hello?"

"Arre mere Swayam..guess what?""Simran accepted..we are getting married!"

"Wh-what.Kunal..you never told me you're gonna propose to her!"


"Dude, I just asked your opinion the other day,remember? I sent you a picture of the ring as well!
Because Mr Busy-bee has no time to meet his friends na!"

"Um yeah sorry I was busy..so when's they wedding?"

" The parents are "formally" meeting tomorrow. Long time to go yaar. But we're partying today!Aurus! You have to come dude!! "

" I'm sorry I have a meeting today till 9:30 and a lot of pending assignments.."

"But dude I am getting married! You're best friend is getting married! You're gonna be the best man! Please yaar one night!""

"I would love to but the meeting's in Kandivali! By the time I get to Worli it'll be almost 12! I'm really sorry yaar..some other time ok? I'm busy na, I'll call you up tomorrow ok?"

"Whatever you say bro, bye". Kunal is obviously very hurt, Swayam thought. I'll send some chocoloates over to his house.

Money can't gift you love and happiness,Swayam

He remembered this line Kunal had told him when they had graduated. Kunal was a little immature at times, but he knew what he was saying.

I'm sorry Kunal, I really am. Swayam whispered.
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"It starts from tomorrow. Timings are 2-7 pm and it's in Worli." She told her mom.

"Accha hai , last minute they let u in. The weekend courses are very few. And my little daughter would be too busy to attend the week courses" Her mother replied affectionately. " Why didn't u ask one of your colleagues to join u? Preetma, Maanini, you could ask one of them.."

"No it's ok mom, this is something I'd rather do on my own. I feel self-discovery should always be done alone" She finished her dinner, excused herself and went into her room.
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She rolled down the window and asked the autorickshawala, " Dr Annie Besant road ke liye kaise jaana hai?"

"Yahan se seedha, phir do signal ke baad right lena" He answered her in a bored tone.

"Thank you." She rolled up the window and started the car. It was 1:50. She didn't want to be late.
She followed the man's instructions and located the building. It was a huge structure. There was valet parking .

She grabbed her handbag and handed the keys over to the valet.

She entered the hugelobby, very artistically decorated. A beautiful chandelier had been placed in the middle of the ceiling. She looked up at it and continued watching. She was so lost that she didn't realize she had banged into a man. Her head met his chest and the collision brought her back to earth.

"Oh I'm so sorry" She began, looking up into the tall man's eyes.

He was looking down at her calmly. "Hey, it's ok it happens with everyone. That chandelier is very beautiful. Even I was lost in its beauty for two minutes." He smiled warmly.

Sharon looked at him,confused. She had definitely seen his before. Was he one of her colleagues' friend? Whoever he was he was extremely goodlooking..and TALL..She had to strain her neck to look at him properly. She wasn't that short, she was 5 feet 4 inches so this guy would definitely be around 6 feet or more!

His eyes were beautiful and his smile was radiant. She was so busy trying to remember where she had seen him , she didn't hear him repeat " Um..um" two three times in order to get her attention.

Finally when he waved his hands in front of her face once or twice, she realized what she was doing.

"Weekend course?" He asked her directly.

"Yes." She said, smiling.

"Swayam Shekhawat." He said stretching his hand out.

"Sharon Rai Prakash " She shook his hand.

Swayam's mouth fell open. He couldn't believe whom he was talking to.


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Cliche first meeting? I know sorry This update was written in a hurry so please forgive me !

Do leave ur likes and comments😊

Edited by Neeti96 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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So, finally the day comes, I've got the privilege to comment first on my little doll's FF and astonishingly SwaRon met just in this part . . . . some Eminent co-incidence conducted by the Almighty. . . . .😳

Okey . . . . . . Sharon and her colleague convo was penned up with remarkably realistic touch . . . .before getting into something new , we seek suggestion from our friends . . . . and Neeti, ur genius cerebrum pulled this fact on some absolute period . . . .It implicitly splash Sharon's bit confound mindset at that moment . . . . Brilliantly written bit . . . . .👍🏼

and Swayam . . . . . . . . this FF Swayam is blessed with some really smoky touch which grabs the discretion of any reader right away . . . .😳 . . . I'm not going to dissect the whole Swayam bit because it'll be hard for me to compliment each & every part . . .as I fall short of appropriate adjectives . . . . the subtle yet intense personality u've sketched for Swayam is laced with immaculate precision . . . . .👏 I loved his capriciously affectionate attitude towards Kunal which precisely depicts his inner daze . . . . . writer's majesty ones again . . . . .👏


And the awaited meeting of the titans . . . . Neeti, do u have any contemplation how singularly u accomplished this huge task . . . . without exaggerate adaptation of cheesy bits . . . without much nambi-pambi talks . . . . u drawed like some classic writer . . . . I always loved the line "simplicity is the ultimate sophistication " . . . . and u just rolled it hard . . . .👏 and special and heart warming thanks for not making Swayam lost in Sharon's beauty . . . . that would tarnish the steamy avatar of Swayam Shekhawat of this FF . . . . and I just drooled that moment when Sharon got indulged in Swayam's oceanic eyes . . . . Neeti, u touched my soul . . .like always . . .

Overall , a Outstanding chapter peeped in . . . . I thoroughly LOVED every bit of u . . . . lets put our hands together for the little yet Mindblowing soul of the bloke . . . . . Neeti , the doll . . . 👏
Edited by MagicalShantanu - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
Hey Sweet heart ...🤗

i just loved this part ...Sharon's part is amazingly well-handled ...the way u showed her...trying to getting out of shell...

" I feel self-discovery should always be done alone"

I could feel her pain behind her words...m loving sharon and her mother's bond...she is so supportive for her daughter...

The tension and loneliness in Swayam's life ...it was symbolic ...and well written...he was getting irritated with little discomfort..location change a tiny matter...couldn't attend party thrown for his best friends wedding...

Money can't gift you love and happiness..so true

Loved the first meet ...wow... it was so elegant...

Was he one of her colleagues' friend? Whoever he was he was extremely goodlooking..and TALL..She had to strain her neck to look at him properly. She wasn't that short, she was 5 feet 4 inches so this guy would definitely be around 6 feet or more!

U showed their height difference so well...lovely ...can't wait to read further...hats off to u for handling this unique concept so maturely...plz plz update soon dear ...😊
Edited by deep_Tanha - 13 years ago

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