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Originally posted by: shafyyy

wow it's really great start..

loved it...

Fiza di..

amazing start..

mene aapki CSI Series padhi hain, tumse mil k,wwu,gear up,my..

but mujhe aisa lag raha hain...

Nupur jo hain vo Tumse mil k aur MY ka mixture hain

aur mayank jo hain vo Tumse mil k.. aur WWU ka mixture hain...

pata nahi mein kahan tak sahi hoon...

well all in all.. loved it..

thanks alot dear

Originally posted by: ShwePoo

Awesome FF.. very nyc...

N i'm reminded of WWU... !

thanks alot dear

Originally posted by: crazymayurian

i sooo luvedd it

in strt i wasnervous

and in second part i was all smiling :)

osom and am curios about this ff for sure

umm mujhe tu strt mein gmkyh yad ayi aur second part mein wwu specially because of smrat

do write soon

thanks alot dear...
i hope u cont to feel so
lol...sab ko samrat ki fikar hai...

Originally posted by: -Gunners-

Congo for ur new ff...

nice concept...

thanks alot

Originally posted by: arhi_maneet

CONGO FOR NEW FF! NICE START! I REMEMBER GMYH!

thansk alot dear

Originally posted by: -Samira-

Congratulations on ur new FF fiza..

lovely start, n seems Nupur is in coma n Mayank is on the way

hope nothing to happend Nupur

can't wait to read next part sis

thnx 4 d pm sis

thanks alot dear
glad to see ya back here
u thinking being me writer anything will happen to nupur

Originally posted by: love.mayurarti

Congrats fiza fr the new ff😊

Starting was jst mindblowing...Loved the ragging part. Samrat touching their feet was really hilarious and loved confident nupur. The four was jst awesome.

And abt ur qus...Ardhangini, dat cums first in my mind while reading dis part.n mayank-nupur staring at each other made me think abt Ardhangini too.

thanks alot dear...
i m so glad tht u liked it
thnks for liking

Originally posted by: -SupriyaluvsMN-

Congos 4 new ff!
interesting start!

thanks alot dear

Originally posted by: mayuloveu

fiza tanx for new ff. mayank and samrat is so cool. but hope yeh tragedy ff nehi hoga. loved it

thnku soo much... nhi yeah tragedy ff nhi hai... donot worry i will try to make it as light as possible

Originally posted by: snow007

Nice one
keep it up

thansk alot

Originally posted by: vinan2050

Congrats for new FF and again fab update but ye startng hi shck k sath

thanxx for PM

and i remebrd Ardhangani frm First update

thanku so much dear...

i am amazed to know u read Ardhangni waoo thanku so much

Originally posted by: drmaha

CONGRATULATION FOR TH NEW FF...

AMAZING ff i loved it...

wht a characters... 😆

abt ur qs: i remember Ardhagni, CSI, bylm...

thanks alot dear

Originally posted by: parul_bansal

awesome update...

nic concept..

i liked all the 4 characters

sachhi...i enjoyed while reading the part...

i guess wo hospital mein nupur hi thi..n wo phone pe mayank...

do cont soon...

wanna read more

ps- i guess its a mixture of ARDHANGINI n GMYH...

lovely..

thanks 4 the pm

may god bless u

thanks alot dear
im glad u liked tht concpt
i hope u cont to feel soo

Originally posted by: shria19

Congo for new ff:)

Awesome part:)

waiting for next part...

do cont soon..

thanks alot dear

Originally posted by: SujaLuvsMayur

a big congratulation for your new ff. 🤗

edited.

Fiza, I really dnt know, what to say ... actually I alwz lack of words when it comes to your ff.

hats off to you dear.

no doubt, like your each n every ff, I start liking this ff too ... not only for that its your ff, but for its amazing concept n writing style.

in start, you gave a total shock ... she is in hospital ... away for everyone ... specially mayank ... she needs him right there beside her ...

I like when samrat called him and he informed that he already in airport. ... thats call a relation of heart ... love ..

past scene was very funny ... completely contrast of present ... I really forget the present when I have read the past story. they were total bindas type ... ekdum mast!!

the way nupu n samrat ragged their seniors ... I was laughing like manic ... kash humare Uni me bhi ragging hota, par kya karen, waha to ragging banned ho chuka hai ...

lol, I think, I am the first one who mourned for ban of ragging ... lol

you are alwz my fav writer ... n I alwz like your writing since BYLM.

very nice written ... superb.

now come to your question, I remembered all your ffs in this update, except Ardhangini ...😉😆

waiting for next update.

love ya

congrats once again ..😃

uf suja yeah tera sab se elaborated comment hai tujhy pata hai
mein flat hogai aur is se pata chlata hai ko tum pora Ardahngini ko bhooll gai mahoosss

thnku so mcuh whn a writer like u admire writing n cocept it really felt amazing.. n hope u cont to love this ff...
u know how i m feeling abt this... so its making me nervous more n more
thnks alot
thnkuuu

Hello Guys…

I have rplyd to u all….

N can I gave u all a bear hug… I so love u all muahhh…

Yup most of u r so write its Ardhangini…sequal to it kinda…yet I donot want to name so as I by myelf donot belive k yeah us k tarah ka hai…. Its just an attempt.. yet it is based on the same plot…

I hope u like it as u have loved ardhanigini

Love ya

Fiza

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Chapter: 2

Present:

Gunjan: Samrat… ami jaan aj hospital arahi hain…

Samrat: asa nhi hona chaiy.. agar un ko pata chal gaya k hum ny kya kiya hai tu qayamat ajay gi…

Gunjan: ya khuda ab kya hoga… humain tu bht daar lagraha hai

Samrat: khuda hi jany… abhi tu nupur ki iddatt bhi bori nhi hoi hai… aur us mein us k istarah se un se milna..ami ko qatai pasand nhi aay ga… na hi woh hony day gi

iddat: is the period of 3 months and 40 days, after a girl is divorced in islam.. she cant get married in particular period again… remain mostly in her house.. there are loads of details of it.. but the point is that ..in islam once divorce from ur husband u cant get married again to the same person.. if iddat is over ( there more things attached to it ..that I am not getting into) ..

Gunjan: us ki iddat pori hony mein sirf 3 din hain .. ab kya hojay gay.. per baat yeah nhi hai…baat yeah k hum ami k kya keray gay…

Samrat: humain sach mein nhi pata hum kya keray gay.. per sirf ek baat hum janty hain.. hum ab k us ko nhi rukhy gay… ab woh jis tarha se chay ga.. woh is sab ko sambhly ga…

Filhal tum yah dekho…hum us ko airport layan ja rahy hain… kisis se kuch maat kahana…

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Past:

In class..

Gunjan: so ap log sab behna bhai hain

Mayank: islah( correction) kerain… hum sab cousins hain..haan Samrat nupur k bhai hai…

Gunjan: tu ek hi baat hai nah… tu tum bhi tu wohi hoay nah….

Mayank: yaqeenan nhi hai… khuda ny humain behan nhi di hai.. aur hum khudai k gilaf harghiz nhi jatay .. islayn humari majal hum kisis larki ko behan many…

Nupur: is se behas maat kerna… deemgh k achar hojay ga…

Mayank: deemgh k dahi tu hota tha ..yeah achar kab se hoa…

Nupur: humari marzi hum jo chay kerly…

Mayank: han bhi sahi baat hai… akhir ap tai ami ki jo beti hain…

Nupur: mayank yeah tum humain ami ki beti hony k tany maat diya kero…

Gunjan: lo… ami ki beti hona tana hai..

Mayank: yeahi tu point hai.. jawab dain.. hum ny tu apko apki hi ami ki beti hony ko kaha hai… kaun sa apni ami ki…

Nupur: humari kisamt jo hum choti ami ki beti hotay… ap dono chup ho tu mein lecture likh lo..

Mayank: likho pls likh… tum nhi likho gi tu huamin kaha se milay ga.. shabash likho…

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Samrat: okay huamin bhoook lag rahi hai hum tu canteen jarahy hain…. Koi humain join ker raha hai… nupur tu nhi jay gi.. aur maaynk bhi nhi… tu kya hum akelay jay gay…

Gunjan: chalo hum jaltay hain… aj itna nhi parh sakty

Nupur: Samrat ahmed… ap pehly din se hi class bunk..

Samrar: dekho pls .. yaha zada behnata dekhyny ki zaroorat nhi hai…

Mayank: ahisata baat kero… yaha hum nhi chaty pori duniya ko pata chaly k hum rishtay dar hain…

Nupur: jao bhi jao.. humain kya.. khud hi suna ami ki daat…

Samrat: thanku… khuda hafiz…

Mayank: yeah tumhara bhai pehly din se shoror..

Nupur: haan.. aur in ko larkiya bhi mil jati hain asi… had hai..

Mayank: is se kya matlab hai,…

Nupur: tumhar kayal hai hum tum ko sab batay gay taky tum ja ker bhai se kahdo…

Mayank: aur ap k kayal hai k hum ap ki sari baatein apky bhai ko batatay hain.. bolo nah

Nupur: she smiled and turned to him excitedly… gunjan tu pehly din se hi flat hai bhi per… kafi impress di.. hum ny bataya k humara bhai tu kafi embarrassed hoi thi.. she chuckled and he shock his head

Mayank: sahbash.. Samrat ahmed ki kisamt… kamal hai…yeah sab pata chal gaya na khabi…apki ami ko

Nupur: kasay pata chlay ga us ko pata hai na hum kahin gay na tum.. so kaun keray ga yeah sab…

Mayank: wasy pata nhi humain yeah larki Samrat jasi hi lag rahi hai.. maza any wala hai…

Nupur: so tu hai… bhai k sath achi lagay gi

Mayank: chalo… tu bhi na Allah ki gay ho ( innocent) aram se .. shadi tak matt pocho… achi larki hai.. tai ami ki bahu kyun bana rahi ho bechari ko…

Nupur: lo … tu is ki saza bhi humain milay gi..she pouted

Mayank: mein ny yeah tu nhi kha… subha kya hua tha..

Nupur: humain baat nhi kerni us per..

Mayank: thik hai.. tu kam bhi maat kero.. he snatched her pen..

Nupur: day do nah… pls.. huamin lecture likhna hai..

Mayank: laro.. cheeno.. asay har kyun maan jati hoo.. pasand nhi hai humain yeah…

Nupur: khuda k liyan woh 20 saal po*na gana dobara nhi…

She took out another pen and start writng her lecture, but wasn't free to do so.. as now or than he will snatch it, made her hand shake.. remove her copy and lot…

Nupur: ainda tum meray sath maat bhaitna…

Mayank: really.. thik hai hum kal se ap k uper bhaity gay…

Nupur: maaynk tumhain lecture bhi saaf utaray hoay chay hotay hain aur uper se mjhy likhny bhi nhi daytay…

Mayank: aray mein ny kiya kya…

Nupur: mein ny kya kiya.. dekho kasa lecture aya hai.. humain phir se thik kerna paray ga….

Mayank: nhi…. samjh araha hai hum chala lay gay

Nupur: rehn do humara sir kah jao gay….

Samrat: nhi bhi pls.. ap dono phir se shoro maat hojao…

Nupur: hum shoro nhi horahy hain…acha ab gahr chaly

Gunjan: kyun thori dair.. bahr bhaity haina… asay kya class se ghar ghar se class…

Mayank: nupur… aur yeah sab..buhat muskil hai magar … dekho ap tum apan vaada bhool rahi hoo..

Nupur: hum koi vaada nhi bhol rahy

Samrat: ji han… hum dono ny pehly hi kaha tha tum enjoy kero gi aur humain bhi kerny do gi..

Nupur: han per…

Mayank: ghar per hum sambhal lay ga.. ap hamesha ki taraha wohi kerno jo ap best kerti hoo..

Nupur: kya

Mayank: khamoshiii…'

Nupur: per..

Mayank: nupur.. hum kah rahy hain na hum dono sambhal lay gay… phir kya masla hai…

Nupur: hmm…

Samrat: asi shakal maat bano pls.. chalo icecream khelata hoon…

Gunjan: acha jab mein kah rahi thi tu nhi kaha na thi…

Mayank: is kayal mein bhi maat rehana k yeah nupur k baghir ice-cream kahay ga..

Gunjna: kyun…

Samrat: yeahi tu ek chees hai jis per nupur k bus nhi hai.. aur woh befikar hoker.. khub mazay se us ko enjoy kerti hai….

Nupur: per mein psitho nhi kahti nah… she pouted

Mayank: tu chocolate kya company se laoo..

Nupur: nhi tum pisthao kaho…

Mayank: wah wah…yeah acha hai hum kya pagal hain … sorry itni dosti nhi hai… k hum apni double chocolate corneto ap per qurban kerday…

Gunjan: aray tu is mein kya hai mein dayti hon.. mein tu plain cornet bhi kah lo gi

Samrat: aram se raho.. waoh sirf masti ker raha hai…

Gujan: kya..

Samrat: han… ek aur hai sirf usko bewquf bana raha hai….

Gunjan: chukled had hai…

Nupur: tum nhi kaho gay… warna mein kya kaho gi

He was opening it and nupur had a frown and full on desire in her eyes to snatch it from him,,, and than she grin "snatch"

She moved forward and tried to grip it..a nd he raised it up…

Nupur: mayank.. huh…

Mayank: be flexible… chaloo plain vanilla kahao… aj mein double chocolate kaho ga….yumi…

This was it nupur was fuming with angr the way he was making it so difficult for her, already she cant resist chocolate ice-cream n here he is making it to to difficult for her…

Nupur: huh…really… she grip his hand and smack the icecream on his face..

Samrat n gunjan burst into laughter and nupur show wining grin

Mayank: yeah kya fasool harkat hai..nupur ghar nhi hai yeahi…errr… aur ap kya samjhti hai ap bach jay gi yeah ker k…. no ways nupur….

The remain cone tht donot have much was on her face…. And Samrat and gunjan were laughing out loud… gunjan pulled out her cell and click ther snap…

Mayank: oyr… buhat maza araha hai… apki shakal k yeah haal kerain kya hum…

Gunjan: tu kya kero tum dono itny mazay k lagrahy hoo..

Nupur: she licked her lips…and tried to click her side to.. haan tu docuble chocolate… mazay kit u hogi nah

Mayank: nupur bari hojao…. Samrat yaar pani day

Samrat: chor na ker tak is moo k sath chalna…

Mayank: tu day raha hai k ein tera is se bhi bora haal kero….

Washing there face they came back to there old look, but nupur was still pouting

Mayank: asai shakl thik kero

Samrat: kyun tang ker raha hai day dayna

Mayank: tujhy beech mein bolna zarori tha

Nupur: ek aur hai kya… she said excitedly… do na mayank pls nah..

Mayank: pakro.. aur meri jo tum ny tabha(spoil) ki hai na… us k kya….

Nupur: she looked guilty at him…tum share kerlo mray sath

Mayank: nhi mjhy pait mein dard nhi kerna…. Mein dosri laylo ga..khao… aur chalo.. kafi late horaha hai…

Nupur: kahany do aram se..yumi…

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They were standing on the door of house.. and nupur has a frown and was scary looking around… both of them were standing on either side of her and were giving her clear instructions..

Samart: ap chup chap uper apany kamray mein jaoo…

Mayank: kisi ko jawab maat dayna.. kah day nah namaz ko dair horahi hai… hum parhyny ja rahy hain

Nupur: hum jhot bolay

Mayank: yaar yeah kya auraat hai… is ko bacha rahy hain hum aur yeah hai k… meri maa.. ap namz parhy ny nhi jarahi hai kya

Nupur: haan woh tu parhay gay nah

Mayank: tu phir yeah jhoot tu nhi hoa nah… thik hai.. buhat hi asan se baat hai… ab ap se yeah hojay gay..

Nupur: han kerlay ga.. daat kyun rahy hoo…

Mayank: aray baba daato nhi tu aur kya kero..

Samrat: ek min.. jangay-e-azeem( world war) band kero ap dono.. aur andar chalo..

Nupur , Samrat are siblings and mayank is there cousin.. they all live in a huge mansion.. nupur n Samrat are children of eldest brother, and mayank is of the younger one…

They have a family textile business.. and both borthers are share holders.. nupur n smarat's mom is pretty strict and stubborn .. she to handle the business.. yet mayanks mom is housewife.. and very sweet one… mayank call Nupur's mom tai jan.. and hate her a lot as she never understand anyone only do wht she wants to do…

Evy one in the house is obliged to listen to her.. even his mom.. and he doesn't like it..nor the way she behave with nupur.. being girl she is being restrict to many things..yet Samrat n mayank from childhood has always protect her and let her do wht hse wants to.. Covering for her…

Nupur entered the house and say sallam to evry one.. mayank n Samrat slped there head..

Mayank: is ki tu.. hum ny is se kya kaha tha.. kahmsohi se… uff..salam ami.. tai jan ap aj ghar per.. sab thik hai

Tai jan: kyun hum ghar per kyun nhi hosaktay… jitni gharasti (household) apki maa kerti hai utni hi hum bhi..samjh.. aur aplogo university kahtam hoay thu kafi waqt nhi hogaa tu kaha thy aplo… aur ap kaha jarahi hai itni tazee mein

Nupur: ji woh hum namaz

Shilpa:" han beta jao waqt jaraha hai us ko..

Nupur: ji choti ami…

Samrat: woh ami aj pehla din tha tu hum log sari chesay dekh rahy thy… library vagaira…

Tai jan: dahaan rahy hum ny nupur ko waha jany ki ijaazat di hai k ap doni hain waha per is k matlab yeah nhi hai k aplo bhi apny shoogal mein lag jay…

Hum zara nupur ko dekh ker aay

She left and mayank n Samrat were looking at each other…

Samrat: choti ami…

He said with hope..

Mayank: ami..

Shilpa: kya hua kyun cheela rahy hain apdono.. bhahi ny sun liya na tu pata chaky ga

Samrat: aray bhi ap humari sunay.. aj hum log university mein thori dair asay hi rukh gay thy… per thora late hogaya.. ab ami nupur ki class layny gain hai…

Shiplap: ya khuda .. hum ny pehly hi kaha tha ap dono se .. kayal rekhy.. per ap..

Mayank: humain baat mein daat layna… abhi kuch kerain.. apko pata hai na ori university k samny tu aj seniors ki halata karab kerdi per tai k samny….

Shilpa: thik hai..mein dekhti hoon

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Tai jaan: apt u namaz parhny aai thi… phir yeah bistar kyun toot raha hai…(why are u lying on bd)

She got up quickly…

Nupur: woh hum thak gay thy tu… bus ja hi rahy thy

Tai jaan: aj dair kyun hogai ap ko…

Nupur: woh woh.. traffic…

Tai jaan: acha tu Samrat yahi jhoot kah rahy ty… aura b bhi dono ki kahni alag hai… ap dono se hum ny kitni bara kaha hai k foron ghar aya keray .. khas ker k app… bahar bekar mein ghoomti hoi nazar na aay ap humain.. samhji… per nhi apk tu samhj nhi ati.. nupur humain sakat hony per majboor na kerain… apko pata bhi hai ap kaun hai… istarah bahar ghoomny se humari reputation per kya asar perta hai… ghomna bhi hai tu kisi classy jaga jay… per nhi…

Nupur: ami woh

Tai jaan: kya wooh… haan.. kya… bolain sach sach.. kaha thi ap.. bol rahi hai yaa hum.. she moved forward towards her and nupur close her eyes in fear…

Shilpa: nupur aai khana kah lay ..chalo shabash…

Just than NM phone rung and she left galring at her…

Tai jaan: apni lagam khud band lay ap… warna us ko humain keechna buhat achay se ata hai… samjhi…

Control ur self by ur self or else I will do so

She left scolding her…

Shilpa moved forwards n hugged her.. and spread her hand on her head.. she has always such effect of her mom on her, she was shivering a bit.. she is extremely scared of her…and all four of them knew it..

Mayank n Samrat when saw NM went out went to her room…

Samrat went to her and hugged her too.. and signaled shilpa anty he will handle her…

Shilpa: chalo.. mayank.. chalein ap yaha se..

Samrat: shh.. aram se… apko tu pata hai na ami ka… kyun tum itna react kerti hoo un ki baato per… woh tu hamesha se asay hi hain…

Nupur: humain pata hai.. islayn hum ny kaha tha k humain nhi rukh na…

Samrat: dekho asa kuch nhi hai..unhay jo kerna hota hai woh tu woh kerti hain.. aur un se kya daarna.. wasy bhi abhi kahti hoi jarahi thi k sham ki flight hai.. so woh jarahi hai…. So relax.. azadi k din hai humaray.. ek month khub enjoy kero… chalo utho fresh ho… aur neechy aoo…

Nupur: thik hai hum aty hain… per hum namaz parhy lay…

Samrat: thik hai…

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Mayank: mjhy tu samhj nhi ata yeah tai jaan ko ki sonata kyun nhi hai… ajeeb halat kerdi hai is larki ki unhony…sab k sath itni normal rehti hai per jaha tai jaan k kayl bhi ata hai woh kaap(shiver) uthi hai

Shilpa: aram se mayank woh barai hain… hum sab hain na nupur k liyan..

Mayank: pls ami… bari hai tu is k harghiz yeah matlab nhi hai k jo dil chay woh kerain… acha hai ja rahi hai.. sukoon rahy ga ghar mein…

Shilpa: acha aram se.. asay ghusa nhi kerta un per…

Mayank: islyan humain sath rehna passnd nhi hai..

Shilpa: acha ji.. tu apko papa ny jab kaha tha un k pass ajao tu kyun nhi gay…

Mayank: ap ko hilter k hawal ker k jao…

Shilpa: bekar ki baatein na kerain… humain pata hai ap nupur aur Samrat ko akela nhi hcoray gay… aur na hi hum chorna chaty hain…. Hum hi tu hain undono k pass… so mood sahi kero aur khany per dhaiyan do…

Awesome update API...😳

awww its awsom fiza ...abhi to bas story suru hua .though mujhe present ka kuch bhi samajh nahi aya but m njoying the past .
nupur k shadi ho gaya tha? kisse ?????? mayank kaha hai? how nupur met accident!!!

but m having prob reading URDU .earlier i never understood diff between HINDI n URDU .abhi bhi koi diff samajh nahi ata bas itna samjhi hu k URDU is too much harder dan HINDI 😆

plz thoda easy lang .

desperate LOGO...

NP PORBLM...MEIN RES KERNA BHOOL GAI THI...

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