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Posted: 15 years ago
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Clean Bowled!!!!!!!! along with my Sweetu I am clean bowled. Suchi, you are amazing yaar just A-M-A-Z-I-N-G!!!!!!!!!! This is what we are talking about and I am not sure how CT's will handle it but I am happy right now with your scenes.
Believe it or not, when Nivi brought juice for Viren before the bike ride scene my imagination went to the same direction but its just interchanged in my imagination it was Viren who did it and Nivi all shocked and in yours its our Sweety Nivi who made Viren shocked and clean bowled😉😆
How could you do this to us hanging like this with your last scene, I am dying here and I just came online poor girls some of them are waiting for how long I don't know. Please don't kill us write the next scene dearie.
Thank you Suchi for mindblowing scenes this weekend, you just made not only our weekend but our New Year special too. Brilliant job👏👏👏👏
@Ash, Wishing you a Very Happy Birthday dear. May all your dreams come true.
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Posted: 15 years ago
#72
Wowwww suchi justt Amazingggg , awwwww my poor viren unable 2 understand whatzz gong on nivi's mind . bechara my sweetuu
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Suchi, have to agree with Milee, we have been waiting for hours, am dying here ! Pleaseeeeeeeeeee post the next scene soon, I keep refreshing the page !! 😆😳

@ Ashley : Happy Birthday sweetheart !!! *hugs*

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Posted: 15 years ago
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Likewise, Suchi. I completely agree with what Mille and Navz are saying!! But guys I think she is not even online. I wonder when we are going to read the next scene..
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Posted: 15 years ago
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hi suchi...plz give us the next scene plzz.. we have been refreshing the page like every few minutes. plz plz plz...i am praying now.
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Posted: 15 years ago
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yaa agrre wid all . Plzz suchi give us d new scene soon . We r dyngg 2 read it
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Suchi, you are online !! Yay !! Are we getting the next scene soon ? 😳😆
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Sorry guys for the delay : )
kids ! : ) but here it is
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Scene 7


With every step he took towards her, niveditha could feel her heart racing real fast. She purposefully avoided looking at him. Divya offered her some tea and she noticed that nivedihta was lost in thoughts.


Nivi..she said tapping her shoulders a bit


Ji di..said nivi with a start.


Ye lo .. chai.. said divya as she offered the cup to her.


Niveditha took it and started sipping it slowly still avoiding looking at him. Viren had now approached their table and continued looking intensely at her. He took a chair and sat exactly opposite to her.


Divya who had now stopped talking with vandana was looking at him and niveditha one at a time. Viren was continuing to glare at her with out batting his eyes for even a moment. Divya stifled a small laugh and looked at vandana who now was busy folding a cloth near her, with a smile on her face.


Ahem.. divya cleared her throat loudly.


Viren, she nudged him,


When he continued his stare, divya went near his ears and shouted in his ears


VIREN!! At which viren startled, almost lost his balance on his chair.


Bhabi!! Aap! Kya ker rahi ho.. behra kerna hai kya? He said angrily


Divya smiled mischievously at him looking at niveditha and viren in turns.


Viren! Koi ' I mean kuch chahiye kya?


Viren flared his nostrils at her and looked around


Han.. mujeh chai chahiye! He said as he grabbed the cup in front of him.


Vandana took excuse from them and left to go towards Yashodhara's table.


Niveditha , who's face had turned red tried take leave from them as well, but divya pulled her down and made her sit with force.


Thum kahan ja rahi ho mujhe is pagal kay saath chor ker' she said

di.. voh mujhe.. started nivi..


kuch nahi thum yahan baito aur isko sambhalo , main ja rahi hun shayad sidharth ko kuch zaroorat ho she added thoughtfully


viren snorted and said

Han akal ki ' he retorted


Divya hit him on his head and left the table


Viren now fully faced niveditha and started looking at her intensely. He then put his hands on his cheeks; bent little bit and rested his elbow on the table. Niveditha looked at him and then looked around to see if anyone was watching them. Her eyes were scared and at the same time they had the shyness he had always loved.


Viren looked at her meaningfully and then pointed towards the RV indicating her to come inside. Niveditha looked alarmed at him and then shook her head slowly and looked down.


Ahem he coughed a little loudly,


She looked up him and he pointed towards the RV as if commanding her to come in with him now or else '


Niveditha's lips hid a small curved smile; she shook her head, got up and sprinted away from there.


Viren looked at her run, a beautiful wave of emotion passed through his heart.


Niveditha turned around and looked at him smiling shyly.


Viren got up and left towards the RV without looking at her. Nivedita looked at him worriedly. It was the first time that viren had turned his face away from him and that too when she is feeling in this manner'


She looked around and headed towards the RV.


I hope he is not upset with me she thought! As soon as she entered into the RV she saw that it was empty. She assumed that he must be in their section as the potted plant obscured it. She went forward to her section slowly whispering his name


Viren..

There was no response.


May be she misunderstood; viren was not inside the vehicle. She started to go towards the front section. Its possible she missed him, may be he got out before she got in.


As she was she was about to get out, she was pulled in by a force. She felt herself fall into something strong, her hair falling all over her face.


She looked up to find viren's face right above hers. As Viren slowly moved the strands of hair from her face, she tried to turn and leaves only to be pulled back by him.


He came closer to her and whispered slowly in her ears


Mujhe dund rahi thi?


Niveditha shook her head looking down


Kuch kehna hai ? he asked her


Niveditha looked up at him, her heart beating very fast, her breath short and tiny droplets of perspiration appearing on her forehead.


She again shook her head, nodding a no.


Lekin mujhe kehna hai'.


Meray saath chalogi, mujhe kuch dikhana hai thumhay .. He said in a very soft and gentle tone.


Niveditha, did not reply but turned away from facing the other direction. She wanted to stay with him, his company is what she craved the most !


Her heart first time beat the same syllables as virens'


Viren slowly turned her around and held her chin with his fingers, giving it a little push but her eyelids were closed as they refused to look at him.


[YOUTUBE]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pXoPoeIwnRU[/YOUTUBE]

her heart beat for him

singing'


Nivi:

Chaahe tum kuchh na kaho

maine sun liya

Ki saathi pyaar ka

mujhe chun liya

Chun liya

Maine Sun liya


She opened her eyes and found him looking in a longing manner at her. She turned away. Viren took her by her hands and turned her around towards him..


Viren: Pehla nasha Pehla khumaar
Naya pyaar hai naya intezaar
Kar loon main kya apna haal
Aye dil-e-bekaraar
Mere dil-e-bekaraar
Tu hi bata

Pehla nasha Pehla khumaar


Niveditha went over to the lawn to help vandana..

As she walked through the grass

Viren imagined her dancing with him. The entire valley was under their feet and the sky below them.


Viren : Udta hi firoon in hawaon mein kahin
Ya main jhool jaoon in ghataon mein kahin
Udta hi firoon in hawaon mein kahin
Ya main jhool jaoon in ghataon mein kahin
Ek kar doon aasmaan zameen
Kaho yaaron kya karoon kya nahin
Pehla nasha Pehla khumaar
Naya pyaar hai naya intezaar
Kar loon main kya apna haal
Aye dil-e-bekaraar
Mere dil-e-bekaraar
Tu hi bata
Pehla nasha Pehla khumaar


Chanchal asked viren to hold something and to put it inside the RV as they were starting to head towards another spot. Niveditha looked at viren and a moment later he was besides her. Caressing her hair, and slow dancing with her.

Nivi: Usne baat ki kuchh aise dhang se
Sapne de gaya vo hazaaron range ke
Usne baat ki kuchh aise dhang se
Sapne de gaya vo hazaaron range ke
Reh jaoon jaise main haar ke Aur choome vo mujhe pyaar se

Pehla nasha Pehla khumaar
Naya pyaar hai naya intezaar
Kar loon main kya apna haal
Aye dil-e-bekaraar
Mere dil-e-bekaraar


Everyone got inside the RV , viren and niveditha being the last with eyes on each other and only for each other'

Edited by Suchi-NivReniac - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
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When Divya said sid might need something and Viren replied 'akal ki'. That was superb, couldn't stop laughing. Rest of the scene is just like a dream come true. 😍 Thanks Suchi for selecting that song, you won't believe it but I am singing that one since their first date. You can't explain first feeling of love better than that song. I am in my NivRen dreamland and watching them sing 'Pahla nasha'. 😳 😍

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