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Posted: 15 years ago
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Originally posted by: Suchi-NivReniac



@ everyone Thank you!!! for those kind words and like million dollar encouragement!

@ navzz.. I agree completely with you about viren being the passionate lover.. ! and Nivi matching up to him and that is precisely why even though she is very shy person, outside.. there is so much inside..
And that was shown a bit , a little 5% in her approach towards viren, and her confession, her longing for him and more..


ANd I really hope I can do justice... I got a bit busy! but I will get to some of my thoughts later tonight : )



exactly !! I was not surprised at all when I read the part about Nivi dreaming about that almost Kiss, because that is exactly how I expected her to act and feel when she realizes her love for him !! as for doing justice, I know you will do absolute justice to it, because your understanding of them is even better then the CT's !!! 😆😉 Can't wit for your next scene hun !! am wide awake and sleepless waiting for it !! 😊😳
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Posted: 15 years ago
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omg dey r sooo cute................cont soon
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Posted: 15 years ago
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are navzz sonay jaoo.. kiyunki I have to go to my friends place right now and I will be back and write. So take rest my dear and I hope your nephew is doing well now...

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Posted: 15 years ago
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Originally posted by: Suchi-NivReniac

are navzz sonay jaoo.. kiyunki I have to go to my friends place right now and I will be back and write. So take rest my dear and I hope your nephew is doing well now...



He is feeling better then before but still unwell, but he should be okay in a day or two InshAllah !!

Oh you are going over to your friends place, in that case, will get some sleep, so that when I wake up, the first thing I do is read your scenes !! 😆 Have fun and enjoy yourself sweetie !!! *hugs*

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Posted: 15 years ago
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Oh wow Suchi...great work. Woke up to read all ur 4 scenes together. Great work...love the part where even Nivi's tears belong to Viren...can't wait for the rest. God Bless!
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Hey Suchiiiii!!!!!!!!!!!!! You are just amazing yaara. You made me speechless with such beautiful, mindblowing scenes. As my sweetu says "kaano vich tand padgayi" hearing our sweet Nivi say I love you to Viren and dreaming about kissing him. OH dear God its just a circle of enchantment as you described and we are enchanted by NivRen.
I was just dying from yesterday that what was Suchi writing and today I got sometime atlast and as soon as I came online directly I saw your post and jumped on it.
Beautiful scenes Suchi, you out do yourself. And I like the way you never ever deter with the characters nature. I don't know ki what CT's will show us but not to worry as we have you to fulfill our hearts desire. The way you are portraying Sid-Divya love story in the side is amazing. The sisterly bond we all love is very much appreciated and along with that devar-bhabi relation which we all love to watch. Keep writing more an dmore dear and send us to NivRen heaven all this year.
I like how Sweetu was all confused in 4th scene, that is the first time for our sweetu all confused. Oh my poor Sweetu, kya haal hogayi hai.
I have to agree with Navi, me too worry so much about how CT's will handle NivRen's love story. But atleast we got you and you know how to handle the story. Thank God for that.
Suchi, Thank you dear for writing retreat for us even on holidays, really appreciate your time and work.
@Navi, hope your nephew is doing better dear. I will keep him in my prayers.
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Suchi, I see you online..Are you writing the 5th scene??? Hats off to you..
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Posted: 15 years ago
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@suchi di ... you are awesome ... I love how you are totally correctly depicting the characters ... at least you keep me sane ...love the nivdiv scenes , the bhabhi -devar scenes , Divsid and Nivren scenes too .. this is how it happens in a normal family 😊😊😊😊
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Wow.... They are too good.... Really wanted the show to move on as your story....

Plz continue soon.... can't wait for the next part....
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Scene 5


Viren ran over to where niveditha was standing.


She was talking to vandana, when she felt the slight tap on her shoulders.


Viren grabbed her hands and slowly squeezed them. Niveditha looked at him wide eyed, surprised. Vandana continued speaking to her not noticing the changes in her pupils. Niveditha tried to take her hands out of his grab, slowly twisting them.


Viren , kya hua kuch chahiye kya, asked vandana..


Viren who was enjoying her expressions, looked up with a start and shook his head


Kuch nahi tayiji, he said continuing to hold her hands

Ok Readers now press this play button, it's a mix of one of the sweet memories in Tamil and hindi. And then read the scene below to enjoy it to the fullest.

[YOUTUBE]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AgKGP4m2QgM[/YOUTUBE]



It seemed as if all the words were blurred out, as niveditha stopped struggling to take her hands off from his grab.

She looked at him, straight into his eyes and smiled.

Her eyes were shy but she looked into his eyes again, as if conveying some hidden messages.



Vandana seemed oblivious to the eye decoding that was going on


Viren was taken aback by her gesture and for a second seemed very confused but his heart leapt with joy confirming unknown feelings.


Niveditha looked around to see if there was anyone around and she quickly pinched the inside of viren's hands.


Ouch! Viren let go of hands at once and glared at her as she passed by him, her saree pallu slowly caressing his hands, following her.


Niveditha walked towards the kitchen, and then slowly turned back to see viren in an apparent trance. She smiled at his state and turned her back towards him.


What?! Ye kya hua? Viren questioned himself. He then pinched himself


OUCHH!!!! He screamed,


Kya hua viren? Came a voice far from the RV end.


Kuch nahi tayiji, viren brushed off hurrying towards niveditha.


Niveditha, put the pot with water on the top of stove. She then pulled her hair to a side and turned on the gas. As she turned to get the teabags she realized that they were placed on the top shelf of the cabinet, so she looked viren and pointed towards him with her eyes meaningfully and then pointed towards the cabinet shelf.


Viren who was staring at her, lost for words, stumbled in hurry to get the bags for her only to trip on his foot. He the fell on niveditha but she held him with her hands on his chest, stopping the fall.


Viren's eyes, became wider, if that was possible as it was seeming that they might pop out any second.


Niveditha pointed towards the shelf, requesting him to get the bags with her eyes.


Viren , with his mouth slightly open pulled out the jar that contained the teabags. Niveditha took them from him and put them in the steaming pot of water. She then poured some milk waiting for it to come to a boil.


She then looked at viren and asked him to get him sugar indicating towards the top cabinet with her pleading eyes. A smile peeped on to viren's face as he gave her the sugar jar. Niveditha put 2 teaspoons of it in the tea and closed the gas as it came to a boil.


She then took out a cup and poured the tea into it, placed the cup on a saucer, then putting it on her palm went towards viren -offering it to him.


Viren's smile vanished and was replaced with a questioning look on his eyes. He turned around and looked to see if there was anyone around. He then took the cup from her hands and took a sip from it , not taking his eyes off her face.


She then asked him through her eyes, as if to say " how was the tea?"


Viren responded by making a facial expression indicating that the sugar was less as he pointed towards the sugar jar.


Niveditha took the cup from his hands and then looked at him , her eyes meeting his for a second and then a shyness came over them, but soon she turned the cup around to where viren had placed his lips and she took a small sip.


She then gave the cup back to him not quite looking at him but , then she brought her eyes to meet his and asked with them, "now"?


Viren stared at her , expressionless, shocked'


Niveditha, took advantage of his momentary loss of speech and smiled at him. She then lowered her gaze and then left towards the front area of RV to join the rest of the family.


Viren who was still shocked, with a confused look he placed his finger in the tea..


OUCHHH!!! He screamed.. again..


Viren , ye ho kya gaya hai thumhay, kiyun chilla rahe ho, came the voice of

chanchal


k..kuch nahi ma .. viren stumbled. He put the cup on the counter and ran towards the front to find niveditha but he saw her walking with divya towards the exit door as the bus had come to a hault.


They had reached Manali!

Edited by Suchi-NivReniac - 15 years ago

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