Weekend Retreat 6 Scene 9 Page 13 Road Trip contd. - Page 4

Suchi, each and every scene that you write beats the previous one... You are too good and you have captured the essence of NiVren beautifully in your scenes.. Love it..

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Niveditha, uto beta.. a gentle voice welcomed her ears.

Beta, hum manali abhi 1 ghantay main pahunch jayengay , tho thumb hi ut jaao aur tayyar ho jao, said vandana..

Sorry chachi ji, pata nahi chala ki'ithni gehri neend aa gayithi' I am sorry .. Stammered niveditha, rushing to get up

are.. koi baat nahi beta, vandan assured. Abhi tak to divya bhi nahi uti she smiled main use jaker utathi hun.

Niveditha nodded and watched vandana leave towards the front end of the RV

Vandana smiled as she saw divya resting her head on Sidharth's shoulders. She was happy that sidharth and divya were finally beginning to realize their importance in each other's life.

Divya, she called softly, uto beta..

Divya stirred and looked around rubbing her left eyes gently with her right hand and saw vandana standing in front of her.

She stood up with a start and started apologizing

I am sorry ma, she continued going scarlet red. Surely vandana must have noticed her head on sidharth's shoulder. Not meeting her eyes, divya rushed away from her towards the bathroom. Vandana could not help but smile at her.

Soon niveditha and divya joined Vandana in the section with kitchen and started preparing breakfast.

Nivi thum bread ko toast kerkay is basket main rakh do main chai bana lethi hun.

Tekh hai chachi ji.. replied nivi

Aur divya thum wahan refrigerator sey butter nikalker rakhdo suggested vandana. Main jaker ma aur bauji ko chai dekhar aathi hun

Divya and niveditha were quite not meeting each other's eyes. Divya was still flushed with what vandana had seen and niveditha was feeling extremely uncomfortable for confessing her true feelings about viren to Divya.

The sound of the tinkling glasses brought divya back to her senses. She saw niveditha standing besides her and all of a sudden all that had gone through between them came gushing down on her.

Nivi.. she called out to her sister. Niveditha looked at divya, she could see her questioning eyes

Divya smiled calmly at her and cupped her face with her hands as if to assure her.

Niveditha smiled at her sister

Wow , kya pyar hai .. came a voice behind them

Startled both looked behind them and found viren smiling, standing with hands in his pockets.

Niveditha looked away from him quickly and started stacking the dishes into the cabinets from the dishwasher.

Viren moved closer to her and stood with his back facing the counter. A soft crease appeared on his forehead as he watched niveditha purposefully avoiding him.

Did he do something? This was the first thought that came across his mind. Usually niveditha responded to him well, well may be not his love but she always did seem to like his tactics then why was she avoiding him.

Kithnay zaalim log hai is dunia main. Pati bhuka mar raha hai lekin yahan kisi ko koi fikr nahi he said dramatically

Niveditha turned her face away and smiled. How should she respond to him? She could not even look him into his eyes.

Divya who could sense her discomfort stepped in

Natak band karo apna, ma nay kaha hai ki 45 min main hum manali pahunch jayengay aur vahan sab breakfast karengay. She said

Kya! 45 min, tab tak tho main sookh ker patha ho jaunga.. viren continued.. kash koi meray liye ek cup chai hi bana de, viren said trying to move closer to where niveditha was standing.

Niveditha could feel her heart racing. Why did she have to be soo weak she thought angrily.

m.main banathi hun she replied trying to sound as normal as she could.

Viren could not understand what was going on, he looked at Divya and raised his eyebrows as if asking her 'whats the matter with her?'

Divya first looked at niveditha who was looking away from both of them, and then at viren, and she smiled. Indicating with her hands, assuring him that everything was ok.

Main abhi athi hun, shayad chachiji ko koi madad chahiye Niveditha quickly said and almost ran off towards the other end of RV.

Bhabi, ye niveditha ko kya ho gaya hai.. asked viren with a concerned voice.

Wow , Viren sood, actually pareshan? Replied divya in a teasing manner.

Viren looked at her confused, not able to grasp what she was saying

Viren , koi baat nahi hai. Voh teek hai, actually bilkul teek hai divya said excited thinking about the very thought.

Bhabi.. app dono kal raat ko bait ker batain ker rahe thay na? niveditha nay kuch kaha.. ? mujeh nahi lagtha hai ki voh teek hai. Kuch tho zaroor hua hai, continue viren completely oblivious to divya's newly found reason for excitement.

Kuch nahi hai viren, abh main ye nahi kahungi ki baat nahi hai, kiyunki baat hai, lekin jo baat hai voh main nahi kahungi kiyunki ' jisey kehna hai aur jis-sey kehna hai voh kudh hi baat ko kahay aur sunay.. said divya with a sparkle in her eyes.

Kya? Viren looked at her utterly confused.

Aapnay abhi konsi language main baat ki hai bhabi? Lagtha hai sidharth bhaiyyah kay saath rehker aapko kuch zyada hi asar ho gaya, he said circling his fingers around his head indicated that she had gone crazy.

Thum rukho main abhi aathi hun.. divya made a grab at viren only to catch the thin air around him.

I loved this scene is so light hearted and full of anticipation. I always like Viren and Divya's nok-jhoks, Bhabhi-Devar and Jija-Saali these are the most fun relations we have and you have captured it pretty well. Ab dekhte hai Nivi kab tuk aanken churati hai Viren se. 😉 With Viren I am also waiting patiently for Nivi's confession. 😉

awwww my darling Nivi !! Feeling so shy and awkward with Viren and him just worried about her because he doesn't realized what has happened !! 😆 and it was so typical Viren to be starving as usual !!! 😆

Btw am also loving the budding love story between DivSid 😊 Loved it Suchi ! U just keep getting more brilliant with each scene !! 👏

Oh Suchi Diiiiiiiiii ....

wowo..>>Suchi Di...can i call you Di...For all you know I might be older to you...:p

WOW..

@ everyone Thank you!!! for those kind words and like million dollar encouragement!

@ navzz.. I agree completely with you about viren being the passionate lover.. ! and Nivi matching up to him and that is precisely why even though she is very shy person, outside.. there is so much inside..
And that was shown a bit , a little 5% in her approach towards viren, and her confession, her longing for him and more..

ANd I really hope I can do justice... I got a bit busy! but I will get to some of my thoughts later tonight : )