Dil Ko Choo Liya ...note pg 72!! - Page 13

Originally posted by: ...Nikhita...

awesome update!

thank you dear..😊...!!!!

Originally posted by: meetun66

awsome di........

meet scenes r best...so cute............

meher is alone nw................bad...................

jaldi kuch kro na....

aur ye dev........😡

so irritating...............

sorry di this tym no long comment...

busy with my entarnce examz....

hope u understand

thank you dear..😊...!!!! and all the best for your exams ....do work hard...!!

Originally posted by: angel82

Nice update...

So it was Dev's drugs that Heer came across...her confrontation was written well, dev's helplessness in the situation , his concern and love for Prem's family and prem are all well expressed in the update...

but dont you think we have ha enough of Dev ? atleast i hve had..cant even enjoy premeer coz DevD is around...tension tension tension...i'm waiting to know what destiny has in store for him...so far he's been a positive character...

thank you dear..😊...!!!! aww ...don't say that....!actually i wanted to wrap this up by premeer marriage...but somehow decided against that and wrote this track..... and you are getting bored means i have to make a decent ending fast....😕

hi all...!!!!

chapter 85

Prem stretched himself ..yawning.....his hands searching for the warmth to which he had become used to in all mornings..

he opened his eyes as he missed something and found himself alone in the tent.....

Oh!!mein ghar par nahi hoo...!!!he grinned to himself as he raked his hair with his fingers...

his thoughts instantly went to last days celebrations.....

it was pure fun out there in the beach as the boys drenched the girls in the sea....then the bonfire ....anthakshari....he had joined all with full enthusiasm beside being tired of a whole days office work..... he succeeded in staying awake till he and heer patiently parted the couples and sent them to boys tent and girls tent respectively....!!!!

but after that ...in their tent.....

preet had been considerate to put their tent a bit away from the rest...and he had so many things planned to make the night memorable for them....

prem smacked his head as he remembered slumping on to the mattress pulling heer with him....and then...nothing.....he was so spent that the cozy feeling and warmth of her body became his lullaby....

Prem got out of the tent and stretched his body.....the dawn was beautiful.......wind played with his hair and the coolness of it hitting his bare chest....

"hey PB...!!! over here...!"

He turned to see Preet and Nihal seated with Meher and Sneha ....sipping the morning coffee....

"gud morning guys.....!how was the night ....did ANYONE sleep....!!!"

prem raised an eyebrow in question and the naughtiness in his voice was unmistakable.....!!!

"ahem....we...we..all tried to sleep....."Nihal tried not to look at Sneha....while Preet pretended to write something on the sand....

"Prem bhayya ...yeh lo coffee...."Sneha put on a calm face avoiding Nihal's gaze on her ....

"by the way....where is Ash nd Adi.....?!"prem enquired ....

"well you know Ash PB....!how could she give a miss to such a great morning without a bit working out...see there...."Preet pointed to the two spots moving far along the shore

"hmm...better if they don't find another way of working out....!!"Prem commented sarcastically to which the girls stifled their laughter...

"Meher tum heer ....heer nazar nahi aarahi....?"Prem tried hard to put out his question as casually as possible.....dreading the amount of teasing he was about to get in revenge from the couples......

but he could not help asking it ....a strange suffocation rambled within his heart ....he was so used to her .....that missing her this morning was too much for him....

"Iam sorry PB ...mujhe pehle hi bata dena chahiye tha....wo Heer di ...she was so tensed about Dev Bhayya .....so i dropped her off at home late night ....!"

Prem choked on the gulp of hot coffee...."wwwhat?? "

he sat upright tensed .ignoring the coffee spilling on to his thighs......."lekin...."

Meher cut in....

"oh!jiju.....aap itna tension mat lijiye.....Dev bhayya ke bare mein di thodi zyada hi concerned thi.....mujhe to kal vishwas hi nahi ho raha tha ki di humare saath aa rahi hai....bhayya ko aise chodke....aur gayathri aunty ne dev bhayya ka ache se khayal rakhne ko bhi bola tha....."

prem looked crushed.....

"phir bhi ...wo mujhse kehke jaa sakthi thi..."

Sneha patted prem...."bhayya aap to itne thake the ....bhabhi ne kaha ki aap bed pe girte hi so gaye ...."

"so much for the preperations ....!!!"prem heard Preet mutter ..but he was not in a mood to take in the joke.....

he had not expected heer to leave him like that and it weighted in his heart......

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Heer paced in the kitchen restless......she knew Prem will be angry at her .....but what could she do....?

the whole evening her eyes darted to the profile of their penthouse .....

what was sonu doing ...?is he in pain....?all kinds of fears were pressurising her as she pretended to enjoy the evening.....

Gayathri had instructed her to leave him with the drug in handy .....

she had consulted a psychiatrist from JH over phone and he had suggested this method for finding out the willingness of the patient to get out of the vicious grip of the drug...

heer was sure that her sonu will never break a promise given to her.....

and that meant pain and agony.......the blood curdling sight she saw at his room was still sending shudders through her spine.....

and she could not bear the thought of leaving him all alone to writh in pain.....

she wanted to ask prem's permission .

but then she knew her prem......he won't allow her to go alone ....if Prem came with her the couples out there may get off the line....it was a difficult task to convince the young lovers to be away from their partner in sucha romantic atmosphere.....

and moreover Prem was not meant to know what Dev was upto....so she had asked Preet to drop her at home.....

and when she ran to his room......Heer sighed .....Dev was in pain.....he was lying all curled up on his bed clutching his stomach and biting on to the cusion to avoid screaming in pain......

she had comforted him...muttering soothing words .he had held on to her as if she was the last straw of relief.......and after an eternity his system withdrew from its arrogance .....he slipped into a tired sleep upon her lap......

heer pushed away the thoughts as she heard the door knob click and chatter of the group as they entered .....

she had barely winked her eyes last night but nevertheless freshened up and prepared breakfast for all.....

"dee....hum fresh hoke aate hai....."meher called out as the girls and boys walked into the respective rooms .....

"haa...jaldi aana ..breakfast ready hai...."heer replied smilingly as she patted Preet on his back.....but the smile faded as her eyes fell on to the stern look of her husbands eyes......

."prem...wo mein...."heer stammered unable to form words .....

prem said nothing and walked to the stairs aiming for their room.....

heer was shattered ...she already knew that he will be angry upon her but the silence ,the indifference was too much for her to bear.....

"heer..."a hand pressed onto her shoulder ....

heer turned to look at the knowing glance in Nihaal's eyes ...

"tum...prem se kehkar laut sakthi thi....btw ..how's dev....."

"he is okay now...."heer said lowering her head in guilt.....

"acha tum ek kaam karo....jao aur Prem ko manalo.....we'll manage the breakfast ....okay...?!"

he patted her cheeks and heer looked at him in gratitude....

before she went up heer once more checked in both rooms to assure everything was available for the people there....

Prem was coming out of the bath as she got in their room....

her face dimmed as he did nothing to acknowledge her presence.....

heer had took out his dress and laid on the bed ....

her eyes which were sad ...twinkled the instant she saw water droplets falling down from his hair......

smiling to herself she took the towel from the hanger and moved confidently to him......

Prem looked at her confused as she pulled him to sit on the bed in front of her ....and started drying his hair....

she felt Prem stiffening under the towel but he made no effort to move away.....

she care fully dried his hair as he sat obediently .....

heer removed the towel ..letting it drop on to his lap.......

prem was still looking down...not at all looking at her......he was hurt by her action.....and it had made him realise the way she had entwined herself into his mind ,body and soul...

the feeling of being disconnected from her when he heard Preet telling that heer had left...was still ringing in his mind.....

the touch of her cool palms on his cheeks ....made him stiffen again...

her fingers were shivering a bit ...as they put a little force to persuade him to look up.....unwillingly Prem looked up at the ocean of love in her eyes......

"naaraz ho mujhse.....??!!!"

her voice was so slight but he did'nt miss the hurt in that ......

he took her palm from his cheeks and held them between his...and broke his silence......

"wo...Dev ..ab kaisa hai wo...?"

heer sat down on her knees .....close to him....

"sonu theek hai...so raha hai.....!"

again silence fell as two hearts thudded violently wanting to talk to each other very badly......

"i am so sorry.....!!!"heer said and prem looked up ...a smile twinkled at his lips as he saw heer pulling her ears and pouting....

"please....maaf kardo na...."heer pleaded again ...this time to be rewarded with the open laugh from prem.....

she got up and put herself on him making him tumble on to the bed....both laughing heartily.....and as prem rolled over her .......

their lips sought the consilatory warmth from each other ....a passionate kiss which melted the few moments of agony they had spent being away from each other....

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Dev opened his heavy eyelids....slowly......and looked around expecting heer near by.....

he heard noise from the hall and quickly assumed that the campers have returned ......

he sat up holding his throbbing head.....

last night .....its darkness and depth......rolled back into his mind......

he had been waiting with his eyes closed for the reaction of his system when it was deprived of the drug.....

first it began as the throbbing in his head .....then it progressed to dryness in throat and pain in eyes....

it was then he decided to go to his room.....

as he took the stairs ....he felt his muscles become his enemies....the shooting pains were beginning and somehow he put himself in the bed.....

pari....ma....pari....maa....his lips chanted the names which were holding him to sanity.....as the pain become unbearable his eyes automatically went to the cupboard ....to his surprise it was open...and he could see the ampules and syringes kept there...

an inner force made him lung to them...his only way out of this misery.....but then...he stopped......

a face ,angelic came before his eyes .....he saw..heer in a white gown ...dressed as an angel......his pari.....!!!

he felt his urge to the drugs blow off...and succumbed to the unexplainable pain ....his mind telling her name over and over .....as if his sanity depended on her name.....

then....he felt a pair of warm hands soothing him...,dabbing him with cool cloth ....holding his head to her chest as his mom would do when he was ill....

but it was altogether differnt feel.....her scent .....her warmth was working like an antidote in his system.....he could bear the pain now .....with his pari by his side ...he could do anything.....his spasms stopped slowly and as he lay upon her lap totally drained out by the physical and mental voilence...he began to see the end of the darkness .......of the night .....of his life......!!!!

so how was the POV special...!!!! do let me know....please....😳 luv u all surya

Loved it. Heer left to take care of Dev without telling Prem. Heer that not good.

awsum....

aacha hua prem naaraz tha....nahi to prem n heer sene kaha se milta???

luved it di....awsum update.....

thx for pm///

me

edit add

Hi surya.. how r u doing??? why did this part end so jaldi jaldi ha?? Adhe se zyada footage to uss dev ne kha liya..he's getting too much importance I must say.

I really love this dil ka..soul ka connection between premeer... they are so much connected to each other that even a small tug pains their heart. Its one of the most beautifully portrayed relationship by you. My god Premu ka gussa!!!! so pheeka!!! obviously Heer se bhala kitna gussa rehega bichara😳

BTW do I get a good MEET scene.. an emotional one??? I want to see their depth of love pls pls pls and btw it has been long since you wrote 'bout Shiv Gauri and Chah.. I really like Shiv you know.. he's such a jewel person, I really want to know what is happening in their life.. how Chah and Shiv are bonding...

Now Surya.. please dont torture us with any Premeer misunderstanding and separation.. you know I am reallly addicted to your dkcl version of Premeer....let them stay happy and send that Dev to rehab asap.. I am sure some young Mahan female doc can treat him and eventually fall in love😉


Luv ya

Update soon

Priyo😃

nice update.....

I did not mean the story is boring...what i meant is that i have had enuf of DevD- ..you have done a good job as a writer , its just that when i read i put myself into the story and read as if i'm there between them and the characters are alive infront of me.,...so that way, i donot like any interference between premeer...any threat to them, i donot like - the reason why i still do not like Adi ....same goes with Dev...