Dhoka - A story;new link-pg147;pts 1-22 pg-148&149 - Page 92

wonderful part.loved it.

Sorry yaar for being so late, it took me three days to read it.

Actually i read it in installments, don't think that it is too lengthy. 😉 😉 😉
Good update and i specially loved Shalu's work in this update.😛 😛 😛 She is really sweet heart and whatever she did for Raj was really brilliant.😃 😃 😃 She thinks too much how to tease Raj more and more and this time she did wonderful job. 👏 👏 👏

That's y i love Shalu specially. The best scene was that when Naina and Raj were completely blushing and they were unable to look at each other too. Naina too was understanding Raj's condition. Raj was feeling uneasy and i was laughing at his condition but finally both couldn't manage to sleep alone without each other.

Like a good wife Naina went to Sameera to know about her husband's liking and disliking. She got a lot of hooting in response and again she blushed. She knew about the Fresher Ball come her Reception Party g8 idea of Neelu. Loved the bhabhi and nanad talk. Rajveer told Naina finally about every thing.

He and his mission here and how Naveen was trapped, he and Naina both have a clear doubt on Nair about this matter and i know soon Raj will prove all that with help of Bunty Chaubey and Naina.

Yaar pls try to give regular updates of this fic as it's my most fav fic. 😛 😛 😛

Originally posted by: Dhara_s

Beautiful...!!!

This was a wonderful update...!!!
Thanks Dhara...... glad you liked it.... 😃

Man...Rajveer is a different someone who shrieks if his house is turned into a heaven...!!! Upar se bolta hai...Kamre ko garden bana diya....!!! Dumb...!!!
Love probably turns a person dumb as well as blind.... 😆😆😆 who knows... I have never been in love... 😉😆😆
But if you ask Rajveer, he wouldnt even know what he was rambling... he was probably stuck in time on seeing the single pillow... 😉😉 and didnt know what he spoke after that... 😆😆

But I thoroughly enjoyed their nervousness, blushes and Raj's slip of toungue's...Even my eyebrows went up when I read jaldi se kapre utaaro...!!!!😆
Dhara!!! what did you have in mind??? 😆 Raj is such a gentleman and what did you think for a moment?? 😆

lekin unke beech aisa awkwardness toh hona chahiye.... 😉 considering the fact that theirs is neither a love marriage nor arranged... 😆😆

But they still did use only one pillow...!!!! 😳
lo... Shalini's wish was fulfilled atleast partially..... (Dont ask me what was her *complete* wish... I cant give PG rating to my replies to comments...) 😆

Now that they have Rajveer has shared a very important secret with Naina and they have both realised that Nair is upto something....waiting to know how they will work out things to catch Nair...!!!!
it will be interesting to watch I promise.... maybe a shock... 😉 (I know.. humility and me never go together.. 😆😆)

Update soon...!!!! will do....

Originally posted by: preet09

hiii yeti 😛
Hi Preet.... 😊

the update was just great.....thanks 4 the update...i was waiting eagerly for the update 😍
thanks a lot yaar... I am glad you liked it.... 😃

the moment raj opened the door and his mind directly says "SHAL"....😆 😆 😆 that was just fantastic...
he knows it can only be Shalini who could do things like that... 😆😆

how can shalili leave raj-naina without doing any masti...😆 😆 😆. but shalini is an example of best friend who can do anything for their friends happiness and to make them feel embarrassing also 😆 😆 😆. the way she run out saying "happy suhagrat" was just mindblowing. i ahve read the part atleast 5 times and not able to stop laughing.🤣 🤣 🤣
aww.. glad to hear that.... but post a comment everytime you read it.... 😆😆😆 (just kidding... )
Shalini is of course on Mission Embarrass-Raj-Naina and will do anything to succeed.... 😆😆 and she knows these two will need all the push they can get from her until atleast one of them realizes their love... 😳😳 oh and she will do anything to give that push... 😉😉

the way raj said kapde utaro and then correcting himself before running to closet was just great...i am just speechless 😆 😆 😆
hehheheh... the blushing-fumbling-bumbling Raj is a new face to his character no.... 😆

i really like raj and naina's flashback.that was so nice. raj doing surya namashkar with his dad and naina going on picnic with her dad and nanu. its really nice dear. 👏 👏 👏
thanks again! both their flashbacks need to be handled soon too... not much.. just Raj's early life and Naina's life after Navin....

so Lt. chaubey us back. i really liked his character in LRL, m looking forward to read his role here to.
just like the show, even here he will make his appearance only when needed... 😆😆 but he is there to help Raj in any way he can..... and what does he know about Navin??? 😕😕😕

neelu and aalekh scene was emotional. m feeling bad for neelu.
from his stony silence to Neelu's actions, Alekh has now graduated to showing his frustration on her.... dont ya think things will start looking up soon for them??? 😉😉

naina and raj reach on a same decision regarding major nair. i really hate him. and i really want to see raj's trap over major nair.
how can Nair not be a villain... 😉😉 next 2 episodes will deal with how Raj and Naina trap Nair... 😃

on the whole, the update was brilliant 👏 👏 👏
thanks a lot... and thanks for the comments too... it gives me more enthu to write better... 😃
plz continue soon
luv preet 🤗

Originally posted by: guglu088

Hi Yeti,
Hi Guglu.... How are you?

How are you? Thank God that you finally updated this part. I was waiting so eagerly for the next part; RN marriage night to be precise.😉After all with Shal around it was surely not going to be ordinary.😆 See, how right I was.😆
Haila... kitni besharam ho tum!! 😆
You are eagerly awaiting for their wedding night!! 😉😉 are you allowed to think of such things?? how old are you?? 😆
But you were right... where Shalini is, there will surely be dhamaka, no? 😉😉

Okay, I will start from the beginning now that I have finished reading it atleast thrice. Actually i have lost count of how many I have finished reading this update in the last 1 hour. Thankfully you did not break it like you usually do😛 and so we all got a treat.... (not torture please, RN can never be a torture.)
Aage se ek ek baar padne keliye ek ek comment dena padega... 😆😆😆 just kidding... but I am glad to know that you liked the update...

And as for your warning, I was literally laughing like a maniac as I finished the update as well as at the "CLEAN" dialogue. Thank God you didn't edit this part or else it would have taken longer. And do tell me why you didn't like the finished product?😉 😆 😕. It was wonderful. 👏 👏 👏
Bas socha thoda zyada narrative hogaya... but moreover, its possibly my frustration at not having been able to include everything I wanted to in the update.... likhte likhte itna lamba update hogaya aur I couldn't include a few things I had planned to... 😕😕

Raj shrieked at Shal when he opened the doors of his room. This Shal is so naughty😉. Even I freaked out when I read the description of the room. Poor Raj!!!😆 😆 😆. And then, the bedroom; with flowers all around and his bed...OMG!!!😆 😆 😆. Black satin sheets, rose petals, cushions arranged in the shape of heart and the icing on the cake - A SINGLE PILLOW!!!!!!!😉
Haina Shal kamaal ki?? 😆
Only she could come up with something like that... and poor Raj and Naina for being her friends... 😆😆😆 atleast until one of them relaize their love, she is going to keep up nudging and pushing them like this... 😉😉😉 Wonder what Shal thought when she instructed that only ONE PILLOW should be kept... 😆

Poor Raj! And poor Naina as well. 😆 Confused at first at Raj's reaction, when she saw the single pillow and heard Shal's "Happy Suhaagraat" she too put the two and two together. My God, I really want to know who was blushing the hardest - Raj or Naina.😆
Dono aapas mein compete kar rahe thhey... 😆😆😆
And it was a tie......... 😆

And the way Raj was blabbering about that kapde utaro 😆 😆 😆 and then quickly correcting himself, he ran away to his closet and the way Naina defended him in her mind.
Raj is not above the law of the land, looks like.... nervous like any newly married man on his suhaag raat... 😆

But Raj indulged in a useless exercise of taking out another pillow, because they ended up using one pillow after all. Ye toh har raat ki kahani hai, ek takiye par sona.😆 Naina couldn't sleep because she missed the comfort of Raj's arms and same was the case with Raj. Ultimately he took her in his arms and within minutes both of them fell asleep. How sweet!!!😊
Glad you liked it.... these are incidents to show their level of comfort with each other... just because they are married they don't decide to fall in love... their love is something that was born even before Raj filled her maang the other night.... and of course, just because they are married they dont decide to plunge into it... 😉😉😉 they are taking it slowly and gradually falling in love... 😳😳😳

There were some sweet flashbacks of both Raj and Naina's childhood. They were really lovely. And Raj is yet to know how strong a woman his wife is. Just wait till he gets to know about her being a RAW agent.😉😕 I am really looking forward to his reaction at that time.
Will he be impressed? OR will he think she deceived him by hiding her identity? Will he think that she came to KMA to spy on him?? 😕 Jaane keliye dekhte rahiye Dhoka............ 😆

So Bunty Chaube has made his appearence. I used to love him in LRL. I can see that here too you have made him a delightful character. And he surely knows more than anybody else. He knows about Naina being Navin's daughter but does he know about her being a RAW agent? I wonder how much he knows.
He is a very enigmatic man and definitely knows more than he shows... but how much does he know about Naina and Navin's death? That is something to wait and watch... 😉😉

Naina wanted to know Raj's favourite sweet dish.😊 That was so nice of her. And Raj had woken her up in the morning with a cup of coffee. So there is a reception party along with the Fresher's ball. 😊 Simply great.
Story ko aage badana hoga naa... 😆😆 The reception party will be an eye-opener for a lot of things.... a lot of things are going to be revealed...... 😉

I feel sad for Neelu.Aalekh said a lot to her. And the young man admiring Sherry is Huda I suppose.
You tend to shout at those you feel you have a right on..... maybe Alekh is doing the same... 😳😳😳
Sherry's admirer is indeed Huda... like I had mentioned in the episode that Sameera made her entry in....

Who said Raj cannot work with Naina around him. Both of them zeroed onto the same conclusions about Major Nair.
Naina is a distraction for Raj... 😳😳 but not when even she is intent on uncovering the truth.... if you understand what I mean... 😆😆😆

And that pest - Nair.😡 😡 😡 I won't waste my vocabulary on him. Raj was amused at the sight of his swearing wife.😆 😆 😆. You have a lot to know about your darling wife Captain Shekhawat.😆.
Raj ko abhi tak patha nahi ki woh kahaan phasa.... 😆😆😆

And Naina didn't panick at the name of Mishra this time because she knows she belongs to Raj. Oh I loved those lines Yeti.😊 And our darling Naina was pre occupied with Nair as well as Raj's lunch. The way she asked him "lunch ke liye time hain na"- hahaha😆 😆 😆
She is kind of taking to the role of being a typical wife to Raj... 😆
I am glad you liked those lines.... Naina's fear about the past incidents have been destroyed by the comfort she derives from knowing that Raj is with her every step of the way and that she belongs only to Raj..... 😳😳😳

Oh no! The comment has become so long. 😲My longest ever comment on any story. Arey itne bade to mai updates bhi nahi deti. Hope you are not bored with its sheer length and my mindless blabbering. I was too caught up with this update.
Oh not at all... I enjoyed your comments greatly.. aise hii comment deti rehna.... 😆😆😆

Anyways' update asap. Take care.

Love
Guglu

Originally posted by: Revolutionbreez

Hi yeti !!😃This is mana!😉 well i've changed my Usrname...so thot u wnt recognise me...😛
Hi Mana.... I got your PM.. so no worries.... 😃

OMG your warning !! Even I got conscious of my age at first...😆 and then you write that UPDATE is CLEAN....😆
Bache allowed nahi hai... how did you read?? 😆😆 waise looks like I will have to stronger warnings when I get to ahem ahem passionate encounters between Raj and Naina.... 😆

well it was SUPERB !!!!👏👏
Aww... thanks a lot yaar... I am glad you liked it.... 😃

This Shal...i tell you !!! 😲 She is too much yaar !!! 😆 😆

But then she is the jaan of all them...always upto something and adding spice and cheer in Raj's life !😃
What can you expect when Shal is around? Ans: expect the unexpected... 😆😆 but I am glad that all you guys like Shalini as much as you like the leads of the story...... That's an accomplishment for me as a writer.... 😃😃

Even I was freaked out reading the description of their bedroom....😆😆 bechare Raj ki toh baat imagine kar sakte hai !!!
Sure... you can imagine.... a deeply blushing, red-faced Raj looking here and there nervously.... 😆

And then ..." Happy SuhaagRaat !" 😆 😆
But Raj did understand even before Shalini's "wishes"..... 😉😉😉 of course he wouldnt have guessed that Shalini could do something like this and embarrass them both so much....... 😆😆😆

Awwww....Naina is so innocent !😊 She is thinking why Raj is annoyed with Shal when all she did was splendid decor...

But then she too got the meaning and blushing hard!
Bachi hai Naina.... too innocent for her own good... agreed she is 24 but she needs to 'learn' a lot you see... 😉
(Okay, Yeti.... control... Mana is a bachi herself... you aren't allowed to discuss such stuff with her... 😆)

Aur phir Raj !!! What was he blabbering???? 😆 😆 Good that he ran away in the washroom, before he could make himself and her more awkward....
Nervousness does that to a man... even if the man is Captain Rajveer Singh Shekhawat.... 😉😉😉

Hmm...inke networks range mein aane keliye abhi thoda waqt lagega!!
Not too long.... 😉😉

Neways, I'm waitng for next UD....remember? u told me ki 2 UDs mein kisiko toh apne feelings realise hoge??? ( 😆 😆 I guess you would now completely stop me giving any more hints! 😆 😆)
Haan haan... yaad hai.... and I will try my bestest to include that in my next update..... you see, I started writing the next update and as usual, I keep on writing about RN.... 😳😳😳 so will try my best to include the 'realization' in next part and if not, 200% it will be in part after next....

(and now I guess you would never ask me for hints..... 😆😆😆)

Raj and Naina can't sleep without holding each other and he pulls her in his arms...That was Sweet !!! 😳
I had hoped for romantic..... but chalega....... 😆

Raj realised what a strong person his wife is...well abhi toh aap kuch jaante nahi, jab pata chalega Naina RAW agent hai...tab kya hoga?
Sorry... no more hints.... 😆😆😆 wait and watch..... there is still time for that.... 😃

So, new entry !! BUnty Chaube !! He was fun to watch in LRL !! Lets see what he does here....
Raj needs help and Chaubey is not there, how could it be.... 😃 but I just made him more intriguing and smarter in the story than when compared to the show...

Ahaan!! So Naina wants to prepare Raj's fav sweet dish !! 😃
Responding in kind to the coffee he made for her... 😉😉

But I feel sad about Neelu !!
Happy times are round the corner for her too...😃

The RN convo in the end was very nice!! Thanks... glad you liked it....

Waiting eagerly for next UD....

You know na how eagerly we all wait !! 😔

Why you Updating soooooooooo late ???😔
Kya karoon yaar... its quite infrequent that I come online at IF... and moreover my work keeps me so busy that by the end of the day I am all set to crash... 😕 and of course each update is so long... (now you cant complain about the lengths... 😉😉) I debated with myself if its going to be shorter, relatively-frequent updates or this kind and I decided that this makes more sense... rather than cutting the flow of the scenes with too many sub-parts.....
But I will try to update more frequently....

Pllzzzzzzzzzzz....Update soon !!