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Posted: 17 years ago
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PART-2

She came to his house with her nervous steps and was confused seeing most of the lights of the house off except the dim light in the hall. She lightly pushed the main door, opening it she went inside. Her insides churned as she looked for him, hoping him to be in. Today she has come to him to say something and therefore her throat felt dry. She gulped a no. of times to subside the excitement inside her and calming herself a bit she called him out, " Prem…Prem" she walked in random directions not getting any response…

"Kya hai Heer?" he came out of the washroom skewing his shirt button and he stopped in his ways as she stood in front of him, looking elegant in that white kurta and peacock blue churidaar with the dupatta of same colour. Her hair left loose and the dim light were creating a magical effect around her which was making Prem tremble from inside. He thanked his conscience for switching off the bright lights in time otherwise his guilt stricken face contradicting his present feeling would have become difficult to hide from her. Keeping himself straight he continued "Ahha…looking awesome, are you planning to go somewhere? "

"Nah... You called me remember?"

"ya its just because you wanted to talk something really important" he sucked in a large amount of air "and I needed help too"

"So how can I help you?" she asked him moving towards him. "We'll come to that later, we still have got time" he said eyeing his watch "Tell me, what did you wanted to say?" He slapped himself hard from inside for pushing her but he had no choice other than that. " ummm… Prem" she paused, smiling shyly. "Yes?" he asked crossing his arms over his chest. "woh… woh… woh Prem…"

"Itna woh woh mat karo, I'll miss my flight."

"Flight?" Heer asked confusingly.

"Ya…flight, plane…" he made gestures with his hand and moved his hand over her head as if showing what a plane is.

"where are you going?"

"London."

"When are you returning?"

Prem turned towards his kitchen away from Heer and filling a glass with water he replied "I am not returning Heer.", he shut his eyes and grasped the glass tightly.

Heer was taken aback with the answer, her heart ached and tears started forming in her eyes, her larynx lost voice and she just stared at him , while he continued " what would I do by returning?", he crossed his fingers in front of him "as if I care for someone, or someone really very close to me is here" his voice started chocking but he covered that up well continuing " I am tired of helping others and living for other, come on I should get a life, hai na?". H e turned towards her smiling, who nodded forcing a smile. "Dekho baaton baaton mein we forgot to speak about you, what were you telling?" . Heer gulped and spoke up," nothing!packing ho gayi?"

"o no! that reminds me, I needed your help regarding that itself, will you help me?"

She shook her head silently and proceeding with him towards his bedroom.

Prem felt suffocated as he hoped that she'll scream, she cry or she'll scold him for leaving her all alone, but she didn't do any of those things but is helping him with his packing, not uttering a single word.

Silence prevailed in the room as she kept on packing stuffs and Prem stood by the door.

After the completion of packing she stood up and headed to leave.

"Heer you wanted to say something."

"Its getting late Prem, I should leave"

"Without speaking? Come on Heer kal se mein nahi hounga… so please tell me."

"Why are you concerned Prem? I am not anything to you right?"

Prem felt shaken up with the answer but satisfied, he was able to break her heart, that is all he wanted to do, but it pained him a lot. Therefore, he raised the chord of his voice to another pitch laughing and continued, "Sentiments…come on tell na…"

Heer without answering anything moved towards the door and Prem felt as if his life is leaving him, therefore to cherish the last few seconds with her he shouted "Heer, tumhe meri kasam, please tell."

Heer stopped near the door and turned her sight towards him, Her eyes were streaming with tears and she uttered " I love you Prem…and I'll always do." She composed herself and spoke up "all the best, live your life" and she went away, leaving a devastated Prem who sank himself to the ground fixing his gaze to the direction she left, letting his tears flow, and murmured "I am sorry Heer, I love you too."

The knock on the door brought back Prem to his present as he was in a drive down the memory lane recalling those last moments with her. He straightened himself and called out "Jiya…" , she came towards him and directly asked him " why did you leave her?". Prem looked on the other side and answered "kiski baat kar rahi ho tum?" " Heer" she added the name, and Prem twitched from inside " I don't know what are you speaking."

Jiya turned him towards her and made him look into her eyes " you cant lie to me Prem, me, your sister…I have seen you suffer without her, don't you love her?"

"no I don't?"

"stop lying Prem, if you didn't love her, then why didn't you unpack the bag she packed for you 1 and yrs ago, when you left her? Why are you disturbed after receiving the letter?"

"I am not disturbed"

"you face is telling the truth Prem, you are disturbed. If you care so much about her then why did you detach yourself from her, how could you?"

"I did it for her good." Prem confessed.

"good?"

"yes Jiya, I left her for her well being…"

" so, this letter is proving that she is well, right?"

"this letter is unimportant Jiya…"

"yes your face is showing that you have not considered this letter to be important, am I correct Prem?" she shook him

Prem couldn't take it more and sat down on the floor.

"Now what? Do you want to see her?" asked Jiya

" I don't know"

"Do you want to go back?"

"I don't know"


how is it???? do comment and be honest...


Priyadarshini aka Priyo😊

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Posted: 17 years ago
#22

awesome...... update👏.really grt .curious to know why prem leaved heer.plz contnue asap.

-sugi

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Posted: 17 years ago
#23

Originally posted by: sugi77


awesome...... update👏.really grt .curious to know why prem leaved heer.plz contnue asap.

-sugi




hey sugi thanks for commentling..ya you'll come to know why he left her soon... do read...
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Posted: 17 years ago
#24
hi,
it was awesome.
loved it.
cont.soon
take care
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Posted: 17 years ago
#25
Hai Priyo,
Thanks for adding me to ur PM list.That was a wonderful part but too much of suspense.I guess there's going to be a lot of flashbacks right? Curious to know what led to the present state of events.Do update quickly.
Now, i'm off to read ur other ff.Saw u've posted its update after quite a long time.Was waiting for it.Do add me to the PM list of that ff also if possible.
Bye
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Posted: 17 years ago
#26
Heyy Priyo!!! wow, it was wonderful!!! u described the flashback very well....so is Prem gonna go back to Heer or no?? lolz do continue soon!!!

Garima
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Posted: 17 years ago
#27
hey
awesum part 2
hope he goes back
wonder why he left heer
tooo goood
thanks for pm
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Posted: 17 years ago
#28
hey luved it very gud i hope he goes bck to heer do continue
thank u
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Posted: 17 years ago
#29
hey awsome update!! this is soo interesting..prem stilll loves heer, and he has to go back rite??i really wanna noe y..y...y?? y did prem leave his heer, wen they both loved eachother?? update soon..and take care..
~nikki😳
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Posted: 17 years ago
#30
what an update.Loved it.pls update soon.

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