Second chances FF

DB-Bhumi-Vidur?

Or Bhumi-prem?

or my Dhoomi

Lmao Dhanraj's comment on internal bleeding though🤣

Nice fic, keep writing👍🏼

(Btw I was thinking that, agar Vidur half Mahajan rahta toh Bhoomi sachmein Draupadi equivalent hoti, as she would be shipped with all the 4 brothers lmaoo 🤣🤣)

Originally posted by: Moonks

DB-Bhumi-Vidur?

Or Bhumi-prem?

or my Dhoomi

A fanfic on Bhumi-Vidur ( Bhidur )

Originally posted by: Syon_Anya41

Lmao Dhanraj's comment on internal bleeding though🤣

Nice fic, keep writing👍🏼

(Btw I was thinking that, agar Vidur half Mahajan rahta toh Bhoomi sachmein Draupadi equivalent hoti, as she would be shipped with all the 4 brothers lmaoo 🤣🤣)

That internal bleeding felt cringey to me that's why i added that note on top of the post🤣

Thanks I'll continue it after my practicals gets over

Last point; 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣

Great start...❤️

Dhanraj's comments my god 🤣

Setting and Characters: The chapter takes place in a hospital and features characters like Bhumi, Prem, Dhanraj, and Vidur. It's established that Prem has been involved in an accident and is in critical condition.

Dramatic Elements: The dialogue between characters, especially Dhanraj's misunderstanding of "internal bleeding," adds tension to the scene. The emotional turmoil and confusion of the characters are apparent, especially Bhumi's distress over Prem's condition.

Emotions and Conflict: The emotional distress and concern of the characters are evident, giving the reader insight into their relationships and struggles. There's tension between Dhanraj and DB, and Bhumi's internal conflict is established through her prayer at the temple.

Foreshadowing: The snippets from future chapters hint at future conflicts and developments, such as Dhanraj's questioning of his experiences and Bhumi's reluctance to meet Vidur face-to-face.

Writing Style: The writing style leans towards emotional expression, showcasing the characters' feelings and inner thoughts. The use of short sentences and dialogue helps move the story forward swiftly.

Cringey Dialogues: While you mentioned that the dialogues might be cringey, it's essential to balance emotional expression with realistic dialogue. The dialogue can be improved by focusing on natural conversation while maintaining emotional impact.

Dare you ship DB with Bhumi without mentioning that he loved MS earlier

Originally posted by: FlauntPessimism

Dare you ship DB with Bhumi without mentioning that he loved MS earlier

I will DB-SM does not happen in my universe

Should definitely update the second part before i forget