KZK2 Chat Club 7 - Page 96

Originally posted by: Shaon

Mehnat bekaar nehi jati Mishti. Zaroor kam ayega. Hosla rakho, aur khushi manao ki ab tum 12th pe properly focus kar sakti ho.

Yes... Teachers are more devilish 😈 now🤣

Originally posted by: Alexia_Wilson

He sat there on the majestic chair of his study made of the finest ivory and encrusted with most priceless gems. Sipping the rich wine from the goblet made of silver which was finely detailed with rubies he contemplated about the prophecy he heard some hours back by the ladies of fate. Those ladies might be older than time itself but never has their prophecy been false. Never have their spoken words been untrue and even now it wasn’t going to be wrong. But before never had these prophecies bothered him much until now. He was the most formidable creature in the world. The supernatural beings trembled in front of him while the mortals grovelled at his mercy. Seeing those weaklings begging for his mercy pleased him to no extent. But what made him irritated was that these fools instead f begging for their lives would beg for the lives of their loved ones. They would do stupid sacrifices in the name of love and what would be the ultimate end? That lover of theirs would cheat them and go to someone else. Why do so much for someone when its wont profit you? Why spend your whole life for the so-called lover? Why destroy your life for someone else’s happiness? It sounds bizarre that not only the stupid mortals but also the powerful supernatural beings desired this fatal emotion. The way the desperately waited for their mates and beloved ones made him disgusted at their weak nature. The annoyance he felt when powerful creatures like the Alpha werewolves and the Coven Leaders introduced their lovers to him with such lovelorn eyes that they were blessed. They acted as weaklings at that time. He never understood their happiness honestly. Why desire such a disastrous fate? Love was a curse indeed and he didn’t wish to experience it. Sacrificing your life just because your love wasn’t reciprocated? What a foolish thought it was.

Raw form hai so no editing done

I am still feeling its not upto the mark

I think the first two sentences are too descriptive, especially if this is also the opening paragraph of a new chapter. See, when we (and by we I mean me) first read a new chapter, and my concentration level increases with time. So the descriptions will just... I would have to put a lot more effort to read and process those sentences.

I feel like the words stupid and foolish has been repeated too many times. I know you want to hit it home that he considers them to be silly creatures, but maybe you can change the wording or be a bit subtle? Just a suggestion.

These are the two things that leapt up to me. Hopefully this wasn't discouraging, because I really didn't want that. Good luck!

Originally posted by: MishtiNew

Yes... Teachers are more devilish 😈 now🤣

That's one thing all teachers have in common 🤣

Originally posted by: Shaon

That's one thing all teachers have in common 🤣

Yes🤣

now tons of assignments

Originally posted by: Shaon

I think the first two sentences are too descriptive, especially if this is also the opening paragraph of a new chapter. See, when we (and by we I mean me) first read a new chapter, and my concentration level increases with time. So the descriptions will just... I would have to put a lot more effort to read and process those sentences.

I feel like the words stupid and foolish has been repeated too many times. I know you want to hit it home that he considers them to be silly creatures, but maybe you can change the wording or be a bit subtle? Just a suggestion.

These are the two things that leapt up to me. Hopefully this wasn't discouraging, because I really didn't want that. Good luck!

I said na Raw form toh repitive words I will change it with synonym

I am now on a crossroad ab🤔Some told me describe some say keep it subtle {I prefer subtlety only}

Originally posted by: MishtiNew

Yes🤣

now tons of assignments

Tell me about it

Waise, how was your class? Did you understand everything? Cleared all doubts?

Originally posted by: Alexia_Wilson

Yeh baat main waise bhi change karungi

I said na Raw form toh repitive words I will change it with synonym

I am now on a crossroad ab🤔Some told me describe some say keep it subtle {I prefer subtlety only}

I really like subtle hints, but you do you. Ultimately, it is your story, and you should see yourself as the target audience and write it in a way that makes it an enjoyable read for you. You are the reader.

Originally posted by: Shaon

Tell me about it

Waise, how was your class? Did you understand everything? Cleared all doubts?

Class was awesome😎 cleared all doubts...

But I have to make presentation for the whole class someone is helping though🤣

Cleared the doubts...

Originally posted by: Shaon

I really like subtle hints, but you do you. Ultimately, it is your story, and you should see yourself as the target audience and write it in a way that makes it an enjoyable read for you. You are the reader.

Originally posted by: MishtiNew

Class was awesome😎 cleared all doubts...

But I have to make presentation for the whole class someone is helping though🤣

Cleared the doubts...

Good luck for the presentation Mishti 👍🏼 I know you would do great. Pay attention to the details, and don't stress about it.