PreRish Fictions | Pg19 (To Win and To Lose) - Page 2

arrey waah you wrote one for PreRish , loved it specially the characterizations ⭐️

and this deffo needs Part 2 , waiting ...

This is just so beautiful❤️ one awesome OS. You have kept the essence of the character which I loved👏

And don’t enter my room ever again", he told her, as she ticked off the apology in her list and he smiled to her retreating form. ( This is ek dum Bajajishmy favorite line)

We need part two of this please🤗

It is just amazing and unique plt darling. u should write 2/3 part as well as ... pls come up with it's saga

LOOK WHO IS BACK

haiyee Iam all like Deadpool to see you churn out such an awesome OS haiye haiye haiye aur mujhe credit bhi milaaaa

So Mehra had erred and Prerna started with her accusations and Bajaj didnt listen to her and slammed away

Nice very nice that Prerna came to know that she was wrong to jump into conclusions so wrong.

And then what do we get bajju hurt you nicely explained Prerna's feelings and how and why Bajaj didnt want to be taken to the hospital! And how it bolted upon her the tough life he had been living. I liked how Bajaj SAW her leaving in that state. She couldnt take him in pain. Didnt she hate him the most yet she couldnt see him in that state!

And she comes back ofc she has to

She hadn’t been to see him, the very sight of that room and it’s ‘contents' flinched her skin. She felt incapable of witnessing what he possibly was going through

This has to be one of the best lines that explains pain and mental agony that I have read till now

He stirred unconsciously, responding to her sudden arrival. Cautiously, she sat on the edge of the bed, not to disturb him. As she turned back to adjust a pillow, the water jar came crashing down the floor, it’s voice echoing through the empty Bajaj Mansion.

He woke up shaking with sweat and anxiety, a gun pointing towards her vague figure.

Within a moment, he put it down. He winced his eyes in pain and rested backwards, his head felt like stone.

THIS THIS THIS. I COULD SO SEE BAJAJ DOING THIS. best way to describe his insecurities and he then asks about his daughter in that state made me alll ---

“Don‘t compel me to accuse you of sensitivity, Ms. Sharma”, he said. "It's not permissible by the clause".

She could feel him smirking while lying down yet, even with her back towards him.

and he was OK

THIS OS DESERVES A PART 2

YOU HAVE TO GIVE US A PART 2 Thats it

it was definitely worth the wait 😳

Originally posted by: MysticRiver

interesting one-shot..well written...👍🏼

Thank you so much!

Originally posted by: Wistfulness

First and foremost, I love the concept. ⭐️

Prerna stood there, numb. Tears rolled down her eyes. It'd been six months. Six months into this deal and every time she thought she’d begun to understand him, he scurried far away, into some distant senses of the living realm. Unfathomable.

^ Here's my favourite quote.

The effect Prerna's piercing accusation had on him, followed by his madness is really well-expressed in words. Then the guilty woman's deep worry for her wounded man that compelled her to sneak into his room in the dead of the night, only to behold the dark insecurities that loomed over him was a lovely read.

“And don’t enter my room ever again", he told her, as she ticked off the apology in her list and he smiled to her retreating form.

^ Now this is an interesting end. RB being RB even in that state. 😆

Thanks a lot 🤗

I'm glad you found the effect good, I'm terrible with descriptive emotions.😆

Yes Bajaj is Bajaj always 😎

Originally posted by: najma123

This is interesting. I think Bajaj being in danger is the most coveted dream for many here. 😆 I think this is the second or third on that line. However, I really liked it. This was nice. 😳

Hahaha yeah lol.

Thanks Naj🤗

Originally posted by: awesome

Superb

Thank you! :)

Originally posted by: Moushumi

Very interesting way of writing.like the concept.

Happy to hear this!

Thanks!