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After 3 months I am updating my story , I know sorry is a small word and no excuse is enough for you guys. Still Ho sake to please forgive me , and virtual killing is still illegal in world
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Ishwari Niwas

Ishwari were very upset and sad to remembered how Dev is moving close to sonakshi.

Mamiji took the advantage of the situation and came sit next to ishwari.

Mamiji- Jiji. Dekha aapne kaise woh banglan humare Dev ke pass rahi hai.Main bol rahi hoon didi jaldi kuch karo otherwise yeh bangalan humare Dev ko lekar jayegi and then aap direct old age home. Humara kya hai? Hum toh kal bhi road par the kal phir se pooch jayege but didi aap ko toh aab aadat nahi hai. Upar se aap ka eklauta beta.. Haye haye Jiji kuch karo..

Ishwari- kya karo main bhabhi? Aab aap hi bolo kya karo main.. Main toh kuch samajh hi nahi aa raha hai . Mujhe lagata tha Dev mujhse sab se jayada pyaar karta hai but aab woh bhi mujhe doubt hai.

Mamiji- Jiji. Why worry when me is there? Aaj bangalan ko aane do ghar aisa samajhogi ki usko samajh mein aayega main kya cheeze hoon.

Dev's Office
Neha, Riya and Nikki reached Dev office for the very first time in the life.

Neha- Agar Maa ko pata chala then hum sab gaye kaam se. Are u guys getting what I am trying to say.

Nikki- Didi Please.Don't try to scare us. Do you have any better idea to speak with BHai in private ? If No then please Di aab darro maat .

Tia was shocked to see all Dixit sisters in the office- she at once enquired - Hello !! You all are here. Hope everything is fine and not serious.

Neha- No actually we are here to speak to Bhai. Nothing serious.

Tina- WEll yes of course. Sorry to ask you guys this question. Well I was worried so I ask. Hope you guys are fine with it.

Neha- Of course Tina. Not to worry . We all are fine with your question.

Tina quickly informed Dev regarding the arrival of three Dixit sister in the office.

Dev told Tina to send them asap.
Inside Dev's Cabin

Dev- Anything serious? Kya hua hai?

Riya- Bhai Relax.. We are here to talk to you and everything is fine.

Dev- Alright . U want something to eat or drink.

Nikki- Pizzza

Neha- Shut up Nikki. We don't have that much time to eat.

Dev smiled - It's ok I will order a pizza . As such first time my sisters are here in my office. Kuch toh party banati hai na. Nahi?

Neha- No Bhai. WE are in hurry may be next time pls.
There is some awakward moments between Dev and three sisters. Dev has never interacted much with sisters so don't know how to make them comfortable

Dev- So Tell me . ANything important?

Neha- Well first of all we would like to say sorry to you for disturbing you at this time. We know you are busy and we should not have come with our silly requests and ( looking towards Riya and Nikki- This is not right )

Dev- Well calm down Neha. Its alright. You all can come and say whatever you guys want to say. I know we all are not good in interaction. We atleast can try now without being formal.

Riya with hesitation- Actually bhai after 15 days Sonakshi bhabhi ka birthdya aa raha hai so we thought we should ask you as well.

Dev with Smile- Ohh SOnakshi's birthday after 15 days. Wow this is great. Before anything means anything please don't arrange the party at Bose's house. No! they are good infact very good people, but still for the safety sake, we should arrange the party somewhere else. Nahi ??
First time all four started to laugh remembering their party experience at Bose house. Dev narrated his story of how he went to Bose house for the first time and wodden box hit him in the middle of his head.
All of them were talking and laughing, and yes Mad Bose house was the main initiative topic but later we are talking more things in general. Dev ordered the Pizza for everyone and while eating everyone were discussing their routine day work as well. Dev came to know how good Riya is performing at Business school, her dreams , her ambition and how Nikki is still kid and enjoying his college days. Whereas Neha is still matured person yet broken from past childhood life very much like Dev.

Dev while taking pizza - So kya karna hai Sonakshi ke birthday hai ?

Riya- I think we should indirectly ask SOnakshi bhabhi her favourite things before doing or planning anything?

Nikki- Yes we can discuss and plan accordingly.

Neha = Well. But it is not good to come over here everytime. We should find a solution for this problem.

Matured Dev- Why Neha? You all can come over here and I loved it seriously.

Maturity ki height Neha- Nahi Bhai. It's not about that. See firstly we have to come taking a break from school or college. Everytime it is not possible there is reason I was saying No. And secondly we can't talk much in front of Maa .. ( Oppsss) I mean in front of Sonakshi as well.

Dev- Neha.. Maa ko kuch problem nahi hai.

Matured Neha- Hmm..

Nikki - Well I have a plan. Why don't we make a whatsapp group - Devil Dixit and we can talk and discuss things in private as well. No one will come to know about it.

Dev- Am fine with it.

Neha- AM fine

Riya - Am fine too

Nikki- Aree what fine, fine? Let's make the group straightaway.
After more general talking all dixit sisters was about to leave the office, then Dev stopped Neha whereas Riya and Nikki wait for neha outside the cabin.

Dev- Neha.. I know Maa and you are not that much good bonding but I still feel you are too judgemental. TU kabhi Maa ke point of view se bhi dekh.

Neha with tears- Bhai.. Am not against of Maa and you. And By mistake Maa nikal gaya.. Am sorry.

Dev was about to come and put his head over Neha's head but Neha moved towards the door.

Dev and Neha are still standing at the opposite side of the broken bridge.

Hospital

Sonakshi ( Self talk) - Mummy .. Am I in love with Dev Dixit . Na Naa .. Then recalling all their moments- their first kiss, to their touchy touchy scene, lastly Dev talking with kids.

Sonakshi- Ufff It is possible. I am telling you sonakshi, something is seriously need correct with you. You are behaving so odd. Wait a minute. Why am thinking am in love? Infatuation bhi ho sakta hai? You see it quite possible.
Sonaskhi Starts jumping up and down- while stretching her hands - Relax Sonakshi !! Relax Sonakshi.. You are thinking too much.. It is infatuation and it is because you are spending too much time with him. Once you starts spending with anyone, you will not even remember him, so just relax... Think of a plan( Still jumping up and down stretching hands )
Sonakshi first calls Rwithik, after all he was the man she was suppose to marry.

Sonakshi- Hello Rwithik? How are u?

Rwithik- Very Silently.. Heeelllooo. Sonakshi..

Sonakshi- I can't hear you. Don't tell me you are still in silent mood.

Rwithik- Nooo. Actually am speaking in low volume because hheehehehe

Sonakshi- SPEAK LOUDLY...

Rwithik- Actually Natasha says speaking in high volume is sign of middle class family. Then she don't like to stay in middle class environment. Otherwise Natasha is nice. She has changed my house, my clinic, my life.You tell me how's things at your end?

Sonakshi- What ? U and Natasha .. How?

Rwithik - What do meany by how? You know we all get married on the same day.

SOnakshi- Ohh Yeah. Anyway!! I just called you to see how's things at your end? If you are free then we can chat and drink coffee.

Rwithik- Oooaaa I would love to. But you see today I need to take Natasha to dematologist. Her left hand small finger nail is bit thick than rest of her fingers. She is quite stress out for this issue from past one week. As a result, she is not taking her beauty sleep of 8 hours, instead she is sleeping only for 7 hours because of which she got slight dark circles, because of which she is having...

Sonakshi cutting him in the middle- I got Rwithik, Natasha needs you. Am so happy that you are so happy with Natasha. Don't worry we will catch someother day and then you can tell me everything about this incident and of course how you guys decided to go ahead with marriage in detail. Bye bye..( She just hang up , since she can't tolerate "Because of this)

Sonakshi ( Self talk) - Think !! Think !! think Sonakshi ..

Sonakshi dialed Jatin ( her childhood friend ) number
Sonakshi- Hi Jatin..

Jatin- Sona..Ami tomake Bhalobashi.

Sonakshi ( Self talk) - Still the same boring - Stupid Sonakshi don't think like this for him

Sonakshi- Ami tomake thappad maashi..

Jatin- What??? You are murdering Bengali language.

Sonakshi- Thanks and Same to you. Anyway so how's your life ?

Jatin- AM fine and what a pleasant surprise a call from Doctor Bose herself. Anything special ?

Sonakhsi - Well I was free today so I thought let's meet and eat somewhere. Waise bhi bahut time ho gaya hai na..

Jatin happily agreed and both decided to meet their favourite resaturant at 8 pm.

Dixit Manison
All dixit sisters were happy , as whole day Dev was chatting with them for some or other reason. Even Neha was happy after long time, as she don't want anything in her life, other than Dev and Ishwari Maa love. She knows her mother very well, so she don't expect much from her, but somewhere she was longing for Dev's love and support, her only desire was to have a brother hand over her head.Sab ittna sa khawab hai ...
Ishwari noticed this changed environment and behaviour of everyone. Ishwari noticed the happiness of Neha's eyes- from emptiness to hopes. Ishwari always knew that Neha always wants to have a good bond with Dev since ishwari don't want to share Dev with anyone, this emptiness was always there in Neha's eyes. Now Ishwari is scared hell, something is going around and she don't have control over like before. She is scared, angry and hell worried.

Sonakshi entered the house. After chatting with Dixit sisters, Sonakshi went straight to Ishwari, where she informed her that she is going out for dinner with a friend and will back around 11pm. Ishwari happily gave her permission. Sonakshi went to her room to change and get ready to meet Jatin the childhood friend.
Whereas Dev called Ishwari as well informing her that he will be going for the important meeting with one of his clients and will be very late and gave her instruction to send his clothes to the office through driver.

Inside Restaurant
Jatin was wearing formal suits and looking good and was arrived 15 mins before decided time.Because according to Jatin , it is unfair if girl waits for any boy.
Jatin has come with Bouquet of lilies

Sonakshi came and everyone means everyone in the restaurant was looking at her.

Females were jealous to see beauty of sonakshi and males were jealous to see sonakshi was not with them. In short everyone was jealous to see beautiful Sonakshi walking and sitting next to Jatin.

Both Sonakhsi and Jatin talked about their childhood memories, were laughing and eating their favourite food. Still Sonakshi was still missing something,her heart was not fully present with Jatin.

So she excuse herself and went into washroom and started crying loudly.

Inside Washroom
Sonakshi- Ooo
Aunty 1 came into washroom and saw sonakshi crying loudly.
Aunty 1- Beta why are u crying? Did that boy misbehave with you. Did he ditched you ?
Crying Sonakshi- No Aunty. He is prefect, just prefect.
Aunty1 - Then why are u crying beta?
Crying Sonakshi- Because I am still not 100% happy . I am still missing someone. I am waiting for someone else.I still want more,but from someone else.
Aunty1 - Do u love someone else?
Crying Sonakshi- Don't use that word. It might be infatuation,so am trying and using different methods to overcome that infatuation.
Laughing Aunty1- Betaji.. Agar yeh methods and techniques kaam karti na Romeo and Juliet , Salim and Anarkali, Shah Jahan and Mumtaz na use kar lete
Crying Sonakshi- Hein??
Laughing Aunty- Its very simple Betaji.. U can't force yourself to love someone just because he is perfect for you. Love is not in your hands, it is feeling which comes within. It is just automatic process of your heart , which doesn;t have any control. You yourself can't control it and better you should stop trying using all these methods and techniques as well. Just accept this beautiful fact, then you will be at peace. Believe me ..
Crying Sonakshi was in thinking mode and washed her faced, half of her makeup was washed away, but she didn't bother to correct her face. Came outside and banged she saw Mr. Dev Dixit sitting with one of the beautiful foriegner lady.

Dev saw Sonkashi. Dev immediately realised that something was not right with Sonakshi. SO he got up to meet her , but Sonkashi was upset rather too upset, went straight and sit next to Jatin.

Even Jatin was confused to see upset Sonkashi and enquired about it. But sonkashi told him that she is fine and today she wants to try something different and forced him to order Vodka for her.

Over here - Dev and Carmina Catahan ( From London ) were discussing their business plan. Dev was too busy in discussing, but somewhere even he was jealous to see SOnakshi with Jatin, because of which even he was upset(angry) with her.

Both Sonakshi- Jatin finished their dinner first and Sonakshi ignoring Dev completely went outside the resaturant with Jatin. Sonakshi purposely hold Jatin's hand while going out from the resaturant.

Outside the resaturant
Sonakshi was fully talli. Because she drank more without eating much.
Jatin = Sonakshi don't go with your scooter . Today I will drop you.
Talli Sonakshi- What Jatin? Stop acting like a boring person.This is right and this is wrong and Blah blah blah.. Someday you need to lead life without rules and regulations.
Jatin- Sonakshi.. Don't stand like this. You will fall down. And please come with me. If anything happens to you,how will I face uncle and aunty? After all you are my responsibility.Better you come with me.
Talli Sonakshi - Jatin..I am warning you. Leave me alone. Your blah blah blah talks is effecting my braincells. So better you go and if you want , I can give a lift to you too. Aaja Meri Ghaadi mein Beth Jaa!! Aaja Meri Ghaadi Mein Beth Jaa, Sonakshi ignoring the Jatin off she goesss

After sometime Dev-Carmina Catahan also came outside after almost finalising their business deal.Dev was upset that sonakshi didn't even look at him so he don't want to talk to her at all. So he was far more admant now that he will not speak to her no matter what?

Ishwari Niwas
Dev reached the Ishwari Niwas and parked the car in the parking area.
Dev was really angry mood but as usual everyone was sleeping so he went straight to Ishwari's room thinking she might be waiting for him which she was.
Ishwari'r Room
Dev- Maa. Please sleep on time. Its not healthy to stay awake so late
Ishwari- Beta . Aisa kabhi hua hai ki maine tera wait nahi kiya ho..
Dev- Alright..AM back now. You please sleep now peacefully.
Ishwari can sensed that Dev is upset and not in good mood.
Ishwari- Beta. Teri meeting kaise hui? Kuch problem hai kya?
Dev- No! Maa !! Meeting was superb and got the project as well.
Ishwari- They why are u so upset ?
Dev- Actually over thereHe was about to say Sonakshi name but stop himself because he knew somewhere Maa and sonakshi equations is not good.
Ishwari Kya beta ( placing hand over his head)
Dev- Nothing Maa you sleep.
Now Ishwari is upset thinking first time his son is sad and now he is hiding things from her as well. He is hiding his feelings from her. What is more important than her for him ?
Angry Dev reached his room and opened the door and saw talli sonakshi.

Dev's Room.
Talli Sonkashi was dancing without music and signing:
Chaar bottle Vodka
Kaam mera roz ka
Na mujhko koi roke
Na kisi ne roka.. (x2)
Main rahoon saari raat in the bar
Daaru piyun lagaatar
Ek aadhi sab pee lete hain
Main to piyun botal chaar
Chaar bottle Vodka
Kaam mera roz ka
Na mujhko koi roke
Na kisi ne roka..

Her hair was coming over her face, her innocent face was just too resistable for him.
Talli Sonkashi saw Dev the Dixit - Mr. Dev Dixit. WHy you are here? Do you know am using methods and techniques ? Shooo!!! Shoo!!!
Angry Dev( Self talks)- Yeh Lo !! Ek toh pagal upar se talli .. Awesome combination.
Ignoring her completely he came inside and tried to go towards his cubboards to take his night clothes.
But Talli Sonkashi hold his hands - Don't you understand in one sentence.
Angry Dev- Sonakshi .. Leave my hand. I don't want to talk to you.
Talli Sonkashi- Excuse Me!! Don't try to copy my dialogues .. Its my line .. I don;t want to talk to you. I simply don't want to talk to you. ..
Angry Dev- Its good then we are agreeing on something. Now leave my hand now.
Talli Sonkashi- No No we can't agree on anything. Because it creates chemical locha in my mind .. U know..
Angry Dev- Hey BHagwan .. Isss pagal ko attack kaam aate hai normally aab to talli wali pagal hai it means every second aattack aayega..
Talli Sonkashi- Yes I am mad and woh chudail with whom you are thoussing food gappa gapp was smart, intelligent and above all beautiful and most importantly she is not mad like me.. Hein naaa...(in full volume)
Angry Dev- Better not talk about evening please... Because it was you ( in high volume) who ignored me and went straight and sit beside with that aaa looking boy.
Talli Sonkashi ( whispering) - What is aaa ??? I am using methods and technique which are not working properly and I was angry with myself. ( Ooo crying))...
Angry Dev- What methods and technique??? Hey bhagwan ...
Talli SOnkashi- Areee What bhagwan! Bhagwan. Sab bhagwan ki mistake hai.
Angry Dev with a smile- It is confirmed that you are MR. BUJOY BOSE daughter. SAb bhagwan ki galati hai statement se.
Talli SOnakshi- What confirmed? I am Bujoy Bose daughter and never ever take any panga with me.. Got it.
Angry Dev- Yes Sonakshi Bose that is reason you always like to say things in round and round and not straight to the point.( High Volume)
Talli Sonakshi- Kaun sa Point? No point only methods and technique of life.
Angry turned into half mad Dev- Hey bhagwan ... Sonakshi for once means for once in a life can't say things properly without running around the bush.For example- what do you want to do with me now?
Talli Sonkashi turning Raja Harishchandra- Do you really want to know this ?
Inquistive Dev sitting on the bed filling glass of water for himself- Yes SOnkashi.
Talli Sonakshi turning Raja harishchandra- I want to kiss you ..
Inquistive Dev spit the water from his mouth after hearing this- WHAT?
Talli Sonakshi turning Raja harishchandra-Choochi Chooo Baby.. Come to me. I want to give kiss..
No more Inquistive Dev - Kya Bol rahi hoo tum.. Sonakshi. You are drunk and I can;t do this to you in this state.
Talli Sonakshi turning Raja harishchandra- Why? When you can kiss me in the hospital. then why can;t here? Do you kiss a girl only after hearing gay or impotent comments.
Scared Dev moving here and there - Hawww Sonakshi..Leave me Sonakshi..
Talli Sonakshi turning Raja harishchandra = No Hawww .. Only Wow WOW. Come Dev Come .. Yes I want you to touch me and rather sometimes I visualised us to do kissing as well.AAj main visualised nahi karogi actual mein karogi..
Scared Dev running over the bed then running in every corner of the room to save himself from Talli Sonakshi turning Raja harishchandra- Kya bol rahi hoo Sonakshi.. Please mujhe chhod do.. Bhagwan ke liye mujhe jaane dhooo. Main kya and kaise karo yeh sab ??? Mummy...

Talli Sonakshi turning Raja harishchandra started singing again in totally bad voice - Bahon Mein Chale Aao Bahon Mein Chale Aao Ho, Humse Sanam Kya Parda Ho, Humse Sanam Kya Parda Yeh Aaj Ka Nahin Milan Yeh Sang Hain Umar Bhar Ka Sh, Sh, Sh, Sh, Sh, Sh
Over scared Dev opened the back door gate of the room and went straight into garden area.
Garden area
With so much noise, Neha wake up and walking towards the garden area.
Talli Sonakshi turning Raja harishchandra running after over scared Dev: Bahoo mein chale aao Bahoo mein chale Aaao Ho..
Over Scared Dev- Pagal Bewdi chhod de mujhe..
Neha was shocked to see Dev running in garden area, living area & in even in kitchen ..
Neha - Bhai...
Over Scared Dev- Neha!! Bacchoo!! Sonakshi Se mujhe Bacchooo..
Neha stopped talli Sonakshi by holding her hand- SOnakshi Bhabhi .. Kya kar rahi ho ?
Talli Sonakshi turning Raja Harishchandra - I want to kiss Dev Dixit.. Come baby.. Chooo Choo coo..
Neha controlled her laugh and Dev was embrassessed .
Dev- Neha woh she is drank and not in her sense. She is blabbling anything..
Neha- Alright Bhaiya. Pakkado .. We will take care to bathroom and give her shower, may be cold water will help her to come in sense.
Talli SOnakshi- Devooo My Devooo.. Come to me...
Neha put hand over her hand - Don't make so much noise Sonakshi bhabhi otherwise raita phel jayega.
Inside Dev's bathroom
Both Neha and Dev after a lot of struggle put sonakshi under the shower...
Talli SOnakshi- Storm! Storm!! Run ! Run!!..
Over frustrated Dev- Neha! You handled her and change her clothes. I will bring some coffee for everyone.
Neha changed the clothes of very less Talli turning sleepy Sonakshi and out her into the bed.
Dev returned the room with three coffee mug, but saw Sonakshi was already in sleepy mood.
Dev to Neha- Is she fine? Means having shower late in night that too quite cold in weather.
Neha self talk- Bhai!! So much concern for Sonakshi Bhabhi.
Neha- Naa ..and hope she is fine and will sleep peacefully.
Dev offered her coffee mug and both Neha and Dev sit on the corner of the Door which opened towards the garden area.
Both of them were silent for few minutes and then burst into laughter remembering Talli Sonakshi demands of kissing Dev.
This was first time Dev and Neha were sharing something personal , something of their own.
Neha after finishing the coffee - Alright Bhaiya. I am going now. and Trust me I won't share this episode with anyone, not even with Maa.
Dev with confidence- I trust you Neha.
Neha with tears- Thanks..
Off she went to her room.

Dev went and sleep on the her so called destinated position of the bed.
Sleepy Sonakshi blabbling in her sleep - Whole evening I was running away from you .
Dev Pulled her towards him and caress her hair behind earlobes
Sleepy Sonakshi blabbling in her sleep- I was running because of you Dev the Dixit. Because I want you , need you and I love you...
Dev shocked to hear this line from sleepy sonakshi- Was she telling the truth or just blabbling. Is she really love me? Do I love her as well?

Next day..
Dev's Room
Sonakshi was struggling to wake up..
Hangover wali Sonkashi- OOo Maaa. Headache...
Dev Dixit come with tray of Lemon Juice- Sona baby.. Why are you awake? Itni jaldi utth gayi. Come here let me give you kiss...
Hangover wali Sonakshi become conscious with too much closenes of Dev- Dev.. Kya kar rahe ho?
Dev - Kya kar raha hoon? Darling I am fulfilling your demand.. Kiss and mooch.
Hangover wali Sonakshi- HEIN...what nonsense?
Dev narrate her the entire bhaagam Bhaag night story.
Hangover wali Sonakshi too embarrassed- Ouch.. Sorry I was not in my sense.
Dev coming too close to Sonakshi and blocking her way with both hands- Then why did you drink so much last night?
Hangover wali Sonakshi her heart was pacing @1000 km/hour with looking up- By mistake .. I don't drink so much normally but yesterday I was confused and am using my methods and techniques.
Dev still blocking her way- Uff not again... What is that? Look up when I am speaking to you.
Hangover Wali Sonakshi look at his eyes and she was 100% sure that she is in love with Dev Dixit and because of which without any reason tears was there in her eyes and she started crying.
Dev pulling her towards him and hugging her tightly- Sonakshi!! I was not shouting at you. But you can't handle drinks and its good that you were demanding kiss from me. Kahi aur jati and kis aur se demand karti toh.
Hangover wali Sonakshi- No one was capacity to make me this much mad other than you( after saying this she bite her tongue) and pull her away from him.
Naughty Dev almost placing his lips over her . I don't have any issues in kissing you and doing anything with you but she should be in fully awake state. Talli state mein maza nahi aata and with this he wink at her and
went towards dinning area.

Hangover wali Sonakshi- Aab kuch nahi ho sakta Sona. U toh! Now toh !! Totally gone.

Next episode
Sonakshi , Dada and Dev all on Sonakshi's scooty pushing and trying to adjust
Dev- Sonakshi ! You said you will take the short cut.But yeh the maid road hai?
Dada- Dev Babu!! Par chalaye.. Other scooty won't go forward.
Sonakshi- Yes Dev!! Par chalao. See with full race, this scooty is not going forward.
Dev self talk- Bhagwan.. Why mad Bose and me ??
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Edited by mayu1982 - 8 years ago