MehRya FF: Empire Updated Ch4: pg 12

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Ashlesha

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Posted: 9 years ago

#21

Originally posted by: vimikrao
Nice starting..
Let's see how his empire will be ruled by a girl...

How long he will run away from this reality...

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He is not going to take the challenge so well, expect sparks to fly!

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Ashlesha

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Posted: 9 years ago

#22

There are no prologues to destruction.

No warning signs.

No formal invitations.

You just jump head first into it.

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Chapter 1: Stirred, not Shaken

"Bloody press-titutes. They'll do anything for money."

The look on Shaurya Khanna's face made the servant holding the breakfast tray step take a hasty step back, fearing the businessman-chef-volatile person who was his employer.

Shaurya threw down the offending sheaf of sorry excuses that called itself a newspaper and glared at the servant. "Abhi koi TV program nahi chal raha hai. Kya dekh rahe ho? Tray table pe rakho aur nikal jao. Get lost."

The servant flinched slightly at the roar directed at him, but did as told.

Shaurya watched the middle class person retreat and scowled."All of them are bloody alike. Bas drama aur masala chahiye. Aur iske liye kuch bhi karenge."

It was a fact of social hierarchy, the most natural thing in the world, to climb as high as possible. Stretch yourself as much as time, money and resources allow.

What bothered Shaurya Khanna was the fact that this nobody from nowhere dared to use him as a bloody ladder to reach the fame he had worked so hard for.

He took a sip of the coffee and grimaced immediately at the strange taste.

Spoilt milk!

He scoffed. How utterly poetic.

A spoilt mood with some spoilt milk to match it.

He set the cup down and picked up the apple instead.

The red color was fitting as well, for now all Shaurya Khanna wanted, all that would satisfy his hunger was the proverbial blood of his enemy.

Namely the doe eyed pretender, that simple looking viper of a woman.

"Mehek Sharma. Theek Hai. You want to rule the culinary kingdom? Be my guest." He took a small bite of the fruit. "The higher they rise, the harder they fall. And after that exclusive interview with the press, it will only be my duty to push you down."

He turned the apple around and smirked, picturing in his mind the reaction of the woman who had thought she could pull him down by stirring up some controversies with her well played innocence and denial.

"Sympathy votes collect karna agar tumhari speciality hai. That's going to be win-win for me, I can keep adding to the obstacles on your path. The poor little fighter picture will increase my TRPS. Resource management mujhse better karne ka sapna bhi mat dekna, Mehek Sharma."

He threw the apple core into the trash bin and stood up.

There was a challenge to be planned and an imposter to be shown her place.

And he, Shaurya Khanna, was a master at doing both.

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nicky13

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Posted: 9 years ago

#23

Nice update... Akdu Shaurya ...

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crtkelly

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Posted: 9 years ago

#24

Crisp...succint...impactful... I absolutely loved this...and I need more as soon as time allows. Please add me to any PM list you do.

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vimikrao

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Posted: 9 years ago

#25

Akdoo Shaurya why he hates so much middle class people want to know... There should be some reason behind his hatred towards them.. His past..

Nicely written

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Kashish

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Posted: 9 years ago

#26

So I'm here. As they say, it's better to be late than never!

res.

unres.

First of all, can I say how happy I am that my persuasive skills finally worked their magic. I'm super proud of it and shall take all the blame for it very very happily.

Is it weird that the first part made me want to cackle madly? I was just left with such a giddy feeling.

But first things first, you got a cover and it's gorgeous. Set the tone for what to expect. A battle of dominance amidst equals. And then there was the teaser/prologue with that poetic sharp description that's so telling and so you.

Particular highlights for me were "And he has built himself up, with careful hands and cautious feet." and "a woman come from nothing, a girl with muddy feet and dramatic ways and crocodile tears". Such stunning parallels. It all makes me happy.

Now on the to first part, as you know I laughed. But here's the thing I loved, loved, loved all three of those little bytes that you started the chapter with - the poem, the title and the quote. They just went together well and yet stood out in themselves. I don't know how to explain it - it just worked okay?

I now look forward to many many more chapters and each with these little delicious snippets.

Bits that caught my eye in the first part, aside from the overall mood that just spells doom and gloom for Mehek Sharma. I also particularly loved the detail of the spoilt milk, so bloody apt. Poor Shaurya, we all have one of those days mate!

Namely the doe eyed pretender, that simple looking viper of a woman.

Because that's exactly how he sees her and that's just a gorgeous wordplay right there.

There was a challenge to be planned and an imposter to be shown her place.

And he, Shaurya Khanna, was a master at doing both.

And as always the last line that ends it with a bang. Gah! This is the Shaurya Khanna I want to see in action.

Also, I demand longer chapters from you okay? I need more words from you. Stop being a tease and get to work. I'm waiting, restlessly.

Edited by Couch_Potato - 9 years ago