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-harini-

@-harini-

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 10 years ago

#11

Wow! Absolutely loved Pam's role here!! 😊 very well written !! 👏 hope we get to see something like this in the serial too !
Thank you for this amazing piece of work 😃

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ShyNomad

@ShyNomad

Voyager

Posted: 10 years ago

#12

Originally posted by: t-bonegirl

Hi Nidhi! Thank you so much dear! ❤️ I'm so glad you liked it. Will be waiting for your detailed comment. 🤗

Ok well first dear Sanam I don't know why you thought it was silly...if the show does even half of what you've accomplished here we will all be happy and satisfied viewers!

These are some of the many things I loved about this story:

1. Pam trusting Ragini to help Nachiket - it's nice to see that as Ragini trusts Pam with her kids, Pam finally trusts Ragini with her brother...the top three things I want in this show besides N/R getting back together and Ranbir forgiving Ragini is for Pam and Ragini to be BFFs.

2. Pam figuring out (finally!) that Nivi was behind the domestic abuse scandal.

3. Ragini talking some sense into Nachiket - and him listening!

4. Ragini confronting Pam (finally!) about her apparent hatred for her...this was very well done and I appreciated how you brought it back to Pam's regret that she was not there for her Dadaji's final days (which the show conveniently forgot in the flashback).

5. Everyone kicking Nivi out 🥳

6. Pam ripping up the contract - good riddance!

7. Ashaben putting her foot down (finally!)

8. Someone slapping some sense into Aarav (finally!) - and Pam's speech was wonderful

I could go on and on but please know I enjoyed reading this very much, thank you for this! 🤗

I hope you will share more with us on a regular basis ❤️

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sanakinzzz

@sanakinzzz

Beginner

Posted: 10 years ago

#13

WoW! This seemed so real! I can totally imagine it all on tv!!! Great job

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Santosh

@Santosh99

Navigator

Posted: 10 years ago

#14

OMG! Masha'Allah Sanam... ye kya kar diya. Nice and beautifully written 🤗

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neiralove

@neiralove

Voyager

Posted: 10 years ago

#15

SANAM!😃

I'm sorry that I'm late and that I took so long to write this out. I just loved so many parts!

First, Pam and Ragini's emotional conversation was just lovely. I liked how Ragini offered financial support despite what little she has to give. And that Pam understood her when she explained that she wasn't behind the whole media scandal. Their relationship is one that is so under-explored, so I'm glad that you took the initiative to tackle that.

It's okay Ragini. I think is sub ke baad itna tou mein samajh gayi hun tumhe ke I can trust you.

Absolutely! Der aaye durust aaye.😊

I enjoyed that Ragini runs into Nivedita on the stairs and gets a little worried, but Nachiket never even brings Nivedita up once he sees Ragini. All he's concerned about is that she left without telling him with her fractured arm.😳And the way that he drops his anger when she drops the glass--he cares so much for her; the little cutie pie.😳

He turned around and walked to the window.. Ragini saw the defeat in his style.

This was beautiful. Ragini understands him so well and she knows just what to say to make him feel better:

"We're together, sub theek hojayega."

Everything is better with her by his side. Especially now that he has a shoulder to cry on, he can handle any problem.And at the most perfect of times too, she's there to help him get through this crisis.😊

And when Nivedita plays all of her cards to try and separate the beautiful couple, who better to protect them than Pam!😃

Tumhare jaisi ghatiya aurat meine kahiin nai dekhi!! Now get the hell out of here!! Aur dubara mere mere bhai ya meri family ke aas pass bhi dikhi tou tum acche se jaanti ho mein tumhara kya hashar karungi!

FINALLY someone showed this little witch her rightful place! And in the best of ways!👏👏👏

And I loved how you tackled all of the complicated emotions and problems between Nachiket, Ragini, and Pam. Each sentence here flowed so beautifully into the next. I don't know how you came up with the idea for Dadaji being the reason that Pam hates Ragini, but it was spectacular! Everything was so true to their characters; Pam's sensitivity, Ragini following her rules and doing what Dadaji asked her to do, and Nachiket listening to his Dadaji and his wife. You blew me away with this part--it was gorgeous!😳

And Pam tearing up the contract and Ashaben finally putting her foot down!

Hum dono tumse bade hain aur humne decide karliya hai." Pam adds.

Too cute!😳

The ending with Aarav and Ranbir was phenomenal! I've been waiting for someone to give these two a piece of their mind and I'm so happy that you chose Pam to do the honors. She's the one that poisoned Ranbir against Ragini and added fuel to Aarav's hatred, so it's only fitting that she be the one to rectify her mistake. That entire paragraph was marvelous and her lines were perfect!

But my absolute favorite part was the very end!

She breathed a sigh of relief, "Mein coffee bana rahi hoon. Kisi ko peeni hai?"

It's so Pam to just brush off everything that happened and take everyone to something as simple as coffee!😆I could totally imagine Ashwini in this whole story--she would nail it thanks to your amazing lines!

You really outdid yourself with this one, Sanam! Thank you SO SO SO much for writing such an amazing piece!😊This story is like a perfectly wrapped gift--beautiful and exciting all at the same time!

This comment is way too long, but I loved every last bit and I wanted to share that with you. My comment didn't go through the first time (😡) and so it took me a while to write it all out, but it was all worth it! A beautiful story to end a super long and busy day with and a great bedtime tale.

Thanks again love! ❤️

🤗🤗🤗

Edited by neiralove - 10 years ago

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sririt

@sririt

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 10 years ago

#16

I don't have words to explain this. Its awesome

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@metoyou

Sparkler

Posted: 10 years ago

#17

Sanam jaan! 🤗

Yaar, I know you are busy so please don't feel bad about it. If you keep giving is such lovely OSs then you please be inactive for a few days 😆

Okay jokes apart, I really didn't expect this one from you. I mean that in a good way! You really covered all the main things and issues that need to be cleared for NeiRa, so that they can make a fresh start.

I do understand why Pam asked Ragini to tell Nachiket, because yes only she can handle him. His outburst to Pam was too good - I think we haven't seen him THAT angry yet (at least, I haven't).

Thank God, Naagin is out of the picture too and luckily it was Pam who showed her the way to hell. And and and...last but not the least; the kids and Pam. GREAT! Both Ranbir and Aarav needed this reality check and that slap in the face in order to wake up and see what Ragini as a mother has done for especially Aarav.

And then she just walks away by saying she wants a cup of coffee...so much attitude, too good! Well done Pam!

Yaar Sanam, to be honest, Pam was the heroine of your story. You really put her in the limelight and did a great job. If someone can bring this family back together, as in taking the first step, then it is her. Because she plays a major role in this family and can make the kids understand, because she has that power.

Thanks a lot for this OS. Very well written dialogues and good flow of scenes 👍🏼

🤗

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poetic

@poetic

Stunner

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#18

Sanam,

Have to come back to it. I re4ad it. But need to re read it again, to comment 🤗

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Sanam

@t-bonegirl

Voyager

Posted: 10 years ago

#19

Originally posted by: Santosh99
OMG! Masha'Allah Sanam... ye kya kar diya. Nice and beautifully written 🤗

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Thank you so much, Santosh! I'm glad that you liked it! 😃😳

Originally posted by: -harini-
Wow! Absolutely loved Pam's role here!! 😊 very well written !! 👏 hope we get to see something like this in the serial too !
Thank you for this amazing piece of work 😃

Thank you so much Hairii for your beautiful words! 😳😃

Originally posted by: sanakinzzz
WoW! This seemed so real! I can totally imagine it all on tv!!! Great job

Thank you so much! 😊

Originally posted by: sririt
I don't have words to explain this. Its awesome

Thank you so much dear! 😃😳

Originally posted by: unishaz
brilliant.

Thank you so much! 😊 😳

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Sanam

@t-bonegirl

Voyager

Posted: 10 years ago

#20

Originally posted by: hamna19khan
Arey it was great :) I Loved it in fact I think, things should happen this way in the show as well...

Pam standing up for Ragini was the best part, and I think this will happen in the show at some point, because I can see Pam depending on Rags 😊 which is a good sign :)

Aarav really need a tight slap, meri taraf se aik please 😛

Caring Nachiket is the best 😃

I seriously want Nivedita's truth to be revealed, and I liked the way you described it and Pam was the hero of this OS :)

And I wan't Pam's misunderstanding towards Ragini about the whole Dadaji incident to be cleared as well and I liked the story you created it is so real and easy to believe 👏👏

And it is not at all stupid, Its FAB 👍🏼

A BIG huggie 🤗

Hamna, a big Huggie to you too! 🤗

Well, too many confessions in an OS so it could have gone wrong. Isliye I said it could be stupid 😆

Yaar..the show makers don't even remember that Dadaji wala scene. And we have to make up the stories ourselves but they are thousand times better 😆

About Pam and Ragini's relationship..the CH's always ruin it. Remember preleap when Pam opened up to Ragini and shared her insecurites? I was expecting something good after that. And then the Arav walah scene. They always do this 😕 Nevertheless, I love these scenes ❤️

And Thank you so much darling for reading and loving it. ❤️

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