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Posted: 11 years ago
#41
I will be out tonight, when you will update.

I feel like, I will be missing the First Day, First Show of my Fav, while all my friends will watch it together.
😭 Thats exactly how I feel.
Edited by _Mini_ - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#42
Green light...

Update is in the way
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Posted: 11 years ago
#43
Congrats Deepthi. Waiting for the next chapter
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Posted: 11 years ago
#44


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Posted: 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#46
missing u loads...will be back sooon with my comment..:)
Edited by lalarukh - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#47
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What an emotional update akka. In the first part, Arnav's mom instantly recognized her son's attraction to a married woman. She showed her happiness that her son likes a girl and then disappointment that she is a married woman. Arnav's desperation on Khushi's wellbeing is heart warming. Second part was so hard to read. First Arnav and Anjali were hoping to get the heartbeat of the child and then Anjali's anger on the doctor who performed Khushi's baby murder. Then Khushi's paranoia with doctors and anything related to her reproductive system and Arnav's reassurance to trust him in this matter. I liked it how Arnav broke the news of the baby being dead and his reaction when khushi said "They killed her too." and the revelation by Khushi when she told him how that jerk killed her 5 girl babies.

The Last line summed up Arnav's pain very well.

"Because, He was secretly falling apart for the woman with a belly of broken dreams."

Because Khushi's Pain = Arnav's Pain.

Can't wait for the next update and Arnav's plan to put that jerk and Devil doctor in jail.

Regarding the note, I expected Khushi's baby not to survive because the murder was already committed when Khushi went for blood work and when Lavanya asked who takes blood laying on a bed.
Edited by Pinky.Raizada - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#48
This update was very emotional because it is about a mother who was betrayed by the father of the unborn kids , a mother comes to know that all her 5 unborn were murdered it was not gods decision but it was f**king husbands decision to murder her kids.
I really dont know where to start and what to say, you are an amazing writer there is no doubt in that but this update once again proved how well you can handle the emotions. God bless you dear.
Coming to the update there were 2 lines which were the high points for me. The first one is
where Khushi says "She had beautiful bubble toes, perfect round heels", for every parent their daughter are the most beautiful girls in the world and Khushi wanted her baby to be alive so that she can see her .
The second one is where she talks to her self and says that no one told her that she cannot become pregnant with girls . That sentence tells how innocent and hurt Khushi is. And the way she asked Arnav " she lost the baby because she fell on the road" Deepthi at that time I really wanted to hug that innocent mother and wanted to take away all her pain.
Some people might not like that Khushi lost the baby as a mother I too dont want Khushi to loos the kid but I support you because this is what I think If the kid was their then Khushi's Love and attention will be on the kid and she does not need a very emotional support she will need some but without kid she needs a lot of emotional support as the story is about sex between the hearts this is much needed one

I am sorry if I hurt anyone but this is just my POV
Edited by Srilathalolla - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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What should I talk about this chapter Deepu... It brought many emotions out of me. When I started reading this chapter, frankly I forgot about the baby... I forgot about the Karan... I forgot about Dr. Deshmukh. Somehow I started to read with a fresh mind.

When he saw the familiar person getting down the bus, too familiar to ignore... I really felt like they are going to meet for the first time. When she fainted on the road in the rain water all drenched by holding her hand, Arnav called her, Mrs. Mehta.. right then I realized about her stage. .. WHne he came to her with Arjun and helping her to get on to the car... when she uttered.. Ye... Kiic... Really it didn't struck to me.. what she is uttering..

When Arnav trying very hard to keep her conscious, his sense of mind, bringing humor in seriousness when he asked her, "Mrs. Mehta.. how do you say hmmm"... How could you get these ideas... I couldn't stop laughing.. It made me forget about the baby completely...

I continued reading with that smile on my face... while I am sustaining my reading,, Arnav's question kept popping in my brain and my smile was coming back...

Mrs. Mehta can you hear me?... His every question may sound professional.. but there is emotional desperation in it.

These is a virgin desperateness in the way he roved over her body to restore the warmth to prevent the devastating consequences for her and a tiny life within her... That's it .. this sentence brought me to reality... this sentence made me realize what she is going through again.. This sentence made me hope and wish for the safety of the baby. This sentence gave me the hope of some miracle to happen in the form of Dr. R.


The very frist woman to grace his bed and taste the warmth of his duvet...

He brought her home instead of taking her to the hospital... He brought her to his bed instead of taking her to the guest room which was arranged for her.. He wrapped her in his blankets instead of using the fresh ones..

The emotional connection between them is beyond words... He is doing everything.. for her.. with a different emotion which he didn't feel before. I doubt he himself realize that.

But as a mom his mother found the strange behavior of her son. How could any woman accept that her son has feelings for a married woman without knowing the problems she is facing. If any woman hears the horrendous murders happened for her unborn daughters... lest keep the feelings away... any woman will feel angry on the people who did that.. and pity Khushi... But here Khushi doesnot need pity... She needs Love.. which she didn't get from any of them after her marriage. I hope when she is living with Arnav... if it is for short time or long time.. gives hope that there are people who could love woman... there are people who are very different than her in laws... there are people who can care for her.. than her Husband. I hope she didn't lose hope on humanity.

Do you want to share anything?

matter of a fact..A lot.. But this is not the time. You should go home now...

Did Arnav realized anything about his feelings for this stranger... Did he want to share it with his mom and find out that those are not abnormal.

The moment he parted, her inanimate head rolled back giving him the first glimpse of her eternal beauty sprayed with beads of perspiration.

Deepu how well you described the emotional connection between them in every phrase you wrote.. Since the time they met... its their hearts communicating... not the two strangers. And this is the first time he saw her beauty by looking at her face very close.

Thats it... next thing I read brought shivers in my body...

Fear seizing tightly at his heart, his feet fired into a frenzied spirit...

This is what exactly happened to me. This is what exactly happened inside me.. bringing so many suppressed memories out.

I felt scare to read the next part.. I felt scared that I may not stop crying if It is what I am thinking. If it is really what I am hoping to not happen..

I tried very hard to keep calm and I tried very hard to tell my heart that this is just a story at the end... but poor little heart didn't listen.. it says.. when did you feel that this is story... You always feel that Deepu's stories are very close to me... Theya re very close to reality.. How could I now think this is story... Giving up the discussion with my heart.. after realizing the facts it is talking.. I started reading the next part.

Every word I read holding my breath. Every scnene started playing in front of me ... but there is no Khushi there... there is no Dr. R there.. there is no Arjun or Anjali there... I was the one on the bed.. in the pain... My husband is the one next to me... my doctor is the one holding my hand and saying.. everything will be alright... Tears started flowing down my eyes... I didn't realize that I am crying until my hubby said that. He asked me what's wrong.. I just nodded my head.. If I said I am reading about the abortion.. he will just clsoe my laptop.. he never allows me to think about those days. He cannot see me in pain. I just said... I am reading Deepu story. He understood the intensity right away and kept calm by saying.. don't involve too much... and my reply was... it's not that easy.. it's not my fault.. it's Deepu's.. she never let me think it is just story.

That's it .. it's done... The baby is no more... actually it's happened long time back.. but it takes time to come out.. It happened to me... I am sorry Deepu.. I will take some time.. and continue my comment... Actually I will go to sleep and continue my comment tomorrow.. I am so sorry.

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Hey Deepu.. I woke up late.. Ok I am starting my comment again.. sorry for getting emotional yesterday... It became very hard to write with all those memories... Now I am fine.. a fresh day with fresh start. .

I really worried about the reaction of Khushi after knowing they killed this baby too. But she surprised me.. yes you are right Deepu.. I should remember that she is not TVK Khushi.. she is SBH Khushi. But I am really proud of ehr for being so matured and for not breaking apart and pounce on Arnav. Becasue as a mother.. in that vulnerable state any woman will react so violently.. But Khushi for her age... she is super ... But the numebr 5... surprised Arnav too..

How could anyone be that cruel to kill their own vlood that many times. Finally Arnav is lodging the complaint.. Yes they deserve a big punishment.. They all deserve a huge and cruel punishment. I am feeling angry.. frustrated.. on them. I that bas***d Karan come infront of me.. I will definitely kill him with my own hands for doing that.

Life... it is so precious.. How could they not get it.

Because, He was secretly falling apart for the woman with a belly of broken dreams.

How beautifully you said it Deepu... You didn't mention that he is falling for her... you said he is falling apart with her... Wow.. a brilliant way of saying the samething with more emotional way.. to say that their relation is beyon the attraction.. their feelings are beyond the emotions... its between the hearts... not between the two people... its between the emotions not between the bodies. Brilliant Deepu... Now I understood the true meaning of the title.

I am totally speechless with these lines.. How could you get these kind of lines Deepu.. You are truly brilliant. 👏

Deepu thank you so much for being with me last night. It really means a lot to me. Without you I might have break down. Thank you so much Deepu.

This update is really emotional.. what a master pieces you are writing Deepu... You are truly a brilliant writer. I know.. I am stopping praising.. but I kknow you will understand how I am feeling for you. I cannot stop this comment without saying I Love you so much Deepu.. for giving these kind of close to reality stories.. and making us react for the horrible things happening in the society. You are making us awake from the routine lives we are living forgetting the sins happening in the outside world. You are making us think about the change... while we are settled with our own happiness. Yes everything should self analyze that what they are doing to bring that change instead of just talking about the change.

I know I talked so much today... I will stop my fingers typing the letters now... Again thank you so much Deepu and love you.🤗









Edited by lovedrops - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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It is Strange that -

When her own people betrayed her in the worst possible way

It is a stranger who is trying to instill that trust back in her

It is Strange that -

When her own people mercilessly killed her unborn babies

It is a stranger who is trying to find the little heartbeat in her womb desperately

It is Strange that -

When her own people crushed her innocence under their feet mercilessly

It is a stranger who is trying to answer her innocent questions

It is Strange that -

When her own people did not hold her hands to comfort her

It is a stranger who is holding her hand to provide her the much needed assurance

It is Strange that -

When her own people were indifferent to her pain

It is a stranger who is suffering seeing her sufferings

It is Strange that -

When her own people left her in a perfect storm alone

It is a stranger who is bringing her ashore in his boat

Deepthi, this is one of the most emotional updates I have read in your updates and it even beats the TVK updates. Just like I had cursed fate and destiny while reading TVK, today too I am cursing destiny and asking it, why did it not make Deshmukh's true colors come out one day earlier so that this abortion could have been atleast avoided. But alas the baby died!!!

"Arnav, She had an abortion? and that too with retained fetal parts? Who did this lousy job?" Anjali hurried to him in rage.

Deepthi, I did not under the above sentence. Can you please explain a little more what Anjali meant by that? I wanted to google and see it but I am too distressed now to do it.

"She had beautiful bubble toes, perfect round heels", She started to shake in denial, her mind and body struggling to make sense out of an overwhelming reality of her baby's death.

The above statement by Khushi really made my heart cry more for her. Every woman as soon as she finds out that she is pregnant starts weaving dreams around her baby imagining the chubby cheeks, the cute smiles, the love filled cuddles. It was so natural for Khushi to do it and everytime her dreams were shattered by her own husband to whom she gave herself completely both physically and emotionally.

The sense of loss and hopelessness slinked her away into extreme anger and deep abhorrence,

Will Khushi get the courage now to fight and get justice for her dead daughters or is she in for more heartbreak??

As much as I wanted the baby to be alive, Deepthi I am sure you do have a reason why the baby died and trusting you on this I am eagerly looking forward to see how you take the story forward.

Edited by canapoem - 11 years ago

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