#2 Ashlok Dark FF - My Ransacked Heart/UPDATED/ Chapter 24 /(Pg-127) - Page 24

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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: sathuraj

Chapter 11:

Awesome update dear...
Shlok is too rude in handling astha...
he is using his power on astha to get what he wants...
after that horrible handling he got what he wants...
Poor astha has to go thru so much...
Finally Kirlosher got the mail...
Kalindi fainted as soon as she saw the picture...
so how is anjali connected to kirlosher...
I am so curious to know what going to happen next...
Thanks for the superduper update...


Thanks buddy! 😉 And you are of course welcome dear! Always my pleasure! 😉
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: sathuraj

Chapter 12:

super update dear...
Shlok having the worst nightmare of his life...that too astha is the one who bring it back...
does the nightmare relate to anjali and adhvoot...
Why he has to trouble astha for that...
Poor astha...inspite of her worst condition...
she worse abt her parents...
Hope shlok wont trouble her more...
Why and what adhvoot is trying to hide from the police...
Thanks for the wonderful treat ...



Thank you so much sat for your lovely comments! 🤗

Yep the nightmare is related to his past! 😉

And Astha is very spirited dear she'll survive him! 😉
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: Surish

Another deep dark and techy mind controlling. spine tingling bass throbbing teaser!Fantastic!


Thanks dear! 😃
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: sathuraj

Chapter 13:

My god...u r a gifter writer dear...
I hate this shlok ...why he has to torture astha for the mistake her parents did...
inspite of her pleading so badly...still he continue to torture her...
who is this sanjana now...
what is shlok going to gain by doing this to astha...
while he get the happiness what he has lost...by doing this...
wont astha's scream and cry melt his heart...
Poor astha tried her best to defence herself from him...
he is too stronger than her...
why is adhvoot silent still...
why cant he open his mouth...when he know his daughter life is in danger...
thanks for the wonderful treat...


Thanks sat i'm really overwhelmed! 🤗

And why Shlok is doing that he has a very solid reason behind it!

His heart has been turned to stone and he doesn't feel any human emotions now but he'll start feeling them under the influence of Astha! 😉

And Avdhoot is silent because he is guilty conscience!
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: potomac

Oh..So he knows what he did...but doesnt know he is still alive😲...Interesting!!!...Waiting


Thanks dear for sharing your views! 😉 Will update tommorrow! 😉
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: jhumjhum

I'm really sorry Mahi for this late reply just read last 2 part n teaser wow thrilling update dear. Shlok going dark in his revenge mood n Astha somehow understand all her fault. Teaser so Avdhoot get who doing this many more mystery to come out. Congratulation for your new thread n thanks for PM dear waiting for next update.


No worries sweetheart! 😉

And thank you so much dear! 😃 Will update tommorrow! 😉
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: Efinah36

Awesome teaser
Update soon


Thanks dear! 😉 Going to update tommorrow! 😃
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: hp_2006

Mahiii...Take a bow my dear..Hats off to you..Superb writing..👏
Simply out of the world.. ⭐️

Aastha has turned numb towards his torture now..I loved the way you explained her feelings and mixed up memories of the past when she tortured other living beings too..😊

Now Aastha is feeling sympathetic towards her assailant and wants to influence him with her words.Wow I loved the twist honey..This story is getting interesting day by day..👍🏼


Aww thank you so much sweetheart! 🤗

And me too loved writing the twist! 😆 Thanks again Naina! 😉
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: hp_2006

The teaser is intriguing ..Avdhoot remembers him but doesn't know the name..I am more eager to read PART 15 now😊


Going to update tommorrow! 😉
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Posted: 11 years ago
Hi,

Ashlokians 😃

Updated the chapter 15 of Ashlok Dark FF.
Now in the upcoming chapters Avdhoot's character will start to come into the light...

It's been a great experience for me to write for you dearies and now i am enjoying writing 😉 and ofcourse addicting you dearies too! 😈😆

I was thinking about what title to give chapter 15 when that poem came into my mind that i had written a year ago. It's completely my own 😉 and nope it's not a copy paste 😆

It's name is my exiled memories so i posted it too,because i found out to my surprise 😲😆 that it is very apt for Shlok's painful memories...

And so i named the chapter exiled memories too...

Here it is the poem abot painful memories that you have erased from your mind in order to live without pain, a punishment for your mind for thinking about them...

Hope you'll like it too! 😉

I dedicate it to the gal who is very close to my heart, if she reads it then she'll know...😉

The pain owns my body

Making everything bloody

It twists daggers inside me

Shredding all the organs inside me

They screamed to have mercy from pain

But there pleading had gone in vain

The heart weeps bloody tears

It's blood mingling with the organ's tears

My memories got exiled from my mind

As the grey matter erodes away with time

The soul had already blown away

With it the innocence had too flown away

Death's monster doesn't want me now

Because it had no soul to take now

The empty shell is now filled with concrete

The blood in the veins had too congealed

The heart screamed it's last as it turned to stone

Now I've completely turned into a gargoyle of stone



Edited by mahirmukhtar - 11 years ago

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