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awesome ending

Glad you let the author in you decide on the ending - there is million of possibilities with this ending. I was wondering if he was going to get his payment. Very clever of her to tease him like this. Maybe he will get tired of turning her down constantly. The evil that she is will make sure he knows what he is missing out on.

Amazing story!!! Thanks for writing it so well!

A huge round of applause to u for sticking to ur heart n keeping it real... The glaring difference between their social status DUE to their professions is too hard to ignore - a thief n a rich business woman can meet up for secret rendezvous once a month but not a happily ever after in a warm bungalow with white picket fence around the front yard... Am known for my pessimism... Can u tell ;)... Well, good luck with all your future endeavors n see ya around chica... Pat ur self on the back for a job well done :-)

Absolutely loved it!!
I don't like sad endings and I'm actually not even a very huge fan of open endings (they are more like something is better than nothing). I always want a story to end in a concrete manner i.e with a happy ending. But here for a change I liked the open ending for three reasons -
a) Because the open ending was light and so positive. That smiling Khushi has left me smiling.
b) Here a happy ending couldn't be done so fast. With their different worlds they need time to overcome and plan & decide a future together.
c) I am somehow wishing that one day you will get time and we may get season2 of this tale (Yeah I'm that optimistic😆)

So no there can be not doubt that I'm on Khushi's side and guessing that one day they'll meet again and at that time he won't be on the wrong side of the law.
Khushi had her wicked way with Arnav for some moments at least. 😳 Few good memories to bear separation are necessary 😉

Res

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I am so proud of myself 😃. Do you know when I had guessed it is Anjali who is after Khushi? When Jiman got Arnav's address to meet Khushi and Anjali didnt follow him immediately into the house. After that I could clearly read every hint that you had dropped. Before that I was thinking it is Shyam. But I enjoyed this story in spite of my early guesswork because it is brilliantly penned. You have written it well. The plot is engaging. The psychological messed-up-ness of Anjali is bang on. The sub-plots are dark enough. The state of affairs in which Arnav Khushi find themselves in are strange to the t. Their disparate ways of living. Their quick, snapping dialogues, especially Arnav's. And their sexual tension. Of course Disillusioned was a great read!

I know of Jeevan, Jumanji, even Jeejaji. But what kind of a name is Jiman??

Now to the ending and our scrap exchange. I didnt feel the ending was open or if I were to stretch it, it was near close enough. See, Arnav is too noble a criminal to stay one when faced with the 'indomitable power of love' combined with Khushi's 'never-ending love and determination to have him' 😛 And come on, they want the sex too. Ek ad kisses idhar udhar arent sufficient! 😉 Enough of the cheeky me.

For her love of Arnav, you have made Khushi swear on her place of worship... her work, for which she even accepted damaged relationship with her father. Now that calls for something. Upon that you have also shown that Khushi plans to pursue Arnav till he submits. Plus, you made Arnav swear on his profession which he has once already, though temporarily, given up for Khushi and this I am talking of after Khushi 'fired' him. What he can do once for her, he can do again and this time permanently. This was the practical me.

Now the romantic me. Strictly my views: Traditionally, men are the protectors and the providers. They are expected to go out there and conquer the world. Traditionally, these same men are expected to go down on their knees to propose love to the women they have fallen for. Arnav might want to go out there and nick every valuable possible. But love will bring him to his knees, to Khushi. Bas!

Now the idealist me. I am really not fond of criminals, even the white-collared ones. And between Arnav and Khushi, Arnav needs to change his profession pronto. I cant expect him to change overnight but I want him to change for the better and use his brains in conscientious and hard-working ways. Double bas!

God! You made me talk more of the ending than the story itself!

PS: The only thing that I was left wanting was to see Khushi falling in love. I could see Arnav steadily falling in love clearly; cant say the same for Khushi. Her thoughts and feelings were not fully explored. Sorry 😔

I had expected Arnav to be a undercover cop or something like that because as you say the disparity in the two worlds Arnav and khushi belong is two stark to ignore in real,world. Last update i knew that my speculation about arnav's profession would remain just that -a speculation. After the concluding chapter, i had fully expected Arnav to have reformed for khushi's sake, but that didn't happen either. Had that happened, I would not have liked it at all. This was how iy should have ended and i am glad that your readers are mature enough to handle this ending. Overall, i loved disillusioned. After all, a little of bit of clichs is alright but stories, look convincing if written based on reality.

Happy diwali ...

omg! you're just brilliant...
I've read it one go and kept reading it till I finish
it was a wonderful ride

great ending... very practical.. though I would have loved to see them together 😊