#5 - AsYa/KaBhi FF : My Mental Love ! PART 20 - PART 23 ! Go #6 !

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Niyati Tiwari

@Niyati_T

Stunner

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Posted: 11 years ago

#571

First of all thank you for dedicating this to us🤗

Awww itna akward ness

Mujhe nahi pasand yeh

Zoya is so depressed 😭

Even Asad is depressed😭

Zoya aisi achi nahi lagti 😭

Dilshaad is a very good mother😊

Zoya needed a mother at this moment😊

Asad ko laga vo Najma hai and he did BHHOOO 🤣

Bt vo Zoya thi 😆

Aww she got scared

All coz of Bhaiseena 😡

Late night ice-cream 😛

Zoya is again scared to see ppl

Kya idea diya Asad ne keep staring at him

*Hayee* mujhe bhi koi aisa bolo

Zoya kept staring Asad

Chocolate ice-cream😳

Asad ko chocolate nahi pasand ??😲

Strawberry Ice-cream it tastes like Medicine 🤢

Typical Asad🤢

He cares so much for her😳

Zoya ne Asad ka ice-cream gira diya 🤣

Becahre Asad ka shoe Tsk tsk tsk... 😆😆

Awww chooo sweet of Zoya ussne apni ice-cream share ki Asad ke saath😳

I love sitting on the bonnet of Cars 😆

Finally thy came out of tht Akward zone 😆

Once again thank you for dedicating it to us 🤗

P.s : You going to make us cry more 😭

Edited by Niya_789 - 11 years ago

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aYASHIKA

@aYASHIKA

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Posted: 11 years ago

#572

I just woke up and thought of checking...perfect timing *patting my back* :p

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Waqt Zaya

@WaqtZaya

Elite

+ 7

Posted: 11 years ago

#573

i want the page 1

oh my god oh my god oh my god u updated oh my god

upar se credits mein mer naam

I understand the reason behind such a painful silence and awkwardness between the two.. unfortunately kisi ko bhi pasand nahi hoga.. but this was bound to happen..

Everyone is so badly depressed 😭 in logo ka dard dekha nahi jata.. 😭
Zoya n Dilu scene.. perfectiya 👍🏼

Glad to see Asad n Najma's bond soo cute ❤️

Awh Asad took her for icecream.. 😛

but the make up scene was very nicely written Proud of u!!

Awaiting for the next chapter

< U

< Me

jaldi update

Edited by MisHumptyDumpty - 11 years ago

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Waqt Zaya

@WaqtZaya

Elite

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Posted: 11 years ago

#574

yyayaya 77 mil gaya 🤣

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Prashni Singh

@-SilverSparkle-

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#575

Reserved!

~~~

Unreserved!

Liked the pace at which you had Zoe's trauma dealt with. She has an amazing support system.

I loved that ice-cream concept [you really introduce lovely ideas to the narrative]. The awkwardness and intricate emotions were endearing.

"Since her hands were with the ice-creams, he opened the shawl himself and wrapped it around her shoulders, Zoya felt touched by his care, she had forgotten about his protectiveness."

"...he hesitantly went towards Zoya and placed his hands on her hips, she was startled by his touch, but even more when he lifted her up and made her sit on the bonnet of the SUV."

"...so she just pushed the cone in his mouth, smudging some all around his mouth."

This was really very beautiful, these little skillfully added moments contribute to the beauty of the chapter.

"Delicious chocolate ice-cream..." 😛

Take Care and All the Best for the new semester. ❤️

Edited by p_s05 - 11 years ago

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Asif

@asifiqbalsh

Rocker

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Posted: 11 years ago

#576

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Unres

Awesome update.
Dilshad decided to talk to zoya before she gone into depression. She needs mother & dilshad played her role. She understood & tried to do what dilshad said. Asad was happy to see zoya outside her room but there was an awkwardness between them which were noticed by dilshad, najma & Daniel. Asad saw someone in kitchen & thought it was najma & he boomed. She was zoya & she was scared. Asad hold her & told her it was him & she hugged him. Ice cream parlour scene was good. Sharing ice cream, sitting on bonnut was wonderful. Both said good night to each other. Hope zoya will come out her grieve soon. So one more twist at the end, waiting for that.
Continue when u will free as u will be busy in studies. Thanks for pm

Edited by asifiqbalsh - 11 years ago

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Abi

@-ABI-

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#577

unress

well Its simply a Awsome Update
Zoya comming out of her Shell
Icecream&Bhooo scene r cute
AsYa comming closer
JUST WOU

by-the-way,dear litl sisy have I told u how amazing writter u r?
I am proud to be ur brother

Edited by -ABI- - 11 years ago