Created

Last reply

Replies

215

Views

17.4k

Users

32

Likes

305

Frequent Posters

panchaali thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Sparkler Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 11 years ago
#51

Originally posted by: Brahmaputra

Yep. I can be very complicated.. I've wrote that in voting thread I loved to vote myself as the most complicated one.

Oh yaap I saw, but forgot it😛 but now I won't as I have realized now how complicated you are..👍🏼 I've unreserved my comment. I've read your comment.

seen and replied 😃

I'll be going offline now.

bye 😊

Reply you later there.😃

And pardon my disobedient like button.


That's okay...😊

like button disturbs sometimes it happens with me too..
Edited by panchaali - 11 years ago
riti4u thumbnail
15th Anniversary Thumbnail Stunner Thumbnail + 7
Posted: 11 years ago
#52
Unreserved
--
First of All I am sorry that I came late to read this beautiful story my dear.. When i started with first chapter... i never thought i would complete all 3 in one go...but that was power in your writing..that I just wanted to read more and more... In short words.. I would say your story is great mixture of age old traditions and their fallacies..downfalls... and in midst of that there is fresh new breeze.. a breeze of humanity that somewhere keeping actual essence of faith alive... love is such pure form of devotion.. and how you captured this through story of Devpriya and Devpratim.. I just loved name you chose for two protagonists in your story.. girl in your story is gutsy .. though she accepts her fate written .. but she dares to speak her mind.. she dares to gain prohibited knowledge ..She has a glimpse of arrogance thats what she showcases through her dance... and then this young priest enters in her life... try to make her dance to his tune.. This Young man on other hand is kind hearted soul who believes in humanity .. but is bounded by rigid society rules... He wants to save her.. but can he.. and How can he save him and her both from bond they have slowly formed in ..and that too in temple of love... in front of lord of love himself..
Thank you for introducing me to their world...Would love to explore this more and more in your magical words..
Loved poems you used in last update.. it described beautifully the feelings of a heart in love..<3
Edited by riti4u - 11 years ago
CaptainSpark thumbnail
12th Anniversary Thumbnail Sparkler Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 11 years ago
#53
This is so extraordinary... finally i read the first two parts yet to read the third part..thanks for the PM Panchaali di...
Its wonderful.. your concept itself is soo unique and ur writing style is perfect and apt for the topic..I just so so love this OS..proved u are actually a good writer..oops sorry very good!
third part ta pore comment korbo khub taratari..opekha korte parchi na.. kintu mobile theke porte ektu probem hoy..btw siggies gulo khub bhalo hoyche... tomar storyr sathe ekdom mile jay...
and casting
Tumi pls aro OS likho.. ami porte chai.. and pujo aschhe.. tumi shei background eo kichu likhte paro
Ar tomar ei devdasi os tao osadharon hochhe trust me... its just wonderful..beyond words to praise this masterpiece! WIll comment on ur third part too..
I really like the priest...and also Devpriya's thinking.. its so unique.
And another thing is the selection of your names of characters.. in the previous OS also... "Krishnapriya" and so indeed was proved. and in this one the names are v significant also! 😊
Raghuji thumbnail
12th Anniversary Thumbnail Explorer Thumbnail
Posted: 11 years ago
#54
Panchaali,
Amazing... Like the way you have narrated the story. I am sure there are more twists in the story 😊.

Generally I don't read these kind of stories you made me go through all in one shot

The poetry part was pretty good, Might be just me, poetry in native language am sure would have been even more moving our hearts. Even though I might not understand, it would have sound great with music

Eagerly looking forward to the next part 😊

I am in a hurry now, will write detailed review later thank you


Edited by Raghuji - 11 years ago
viji2111 thumbnail
Visit Streak 500 Thumbnail 12th Anniversary Thumbnail + 7
Posted: 11 years ago
#55
I loved this part.
Dev and his priya love each other but cant express their feelings.
Panchaali you have chosen best names for them -Devpratim and Devpriya.
Dev is concerened about her future and she has accepted whatever is going to happen to her.
This is awesome.
I am waiting for the day she will be crowned as pradhaan devdaasi.
I wish Dev saves her from the evil society and maintains the purity of the tradition.
but what will happen to their love life?
I am waiting for the next update.
ElMystique thumbnail
12th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 11 years ago
#56
This was a majestically blissful update...
Your words describe the immense passion they two had for each other ...The poetry was soulful for me all your poems are quite lyrical and have musical notes in them...
I am so getting addicted to your writing...Please update soon😊😊

Edited by frappie - 11 years ago
582445 thumbnail
Posted: 11 years ago
#57
This was the Best part till now

I loooved it ..

The dance scene was just OMG .. it was wonderful

Now I am shipping Dev n Priya [you know who is coming in my imagination .. now I really really want to see Aham n Puja Bose come in a show together] .. aww they look so perfect in your banner pic n in my imagination

I love their dance, the silent moment after the dance, n was going crazy when Devapratim's agony come in front of readers for the 1st time .. I was literally drooling

Anyway on a serious note, I loved that part post .. u wrote His inner dilemma n feelings so beautifully .. I am already in love with Devapratim

n the ending .. the passionate attraction n refusal of attraction among two great minds .. I can't wait for more .. post the next part SOON
impoojaverma thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail Networker 2 Thumbnail
Posted: 11 years ago
#58
all the three part were fab! Devpriya was a fierce women who accept her fate daringly but destiny plan something else for her. Devpratim wants to save all the devdaasi from the cruelty of the society but in turn fell in love with Devpriya.
r u going to give next part?
FeistyQueen thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Sparkler Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 11 years ago
#59
edited my comment! 😃
FeistyQueen thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Sparkler Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 11 years ago
#60
Part 3 i read but will comment later!!!
am in short of words ryt now!!!
Breathless!!! ❤️

Related Topics

Writers Corner: Books, Stories & Poems thumbnail

Posted by: Viswasruti ¡ 2 months ago

She turned to leave, yet looked back one last time with longing. Spring was unchanged..... smiling enchantingly at the world! While nature,...

Expand ▼
Top

Stay Connected with IndiaForums!

Be the first to know about the latest news, updates, and exclusive content.

Add to Home Screen!

Install this web app on your iPhone for the best experience. It's easy, just tap and then "Add to Home Screen".