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Posted: 18 years ago

#461

Sheena, both the parts were superb. You handled the intense scenes between both the couples really well. More than Jai and Bani's milan, I loved how you portrayed, Ranveer and Rano's maturity and the way they dealt with their situation. Especially when Ranveer came to the realization that he had fallen in love with Rano. Am glad that he did not shy away and say sorry about the whole affairs. I truely hope, Rano also realizes her love for him in the upcoming parts.

Also, the note towards the end of the last portion was written well, about the pre-marital s*x and all.

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Sujata

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Posted: 18 years ago

#462

Hey Sheena,

I have not had access to the system. Finally I got to read all the chapters that I had missed earlier and they are all absolutely amazing...the best part I love about your fanfics are the factual descriptions that you give which always lend a sense of purpose to the whole story while even giving us an insight into amazing amount of information...Really love that aspect...it just makes the whole story more real...J&B will always remain a favorite, however what I like more is the part you have covered about Ranveer and Rano...that's definitely a surprise and love reading it always...Seriously you are one talented writer and you write in such a way, which gives even us food for thought... 👏 please write the next chapter soon...

Garf

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Sheena

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Posted: 18 years ago

#463

Originally posted by: kripa0521
great part very sensitevely written, you've done a beautiful job with this one. Please continue soon.
Kripa.

Thanks Kripa, appreciate your comments...

Originally posted by: ffern1012
Wow that was hot, I'm seriously blushing dear. But what you said is true and this is your ff you have every right to put in there what ever you want. I won't condemn nor agree with what Bani/Jai and Rano/Ranveer did because to each his own, I just hope they do what is rightin the end.

LOL, so was I when I was writing it..thank you for not being judgmental, everything will work out in the end, but definition of end is different for everyone!

Originally posted by: abhita
Hi Sheena...
I loved it loved it and loved it some more...

Dear Abhita, thank you!!

Loved the way that Ranveer took up responsibility for his actions... but then again, he was always a mature individual wasn't he... I wonder what's stopping Rano and him from confessing that they love each other when it is plainly obvious that they are indeed very much in love...

Yes, he is a mature individual and I think what stops them from the declaration is that saying it will mean much more especially when they are embarking on careers and trying to achieve success academically as well as professionally - so they don't know where their 'love' is going to take them.

*sigh* Jai and Bani... awesome awesome awesome!

Thanks dear!

Words fail me...

and btw any recommendations for Greek Mythology???
I am very very interested... I know only the very very famous ones(gods and godesses I mean)... but I hadn't known about the River God and Artemis (I hope I have spelled it right)...

About Greek Mythology, most of the stuff comes from either Odyssey or Illiad - You spelled Artemis right...Artemis was the virgin goddess, and the river god wanted to break her vow, so she makes all the maidens smear their faces with mud, including herself, to foil his attempts! He doesn't know who Artemis is amongst all the maidens....

On the whole a Lovely part...

Waiting for the next one now...

Thanks hon...

Thanks Abhita, seriously - love your comments...

tc,
Abhita

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Sheena

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Posted: 18 years ago

#464

Originally posted by: smitra110
Both the lovemaking scenes were very well written. I prefer to call it making love rather than just sex, coz that makes it seem like a biological, mechanical activity. The depth of emotional involvement is not evident then.Well done Sheena.
Somali

Hi Somali,

Agree with you there, I would term it as 'LOVE Making' as well..S*x sounds so cold and uninvolved. There is a lot of emotions involved between J&B and R&R for it to be anything else! Thanks for the comments...

Originally posted by: rooj-i
Sheena!
great part!!!
i love it!!!
my billi i agree with your disclaimer 100%
if the party involved are mature enough then it should def. happen
anyways back to the part: HOT!!!
everything resembling it was perfect!!!
now i can't wait for the marriage and the hot suhaag raat at both parts!!!
rooj

PS: please send me the unedited version...you owe me this much😆Please please please!!!!

Hey Rooj, Howdy?
Thanks for liking the heat and the spice! I was scared of writing this, especially when I read yours, wasn't sure how I could be on the same par..😳😳😳
About the unedited version, I am still ambivalent about it, got to get over my previous blushing...

Originally posted by: jigna_07
sheena maar dala!
thats all i can say
ok me getting back to study math..yuck
but this deffinetly woke up
continue soon 😃

and yup i remember hyderabad because i grew up there for eight years 😃

Sorry Jigs, for making you run away to Math homework!! 😆 LOL, you are so funny....A fellow hyderabadi...almost!! Cool!

Originally posted by: coolgurl_2005
Hey Sheena--how is it going? 😊

that was just fabalous,you have written this part was beautifully.the emotions and feelings were protrayed so well.just too good,simply superb.loved the poem and im running out words to describe it.just wonderful,looking forward to the next part. 😊

PS:Please do send my a version as well.thanx so much. 😃

preet 😛

Hi Preet, thanks yaar....for liking the chapter, the story, the characters and the selection of the poem...

About the unedited version, I am still ambivalent about it, got to get over my previous blushing...

Originally posted by: Hkaurk22
Fabulously written FF! I read all parts collectively and I must commend you on your work!

Keep up the awesome work! Ive loved every bit- whether it was happy or sad.. doesnt matter!

Look forward to your next parts!

-Harvs

(do send the unedited if u do it! 😉 )

Harv,

Thanks for the comments and reading it all in one go! Glad you liked the story line....

About the unedited version, I am still ambivalent about it, got to get over my previous blushing...

Originally posted by: swatinarang
sheena dear thanx for update and i must say u rocked dear, great part and u have writtent it very bfly and throughout it made me 😳 .
just loved ranveer's maturity that how he handled the issue and at last JB did that chalo they will be getting married in morning that will be really great, but i must tell u ur Jw has fallen in love with bani and now its high time he accepts his love for her in open and i just loved the fact that he wanted to be in control but could not see bani's pain. (if u write any unedited version do PM me otherwise u know well.

please continue soon

swati

Hi meri bhooki Sherni, Kaise ho? Thanks for the comments, I was seriously blushing too when I wrote it! Thanks for liking Ranveer's maturity and you are right, he should accept the love Jai feels for Bani, about the unedited version, I am still ambivalent about it, got to get over my previous blushing...

Originally posted by: sangitadas
Great part Sheena

The three parts have been interwoven beautifully.

Please update soon.

Cheers

Sangita

Dear Sangita,

Thanks for your comments, appreciate them very much!

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huma

@HumaG

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Posted: 18 years ago

#465

that was a fantbulous part!i loved the poem 👏 👏 👏 i loved the way ranveer and rano handled their situation it was so mature for their gae..and i hope whtaver ahppens to them in the future happens for the best!as for pia poor girl her dreams will never cum true! as for JB haila!!!!they are getitng married the next day and jai is so sweet he handled the situation really well he has fallen in love with bani plz dnt tell me he will only relaise that wen he puts bani and himself thru hell! cant wait for the next part pls cont soon!

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nikita28

@nikita28

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Posted: 18 years ago

#466

Hi Sheena,

That was amazing.......Jai and Bani have finally given into each other....and there gettin married tomorrow.

Loved the way that you handled Ranveer and Rano......so cute!!!

Can't wait for the next part.

Nikita

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-Srishty-

@-Srishty-

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Posted: 18 years ago

#467

Haaaaaiiiii mein toh margaiyeeeee ☺️
Last two parts have made me speechless 😳 That was so, so, so, hot and I look a tamatar after reading this.☺️
Sheena di mujhe lecture deti ho aur baad mein yeh sab hojata hai ff, I'm confused now 😛 na just kidding real life is different, right? 😉
Ranveer is very mature for his age, he made a wise decision.

Last parts were fabulous you are doing a brilliant job 👏 👏 👏

Now how am I suppose to concentrate on my hw after reading this? 😕

P.s- Oh and I want unedited version too 😳 😳 😳 what?! I'm already 18 😳 😛

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armana

@armana

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Posted: 18 years ago

#468

Dear Sheena,
just finished catching up on the last two parts.
First: Wowee! you write 'steamy' so well! and what a cliff hanger the last part was......will J and B or will they not....

To be honest, i love the way you have taken the story forward for all three sisters.

pia: kinda feel bad for her....even if in a sense she deserves it.....a harsh lesson but it may just be the making of pia as a person.

Rano: loved her coming together with Ranveer. Loved their morning after even more....very sensitively and convincingly portrayed.....especailly the part about the 'what if's,' if she is preggers or if she is not....
👏 👏 👏

Bani: very, very steamy! whew! Loved Jai's impatience and his attempt to do the honourable thing where bani is concerned. I loved the whole 'marriage in the morning' deal. Somehow it just fits perfectly with the character of JW.
As for pre-marital intimacy and the moral police:
well, i for one am totally for pre-marital intimacy as long as it is safe and what both the parties involved wantit. As for the moral police- self appointed meddlers, who gave them the right to judge anybody else and who gave them the authority to make other people's decision's for them?
I hope you don't get any flak for these two parts, but if you do, count on my support.

It's kind of very poetic, that all three sisters face the most momentous moments of their life on the same night. I really liked that.
Thanks for writing one awesome ff!
regards,
Armana