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Posted: 6 years ago
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Originally posted by: Fatima_Q

Urgh!! The anguish!!

Poor Heer!! 😭

You made me relive that terrible moment in the show...I don't know who I hated more Gaytri Version 2 or Prem for crumbling before his mother like a house of cards. 😑

This was well written...so good job for that...πŸ‘πŸΌ

However...the only person I could feel sorry for was Heer. She was in no way at fault yet she bore the brunt of the blame... πŸ€” Her feelings of being stunned and devastated were so well portrayed by you. πŸ‘

As for Prem...he made his bed...and now he has to sleep in it...alone. 😑



Thank you so much fatima for commenting...i am glad that you liked it. I just tried to show what i felt. And yes you said it right...i also don't know whom i hated the most...the Evil gayatri or weak Prem.
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Posted: 6 years ago
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You are The Only One

(A Sequel to My Fault)


A Premeer OS


1 year had passed since she left the house...she left him. Whom was he kidding?? She didn't leave him; he made her leave him only to prove his mother that he was her son...not what other people said...a step son; only to make his mother happy. But was he happy himself??


For the past 1 year his mother had been reminding him, almost every day, that he needed to prove himself as her son. He even removed all of her stuff from their room to the store room as instructed by his mother. Only a tiny photograph of his wife was there inside his wallet at which he looked everyday only to be drowned more in guilt. Off course his mother didn't know that.


His chain of thoughts was broken by his mother. "Prem you aren't ready yet...won't you come? she asked not really interested.


"No ma I have some office work you carry on", Prem replied back.


"Ok as you wish but beta we would be really happy if you could come", Gayatri voiced her wish and left his room.


Well today there was a party...party for Preet and Harman. Preet's success as he cracked a very important deal and Harman's success as a successful lawyer, lead Gayatri to throw this lavish party for her two sons. Though he wished he could go there but he knew his so called mother really didn't want him to come there. Besides there were people who would ask questions regarding Heer and his mother would tell them how proud she was on her eldest son who, in spite of not being her own son, left his wife to fulfill his mother's wish. And it did bother him too much. He knew Heer was not at fault so how could he listen to so many allegations which the people put on his Heer. So he stopped attending such parties or any kind of social gatherings.


Actually he kind of distanced himself from the world. He spent most of his time in the office and came home late at night fully aware that no one would wait for him. Yes no one...not even Kulraj because she no longer lived here.


Kulraj left the house with Kiran and her three children 1 week after Heer's departure. She and Gayatri had a heated argument when she confronted Gayatri about her behavior towards Heer and Gayatri said the same words that she told Heer, i.e., to leave the house. Lalit tried to stop them but the effort went in vain. They lived in the town in a small house which was sufficient enough for them...Kiran tried to leave Juneja Hotels but couldn't refuse Lalit's request.


He came out of his thinking process by the ringing of his phone. He picked up and was greeted with a cheerful Kulraj.


Prem : What happened Kul di..you are sounding really happy.


Kulraj : Yes Prem...do you remember the dance competition in which Tanu participated last month?


Prem : Yes.


"Guess what...she has been selected for the final round and for that she is going to Delhi", Kulraj informed cheerfully.


"Wow that's great", Prem replied really happy for his niece.


"I know that's great...but that's not the only reason I am calling you", Kulraj said.

"Then for what?" Prem asked curiously.


"Well Vikash and Ketan's exams are there so I can't go with her and neither can Kiran as he is, at present, working on an important project. That's why you have to accompany her", Kulraj gave her reason.


"Off course di..ye bhi koi kehne ki baat hai. I will accompany her to Delhi. Waise kab jaana hai?" Prem enquired.


Kulraj : Tomorrow morning sharp at 8. Final is after 1 week but in this one week they will give the contestant new choreographers and costumes according to their acts. So they would need the contestant's measurements.


"Ok di..no problem I will be there on time", Prem assured her and hung up the phone. Finally 1 week he could really live.

Next day Prem and Tanu boarded the flight at 9 O'clock and reached Delhi at 11. The contestants had to live in the academy where they would stay and have their daily practice. So Prem dropped Tanu in the academy where the other children were and headed to the hotel provided for the guardians to take some rest.


After the lunch Prem decided to check on Tanu once. So he went to the academy with other guardians. As soon as he reached there the choreographers informed them that the next day they will be going to the designer's office for the costumes so everybody should be on time.


Next day all the guardians and contestants along with their choreographers went to the designer for the trial of their costumes and were greeted by a young enthusiastic friendly woman of 24-25 years...Soni Malhotra. She talked with the choreographers about their acts and then divided the contestants into 6 groups having 2 children who would be allotted one specific designer.


"So Tanu and Sangeeta , I will give my best designer to you...Ok??" she said cheerfully and dialed a number.


"Plzz come to my cabin", she instructed the person.


All the while Prem was just scrutinizing the room when suddenly the wind blew harder and he felt SHE was near. Yes it had to be HER...HIS HEER. It couldn't be his illusion. He felt her fragrance in the air.


And there she entered draped in a light blue saree with hairs open. She has changed a bit...actually a lot, in these past 1 year. She was not the Heer he knew. Though she looked as beautiful as before but the sparkle in her eyes was missing. The shine of joy and liveliness were not there anymore and he knew he was the reason behind it.


His chain of thoughts was broken by Soni's voice. "Heer these the two kids Tanu and Sangeeta for whom you have to design the dresses", Soni completed.


No sooner had Tanu turned her face Heer frozed at her place. "Tanu"!!!, Heer managed to whisper.


"Heer mami", Tanu screamed and immediately launched herself into her mami's arms. Heer seemed startle a bit. She didn't expect that was coming. Till then she didn't notice Prem either. "That little kid recognized her mami, he thought and smiled.



"Mami??" both Soni and the other guardian asked in utter confusion.


"She must have mistaken...I mean may be I look like her mami that's why".., Heer tried to clear the confusion and it seemed that both the other parties were quite convinced. Tanu was a little kid after all and she could do such mistakes...so no big deal.


"It's ok no problem...bachche hain galtiyan hoti rehti hai...btw Heer he is Mr. Anand Chaudhry, Sangeeta's father", Soni introduced the first guardian to Heer and she greeted him with a handshake.


"And there he is Mr. Prem Juneja, Tanu's uncle", Soni finished the other guardian's introduction and Heer immediately turned towards the window. There HE is...standing by the window all handsome as well. But wait, today there something is lacking. He looked pale and lonely.


"No Heer don't give in", her rational mind warned her and immediately the memories of that dreadful day flashed in front of her eyes. But soon she was snapped out of her thoughts when she felt a voice was calling her. She looked at her left and realized that Soni was calling her.


"Heer where were you? I have been calling you for almost 10 minutes", Soni told her.


"No..nothing...I was just...leave it..you tell", she fumbled not knowing what to say.


"Ok so I was telling that we only have 6 days before the final round...so hurry up", Soni reminded Heer to which she nodded and immediately left the place.


From the moment he had seen her he was finding a chance to talk to her...just one chance. But seemed she didn't even want his shadow to cross her path. She avoided him in every possibly way she could. 4 days have passed and his restlessness was increasing. He informed Kulraj and Kiran about Heer and they had advised him to talk to her. He himself was wanting the same thing but not getting a chance. But not today; he had decided that today he would talk to her at any cost.


"Heer", a voice called her and she stopped at her track. She turned and saw him standing in front of her...face to face in the parking area of her building.


"What is he doing here?" she thought.

"I need to talk to you...plzzz don't ignore me...plzz", pleaded the voice.


"We have nothing to talk Prem", she replied avoiding his gaze.

"I have", he sounded determine.


Heer didn't want to create a scene in the parking area which will soon be filled with other people who would come here to park their car. So she invited him to her flat. They got inside her flat and immediately the next question that greeted him was "What do you want Prem...now?"


"I am sorry Heer", he replied looking straight into her eyes.


"Thik hai maaf kiya", she smiled and replied.


"Like that?" He asked being confused.

"Then what should I do?" she asked.


"Heer you should scold me...you should be angry with me like anything...you should slap me, beat me anything you want", he sounded desperate.


"But why...why should I do any of these?"


"Because I was wrong and you know that".


"No I only know that I was wrongly accused of a crime I could never dream of doing. You know what Prem since the day I left the house I had kept asking myself what wrong I had done to deserve that", she broke down in front of him not being able to control anymore.


"Heer I...", he couldn't complete as Heer cut him off.


"Plzzz chale jao yaha se Prem..tumhe meri kasam", she almost whispered.


Prem stood numb there...this was not supposed to happen. He was sure he could pacify her but her swear; he couldn't break it. He looks at her one last time and with that he left without any argument. That night neither Prem nor Heer slept a bit.


Since that day Prem hadn't seen her. He had to apologize for his behaviour but she never showed up. The final round of the competition ended and Tanu became the first runner up. And they leave for Ambala.

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I knew she would never come...rishton par se uska viswas tuta tha us din", Kulraj lamented over the dreadful day.

"Kulraj humein Prem ko sambhalna hai...tum aisi baate mat karo abhi...ye socho Heer ko kaise wapas laya jaye", Kiran expressed his concern.


All the while Prem only sat there listening to their conversation but not really giving attention. His mind was there in Heer's thoughts.


"Prem, Kulraj placed a hand on his shoulder. He immediately hugged her. "Di I can't live without her...I am dying every single day", he cried on his elder sister's shoulder.


"No Prem don't say like that...hum Heer se baat karenge usse maafi mangenge...wo aa jayegi Prem", Kulraj tried to console him.


"No di you won't do anything...now I will do what I should have done earlier", Prem announced.


"Kya matlab kya karega tu?" Kulraj asked not understanding anything.


"You will know soon".


With that Prem stormed out of the house leaving a confused Kiran and Kulraj beind.


"Ma ma", shouted Prem as soon as he entered Juneja mansion.


"What happened Prem?" Gayatri answered looking at him.


"I need to talk to you about something", Prem informed.


"Haa bol", Gayatri replied.


Prem told her everything about his encounter with Heer in Delhi.


"Mujhe pata tha ye ladki tera peecha itni asani se nahi chhodegi...bhar diye na tere kaan mere khilaf...so what did she tell you kab wapas aana chahti hai?" Gayatri couldn't control her anger and hatred.


Prem smiled. "No ma she didn't say anything against you nor did she want to come back", he replied. "In fact it was me who want her to come back...I pleaded to her but she said no".


"So you have come here to defend her, haven't you?" she asked sarcastically.


"No ma I have come here to inform you one thing...that I am leaving this house...i am going to my wife..my Heer", he replied shocking everyone who had already come out hearing their shouts.


"Prem ye...", Gayatri couldn't complete as Prem interrupted her. "No ma not today...today you have to listen to me...do you remember you said I couldn't see my sister's pain because I was a step brother...I couldn't see your pain because I was a step son. But let me tell you ma I have never think of you as a step mother...in fact I always considered you more than my own mother...lekin main bhul gaya tha sautela kabhi saga nahi ban sakta. You said Heer should leave this house because she was Nihal's sister...then why not Meher? She was Nihal's siser too...wasn't she?"


Gayatri stood there speechless not knowing what to say.


"Koi jawab nahi hai?? Main deta hun jawab...because Meher was Preet's wife and Preet was your own son...your own blood. But Heer...she was my wife...your step son's wife. So obviously she had to pay...isn't it?"


Receiving no response from Gayatri he continued, "But now it's enough ma...I am tired of proving my loyalty...you not once thought of my happiness before sending Heer from this house...you knew how much I loved her. Today only because of her I am here with all of you and you never think of that. But now I have decided that my wife needs me and I need her. So I am going to her...forever".


Without giving anyone any chance to oppose he rushed towards his room and within 15 minues came back with a bag in his hand. He went to his father and folded his hands, "Bauji forgive me...I couldn't become a good son...I should have supported you in your old age but I am leaving you all alone".


Lalit held his hands, "I am proud of you Prem. You should have done this before...but still it's not too late. Go beta...I am with you".

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In Delhi

Heer was about to unlock the door of her apartment but suddenly noticed someone at the gate. It was HIM. She went to him with slow steps and saw him sleeping on a wooden bench in sitting position. She slightly touched him and he woke up feeling a touch.


"Heer tum aa gayi..i was waiting for you", Prem said excitedly.


"What are you doing here?" she couldn't help but ask.


"I..." he couldn't complete as the rain started. As soon as the rain drops touched Prem's body he started sneezing nonstop.


"Come inside", she almost ordered him and entered the house. Prem smiled and followed her. Heer gave a towel and asked him to dry his hair. While he was drying his hair Heer went and changed into a dry saree.


"Ab bolo tum yahan kyun aaye ho?" she asked as soon as she entered the hall. He remained silent.


"Prem..." she was interrupted by Prem. "I have left Juneja mansion", he paused and waited for her reaction. Shock was visible in her eyes. "What...what did you just say?" she asked. Though she knew she heard it right she again wanted to confirm it.


"You heard it right", Prem replied in a calm tone.


"But why?" Heer again asked wanting to know the reason behind his huge decision.


"Kyuki main thak gaya hun Heer...thak gaya hun maa ko ye sabit karte karte ke main unka apna beta hun sautela nahi", his voice choked. "Mujhe tumhari zaroorat hai Heer...I need you...ab jiya nahi jaata tumhare bina", he broke down in front of her.


Seeing him like that would be the last thing on earth that she could want...so vulnerable...so fragile. Her heart was bleeding seeing him in so much pain. She felt like hugging him tightly and kissing his pain away as she used to do but her brain stopped her.


"I am dying Heer...every moment without you", he completed his sentence and that was it for Heer. No she couldn't do it anymore. Yes she was hurt by him but the pain and hurt which she was seeing in his eyes were more than that of hers. She couldn't see him in that state.


She slowly kneeled before him and took his tears stained face in between her palms. She joined her forehead with his and kissed on his eyes before hugging him as tightly as possible. They cried their hearts out. After what felt like ages they broke the hug and Prem looked into her eyes.


"I Love You Heer...plzz come back", he pleaded.


She wasn't sure...she needed to know something. "But..." she paused.


"Don't worry I am not going to repeat the same mistake of killing myself. You are my life Heer and let you go is like killing my own soul", he answered her unanswered questions."Aur haa hum ab se yahi rahenge...ek saath".


"Gharwale?" she asked not wanting to separate him from his family.


"Bauji, Kul di, Preet-Meher and Harman knew and they have no problem with it".


Heer smiled through tears and nodded. Prem kissed on her forehead, eyes, nose tip and finally captured those soft rose petals with his rough ones and sealed this moment with a kiss.



Done with the sequel. Plzz do read and share your precious views regarding it. We'll be waiting for your feedbacks.


Thank You,

Love,

Sunayana





Edited by Sunzz.Harshiti - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
#13
awww this is so sweet! gosh i hated this track in the show...just when veera was becoming positive they killed her character off and the whole g-mom becoming negative was such a buzz kill...but your story was so nicely written...beautiful work!
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Originally posted by: JCluvs srk

awww this is so sweet! gosh i hated this track in the show...just when veera was becoming positive they killed her character off and the whole g-mom becoming negative was such a buzz kill...but your story was so nicely written...beautiful work!



Thanks dear for commenting... glad that you liked it. I hated this track too so tried to write a little version of my own.
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Posted: 5 years ago
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Wow this topic sounds fab πŸ˜ƒ
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Originally posted by: AASUS

Wow this topic sounds fab πŸ˜ƒ


😊Thanks

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πŸ€— will chk this one out 😎
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wow page 1 "Promise" is an awesome OS 😳 True that side of PH never been shown in show cz I think producer forgets or just love to show fight and misunderstandings in drama rather than happy scenes πŸ˜†

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Great job with dialogues. So sweet and caring. H2H is great.
πŸ˜† Prem is many things but definitely he doesn't trust Heer enough and only values his step mother. He has been very unfair to Heer all through out. It is not how majority of fans think as they like Prem a lot.

Heer is too trusting blindly to everyone - it is her huge weakness.


Anyhow Chahat is unlike both and is very bright 😎
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Posted: 5 years ago
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wow me on page 2😎
woah well written Sunzz πŸ€—

yes it's a bitter moment - very looong moment betw Premeer.
G3 hit his weakness always so so sad and he falls for it.

Heer poor lil soul. Lob you Heer 😭
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Posted: 5 years ago
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Originally posted by: AASUS

wow page 1 "Promise" is an awesome OS 😳 True that side of PH never been shown in show cz I think producer forgets or just love to show fight and misunderstandings in drama rather than happy scenes πŸ˜†

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Great job with dialogues. So sweet and caring. H2H is great.
πŸ˜† Prem is many things but definitely he doesn't trust Heer enough and only values his step mother. He has been very unfair to Heer all through out. It is not how majority of fans think as they like Prem a lot.

Heer is too trusting blindly to everyone - it is her huge weakness.


Anyhow Chahat is unlike both and is very bright 😎


Thank you so much Athi for your wonderful commentsπŸ€— I am glad that you liked it😊

Yes I think that the creatives had really forgotten to show the love and trust and support of PremEer after leap. They just destroyed it so much that I myself have decided to write itπŸ˜‰

About Prem Heer they are the reason of their own downfall ...at least a bit if not fully
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