1. Arnav trying to take off the tie- imagine what the driver would have thought 😆 I like how nervous he is! Such a contrast to the usual ASR 😆 All because of his girlfriend's parents.2. His comment about paying attention to the goofy guy instead of making out with Khushi. LOLOL. Poor Arnav 😆
3. I really like the initial awkwardness- so on point.
4. Also, I totally have this image of Garima in my mind and it matched perfectly.
5. I really like Arnav noticing the looks exchanged between Khushi's parents. It's kind of reflective of him and Khushi too, in a way.
6. Awwwh, I LOVE their conversation about Khushi. People bond over so many things, and mutual relationships are one of them- I like how they exchange stories, and how Arnav realizes how close she and her parents are.
7. LOVE the shaadi conversation- I like how Arnav brings it up, but even more, I like how her father responds. You can really see how much he loves his daughter through this conversation- I like the guilt aspect too, because it seems like such a real emotion. And you know, you do real really well. Ha! Look! There's real and really right next to each other. That's kind of cool.
8. Also: transition from Khushi's parents --> Uncle and Aunty. A+. So smooth!
9. I really like how he just misses her randomly. When he's busy, when he isn't busy- he has these moments that's like "I wish she was here", and it's so honest and adorable.
10. I love how he's staying with her parents.
11. The phone conversation that happens in the middle of the night (whattay coincidence 😆)- Di, you do them so well. Their relationship is absolutely fantastic. "Innocent and pure" 😆 😆 I love this conversation!
12. I LOVE how Arnav just notices things about her. I like how he sees her, and just takes the time to observe her, just take her in. He's just so content being in her presence- and there isn't any interaction needed. And their reunion! Beautiful Di. I liked this a lot.
13. THE ENDING. Oh my god the ending. His emotions are so poignant- you capture them just right! AND THAT ENDING LINE. You and your one liners, you know how I love them.
I hate you for ending on a cliffhanger. AGAIN. Damn you.
Honestly, I think this is one of your best chapters. It takes skill to write convincingly from the perspective of another character entirely, and make it sound natural- and what a change from the last one. I like how he's so confident of his feelings, of his relationship with her.
Kickass, as always.
Hamesha,
R.
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