PriDa FF: Fatal Covetion UPD Pt. 16 pg 63 05.05.12 - Page 44

Originally posted by: sonyo

Hey MaHam, what an update.. didnt we all were craving for this😛..

Well, all your updates are awesome but this one was something more than that.. All in all PriDa, putting the story slowly but steadily and smoothly bringing the thoughts, realization of the love they shared long time back, detailed beautifully each and everything... Loved these part to bits ❤️..

@ part 13A; Pri in his thoughts and trying to figuring the new relation Payal and Damz sharing.. loved how he was joining the pieces and feeling his possessiveness towards her or did he called himself selfish.. that was better, he should be selfish now, afterall he has suffered alot and need Damz in his life to bring back the real person in him😊..

PriDa conversatin leading from Payal's pointing.. loved whole part.. such an adorable write up.. bit hesitant but still in mood to tease Mr.Pri, and Pri so much interested to know what she thinks of him or wanted her to remember something she has forgotten.. And Damz is Damz.. Pri's Damz, read and said what her heart said.. so right she was.. loved her babbling😊😊..

@ 13B: Loved this lunch scene .. except the last part where Pri was embarassed from his dark secret and confusions leading to Damz.. indeed, you have put this up brilliantly...

Talking about the same person and Damz, just coz of her current status.. was not aware he was all over talking about her.. felt painful for Pri.. Loved this convo and Damini interested to knowing it all... so well written👏👏..

@ 13C: and last one.. definitely, why to say it again and again.. Loved it.. loved how Damz cared for him, made him sit for his dinner, heated food for him and watched as he was taking it.. awww😍. loved it completely.. and there lil bits convo..

Its brilliant how you put Damz deatils of mind as well, what she feels, trying to understand what real Pri is.. even going to tiny lil things, calling her name, giving Damz a sudden imaginative feeling or a known feeling.. and trying to read his eyes, that changes to say so much but unable to.. just brilliant and superb..

thoroughly enjoyed all the three parts and thanks alot for giving such an aweesome updates filled with lots of PriDa packages..

Waiting what happens in beach scene or something she learns about her past soon or that will be terrible for Pri.. when she comes to know..

Eagerly waiting for the next to happen soon..

Ohh well... this is so long overdue that I wont even insult you with an apology.

hey Maham, hows you? ok not here to ask this.. your update, rather huge update.. though i didnt complained regarding last chapter, that was also long long one.. but this is just brilliant.. absolutely brilliant one👏👏.. it amazes me how every time you come with with more perfection, not only fulfiling our expectations with huge updates and PriDa moments but also taking every piece, every bit of emotions, feelings, the inner thoughts with the beautiful detailing, you do it. No rushing, no tidbits like bringing new entrants or depending on them, that usually happens in *&^%^ soaps.. 😊

Damini-Payal relationship.. simply love the affection they both have.. the connection leading to mother daughter conversation refered to the drawing that was so well written and heart felt... neatly and very beautifully put up everything..

Beach scene was just so so adorable... Pri does tries to act like a kid or he is. hehe.. loved the lil arguements btw both😳.. really had a fun reading them seemed as i was watching all though.. laughing, eating and enjoying view of beautiful beach, the sunset convo and playing around with the water.Everything was going so perfectly and smoothly, but sudden change in Prithvi's behaviour and his emotions pouring with all that guilt & pain leading to anger that is uncontrollable for him. With the every update of yours really feel very bad for him and have same fear btw when and how Damini will come know to know the dark past and what her reaction will be..

Originally posted by: Sparklin_star

So many emotions in this update . . . . Damini-Payal reln ship . . . Prithvi's mischief . . . Payal's innocence n finally . . Prithvi's anger . . U potrayed them all in a very subtle way . . .needless to say I've always been a fan of ur writin Skills . . . Cant wait 4 d next update . . . N hey who says u never live to our expectations? For me its always like nothin can get better than this n then u update d next time . . Provin me wrong completely . . . How in d world do u manage to churn out so many emotions , details so perfectly n smoothly is beyond me . . . N I really mean it

Originally posted by: pia09

Hi Maham, read ur ff from chapter 1 till chapter 14d. u ve written so perfect. i was able to visualise each n every scene of prida n payal. especially in last update, u have described the emotions of prida is awesum. luved it. pl. continue soon. tc

Originally posted by: Maz.

The queen of angst shall forever rule :P

Darn it...the poor guy is a complete mess...I so feel for him...he needs a little respite...

Lovely analogies with the seas and sunsets...strangely I realized I am a sunset lover...now what does imply?...hmm I wonder..😆

Great write up..

Originally posted by: amiya121

Maham !!

Thanks for such an AWESOME ...Absolutely FANTASTIC Update !! 👏👏

The first part ... Damini and Payal's interaction is Outstanding ... reallly Tugs at the Heart ⭐️⭐️

You have portrayed sooo Beautifully the Pure , Unselfish , Unconditional Love that only a child can give... and how it has filled up the Loneliness in Damini's life and Heart !! SUPERB !! ⭐️⭐️

Shall come to the remaining parts later 😊

Love

Amiya